Mike And The Tree
An inchworm decides to leave his home to explore the World85 total reviews
Comment from EllenV
Such a fun poem. Children will love it and so will little old ladies like me. Enjoyed the play on words with Missouri and misery. Thanks for putting a smile on my face today, Eric!
Best Regards,
Ellen
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Such a fun poem. Children will love it and so will little old ladies like me. Enjoyed the play on words with Missouri and misery. Thanks for putting a smile on my face today, Eric!
Best Regards,
Ellen
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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My pleasure, Ellen.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo EricDaGoose ....
The story you have written is enjoyable and easy to read and understand but, from a poetic point of view, there are several lines where the metre and thus the rhythm could be improved.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I personally would use capital letters for Inchworm ... Bee ... etc.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
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Hullo EricDaGoose ....
The story you have written is enjoyable and easy to read and understand but, from a poetic point of view, there are several lines where the metre and thus the rhythm could be improved.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I personally would use capital letters for Inchworm ... Bee ... etc.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from Frank Atwood
I will say this is very very different. Yet your tale of an inch-worm that travels to see the world shows the smallness of the world we really live as many never pass the city limits of their own town, let alone state. For happiness is knowing one has the choice/freedom to travel or not and thus the inch-worm had it hard till he returned back to his own world within the tree he was raised in. Simpleness is where one seeks it and we don't have to go that far at all. God bless and keep up the great writing.
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I will say this is very very different. Yet your tale of an inch-worm that travels to see the world shows the smallness of the world we really live as many never pass the city limits of their own town, let alone state. For happiness is knowing one has the choice/freedom to travel or not and thus the inch-worm had it hard till he returned back to his own world within the tree he was raised in. Simpleness is where one seeks it and we don't have to go that far at all. God bless and keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from bhogg
What a cute post. A common theme, well told through the eyes of an inchworm named Mike. I've been fortunate in my life to go many places, but my favorite place is home (wherever my wife is). Bill
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What a cute post. A common theme, well told through the eyes of an inchworm named Mike. I've been fortunate in my life to go many places, but my favorite place is home (wherever my wife is). Bill
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from Anindita123
This is a very nice story conveying that home is the sweetest place in the world. I like how the character was an inchworm. It showed even the smallest things can accomplish big things. The poem has a certain catchy tone to it to which I found myself making a rhythm to. I really liked it.
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This is a very nice story conveying that home is the sweetest place in the world. I like how the character was an inchworm. It showed even the smallest things can accomplish big things. The poem has a certain catchy tone to it to which I found myself making a rhythm to. I really liked it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow what a journey loved the picture and the journey you take us on and in the end there is no place like home thanks gazzagodbod
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wow what a journey loved the picture and the journey you take us on and in the end there is no place like home thanks gazzagodbod
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from Idamarty
This was adorable and yet so profound. We are never happy where we are until we have seen what is on the other side. It is only then that we realise we are not so bad off. Also a home is what you make of it, no matter what it looks like on the outside. Thanks so much for sharing...blessings.
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This was adorable and yet so profound. We are never happy where we are until we have seen what is on the other side. It is only then that we realise we are not so bad off. Also a home is what you make of it, no matter what it looks like on the outside. Thanks so much for sharing...blessings.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from Deniz22
The grass is always greener in the other fellows yard and there's no place like home all rolled into on sweet thought. Well expressed and as comfortable as easing one's feet into an old par of slippers. Good job.
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The grass is always greener in the other fellows yard and there's no place like home all rolled into on sweet thought. Well expressed and as comfortable as easing one's feet into an old par of slippers. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from Nebukadneser
What an absolutely gem of a poem. I must say it's been a long time since I've enjoyed a poem like this. It was delightful in its simplicity, but yet wise in its profoundness, teaching us the age old lesson that the grass is not necessarily greener on the other side. I loved the way you stretched the poem as tall as the brown and ugly tree.
You're a star
Well done
Nebukadneser
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What an absolutely gem of a poem. I must say it's been a long time since I've enjoyed a poem like this. It was delightful in its simplicity, but yet wise in its profoundness, teaching us the age old lesson that the grass is not necessarily greener on the other side. I loved the way you stretched the poem as tall as the brown and ugly tree.
You're a star
Well done
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from poetbear
This is clever,intelligent, amusing, creative, and original.
Reads well and make sense.
It will be enjoyed and become a classic.
It truly idssd a gem that is easy to read and enjoy.
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This is clever,intelligent, amusing, creative, and original.
Reads well and make sense.
It will be enjoyed and become a classic.
It truly idssd a gem that is easy to read and enjoy.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
