Dude Process
Everything that is right shall be wrong, and wrong right...9 total reviews
Comment from Fiona Hymn
Yikes. As a woman I am trying to grasp the intentions of the woman scorned. A fine line society walks with the invention of "politacally correct". A well intended code of conduct that is surely open to abuse. Your poem reflects a lot of bewilderment over the actions of the woman in question; an altruistic offering turned into a moment of opportunity with alterior motive. Emotion is strong and the imagery prevails in the work. The overall tone is consistent. The written work has an even flow to the words. Very well written.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2013
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Yikes. As a woman I am trying to grasp the intentions of the woman scorned. A fine line society walks with the invention of "politacally correct". A well intended code of conduct that is surely open to abuse. Your poem reflects a lot of bewilderment over the actions of the woman in question; an altruistic offering turned into a moment of opportunity with alterior motive. Emotion is strong and the imagery prevails in the work. The overall tone is consistent. The written work has an even flow to the words. Very well written.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2013
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The entire story that lead to this poem's inspiration is in my final chapters of my biography, "Performance Problems - My life! LOL Footsteps and Gefilte Fish Parts 2 and 3.
I find politically correct is a bludgeon used in such a way, it can easily be adapted for unjust purposes. Having suffered at the hands of writing love poetry before, it is amazing that something done with decent and right intentions are always met with accusations and punishments that don't fit the crime, if you consider a love poem a crime in the first place.
I really enjoyed this review and thank you for it and your compliments. Yikes, is right, but should someone deserve such a tribute again, I will attempt it again. -Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
I can feel the raw emotions in every line of this poem. The site won't let me give you a six that this deserves. Being accused of perversion and lewd intentions is not you and whoever said that should be taken to task. Good alliteration in sure/she, has/her and soul/stripped. Your rhyming couplets are strong and the flow is even. I like the theme but sorry this happened to you. Well done and please accept these six stars ******....chey
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Hi Mike,
I can feel the raw emotions in every line of this poem. The site won't let me give you a six that this deserves. Being accused of perversion and lewd intentions is not you and whoever said that should be taken to task. Good alliteration in sure/she, has/her and soul/stripped. Your rhyming couplets are strong and the flow is even. I like the theme but sorry this happened to you. Well done and please accept these six stars ******....chey
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Awwww! Thanks for the good intentions. Well I have a feeling the last chapter of the bio has hit the museum circuit here. This poem is also beat poet approved.
It's just one of those things, I wished the outcome was better, but I don't regret writing the poem because I know what I saw and still feels she deserves it.
I loved this review and thank you for it and the compliments! Mike
Comment from ashimpandit
Dear friends,
"Dude Process" is a very good Commentary and Philosophy Poetry of the literature.I just read it and feel very mindlessly.You chose a very good concept and make it successful.So thank you.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Dear friends,
"Dude Process" is a very good Commentary and Philosophy Poetry of the literature.I just read it and feel very mindlessly.You chose a very good concept and make it successful.So thank you.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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In the United States, a lot of emphasis is placed on due processes; where one is presumed innocent until beyond reasonable doubt they are proven guilty. Also one has the chance to not only face, but rebut their accusers. In recent times this is more or less considered, only an ideal as beurocity becomes more important as principle, where only injustice is served.
The way things insist in my life, I feel it is best not to worry about things and present what I find as a consideration. I thank you very much for reviewing my work. Mike
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello Mike K2. Yeah, I wish I could also send poetry to every girl I meet, most of them would be poems about what I really thought about some of them. Doing this, I would be accused of threats heh heh so we're kind of in the same boat. Your poem is actually a good self-eulogy to one whose been wrongfully accused. Take care Mike K2 and I guess this is a learning lesson for both of us that its best to focus not on individual poems but writing on behalf of the masses. As a suggestion, your next poem could be about "A person need to feel so victimized from such a small thing that that person gets more attention then from someone who was really victimized." Another example of Terrorism in the form of a domestic crime going unanswered. Cheers.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Hello Mike K2. Yeah, I wish I could also send poetry to every girl I meet, most of them would be poems about what I really thought about some of them. Doing this, I would be accused of threats heh heh so we're kind of in the same boat. Your poem is actually a good self-eulogy to one whose been wrongfully accused. Take care Mike K2 and I guess this is a learning lesson for both of us that its best to focus not on individual poems but writing on behalf of the masses. As a suggestion, your next poem could be about "A person need to feel so victimized from such a small thing that that person gets more attention then from someone who was really victimized." Another example of Terrorism in the form of a domestic crime going unanswered. Cheers.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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In regards to victimization, I could cry the loudest, but simply appreciate the dynamics that are offered to an individual life. My next poem will most likely be about the exclusion of an individual that is willing to contribute to it, the rarest form of fortune ... True love.
I transcended terrorism when I understood the greatest enemy is oneselves's fears. Cheers! and I love this review. Mike
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem effectively addresses a REAL problem in our paranoid society--the total misunderstanding of good intentions. This problem holds true in other areas too. One day at the park, I saw a kid with untied shoelaces. I was about to offer to tie them--then didn't for fear of being thought a pervert! Good job
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Your well-written poem effectively addresses a REAL problem in our paranoid society--the total misunderstanding of good intentions. This problem holds true in other areas too. One day at the park, I saw a kid with untied shoelaces. I was about to offer to tie them--then didn't for fear of being thought a pervert! Good job
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Wow! I think you hit the nail on the head and love this review and thank you for it! Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all. Pick up the pieces (or in this case words) and go on.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all. Pick up the pieces (or in this case words) and go on.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Na, just have some good ole fun! I would consider it an answered prayer if she got the courage to understand what about her I feel is great. The world needs women such as you who have the courage to be themselves, without worldly contrivances to hold them back. Much as my life is, that doesn't happen without the right people being in the world when they are needed. The poet in my soul tells me, don't worry about licking the wounds, just set about making people think, especially those in the realm of your life you really do care for.
No pieces, just my pure spirit and may other people figure out what to do with their pieces! I find this such an endearing review, I thank you for it! Mike
Comment from el twelve
every piece of work and every eye that reads will have different implications, as long as you know in your heart that there was nothing wrong with what you wrote your intentions were proper, keep writing, usually these things aren't personal they come from the shi. that is happening on the other persons side. take care
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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every piece of work and every eye that reads will have different implications, as long as you know in your heart that there was nothing wrong with what you wrote your intentions were proper, keep writing, usually these things aren't personal they come from the shi. that is happening on the other persons side. take care
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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This review makes me hope she is spying on me! There are those moments we all feel small and are overwhelmed, which I consider the spice of a good life. I thank you for the compliments, advice and this review. Mike
Comment from Rondeno
I like your poem very much. When I was younger, it shocked and saddened me that a woman would regard as ridiculous or embarrassing a poem that I had quarried from my soul, especially for her. So I know the feeling! Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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I like your poem very much. When I was younger, it shocked and saddened me that a woman would regard as ridiculous or embarrassing a poem that I had quarried from my soul, especially for her. So I know the feeling! Well done.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed this review and thank you very much for it as well, the compliments. Mike
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
good consonance of P sounds in preserving importance
It truly is unfortunate when one's intentions are misinterpreted and you express that well in this poem
I'm sorry you were misunderstood
good alliteration in took his time
and in soul stripped
good consonance of V sounds in alive by vulture
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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solid use of rhyming couplets
good consonance of P sounds in preserving importance
It truly is unfortunate when one's intentions are misinterpreted and you express that well in this poem
I'm sorry you were misunderstood
good alliteration in took his time
and in soul stripped
good consonance of V sounds in alive by vulture
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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It was one of those deals as my involvement with them gave me a very good story to closeout and conclude my biography, but I did asked God not to make it the perfect one. I stated another injustice involving a poem regarding the expression of love and actually it was a thank you, which almost cost me my house. In the end, it is the chief reason I entered into poetry, which has provided me with what money is purported to supply ... And good thing too! I love my life, despite the hardships and met so many great people.
I really enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. This poem wanted to write itself in 11, 12 syllable counts, until the end which seemed to prefer more of a turn to add a bit of poignancy to it.
