All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "It's Time"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from BLACKDYKE
Wow, such a romantic interlude
as the music is interlaced with
a lesson on instruments. Sexy picture to back up the lesson.
Very cleverly done in monotone
and sex. Certainly no complaints here. Eric
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Wow, such a romantic interlude
as the music is interlaced with
a lesson on instruments. Sexy picture to back up the lesson.
Very cleverly done in monotone
and sex. Certainly no complaints here. Eric
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Glad no complaints dear! :)
Comment from Just2Write
Smokin' hot and extremely well-written Free Verse.
Lots of subtle internal rhyme:
down your white satin gown,
strapped 'n wrapped
toes / bows
knees, to please
haze / laze
surprise as my disguise
and perhaps more that I missed, so cleverly tucked into the poem the way they were.
And lots of breathy 'h' sounds to add to the sexy feel - Even the clarinet, with its woodwind breathy sound.
Great presentation, and exceptional write, dear poet.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Smokin' hot and extremely well-written Free Verse.
Lots of subtle internal rhyme:
down your white satin gown,
strapped 'n wrapped
toes / bows
knees, to please
haze / laze
surprise as my disguise
and perhaps more that I missed, so cleverly tucked into the poem the way they were.
And lots of breathy 'h' sounds to add to the sexy feel - Even the clarinet, with its woodwind breathy sound.
Great presentation, and exceptional write, dear poet.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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we LIKE "smokin' hot!" thx so much for your lovely 'six' my dear!
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A very nice piece. Your description of the passion was great. You captured the heat of the moment and set the stage in a very smooth and dramatic fashion that carried the reading on and on, and on.
Nice job . Robin Gilmor
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A very nice piece. Your description of the passion was great. You captured the heat of the moment and set the stage in a very smooth and dramatic fashion that carried the reading on and on, and on.
Nice job . Robin Gilmor
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much Robin!
Comment from prayingpoet
You are very creative with your word choice. Great poetry and content. "teasing, scarlet-tipped and polished toes" well thought out with great flow.
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You are very creative with your word choice. Great poetry and content. "teasing, scarlet-tipped and polished toes" well thought out with great flow.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much pp!
Comment from humpwhistle
Actually, I'm thinking me and Bacall! Excellent play on the black and white, film, jazz, give and take in the bedroom. You play the music riffs with style. Clarinet, huh?
'to honeycomb down your white satin gown'--I can hear that soft satiny rustle. Why do expect nothing but skin beneath?
Excellent job.
Peace, Lee
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Actually, I'm thinking me and Bacall! Excellent play on the black and white, film, jazz, give and take in the bedroom. You play the music riffs with style. Clarinet, huh?
'to honeycomb down your white satin gown'--I can hear that soft satiny rustle. Why do expect nothing but skin beneath?
Excellent job.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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bless you, Lee! did you ever see undies from this era? quite frightening! skin is best! A special thank you for a lovely SIX on this one!!!
Comment from snemes
Whew! You did not skimp on the passion. The poem is sexy, classy, and SMOOTH. You even found the perfect picture to go with it. Like confetti of desire to cling close and stick to every satin'd curve you own. Wow! It's time. Yes, time for me to take a cold shower.
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Whew! You did not skimp on the passion. The poem is sexy, classy, and SMOOTH. You even found the perfect picture to go with it. Like confetti of desire to cling close and stick to every satin'd curve you own. Wow! It's time. Yes, time for me to take a cold shower.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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bless you for heating up on this one my dear! it was such a fun write! and a special double triple whammy thank you for your lovely SIX!!!!!
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. Both tell of romancing the lady from afar. You set the mood just right. Music is the charm you used that night. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Both tell of romancing the lady from afar. You set the mood just right. Music is the charm you used that night. Great work.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much elliejean!
Comment from Jaq Cee
Loved this poem very much. Flow and rhythm are fantastic. It brings you to a crescendo and then holds you back, only to take you there again. Best of luck. :) Jaq x
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Loved this poem very much. Flow and rhythm are fantastic. It brings you to a crescendo and then holds you back, only to take you there again. Best of luck. :) Jaq x
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Jac!
Comment from dancerwriter
A very alluring, compulsive message to one who listens to you.Many words of desire but not quite ready for passion.I love the words, "no yet" repeated at the end of the first verses, until the last four powerful lines, to "it's time!
The gorgeous lady inthe picture,no doubt is wearing the gown- for how long! Good work.Lesley.j.
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A very alluring, compulsive message to one who listens to you.Many words of desire but not quite ready for passion.I love the words, "no yet" repeated at the end of the first verses, until the last four powerful lines, to "it's time!
The gorgeous lady inthe picture,no doubt is wearing the gown- for how long! Good work.Lesley.j.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much dw!!
Comment from Enrique28
A superbly sensuous verse that streams all the way through with lovely poetic tones. An atmosphere beautifully captured with your repeated "not yet, not yet...", and wonderfully concluded in the end. A most expressive presentation. Great stuff!
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A superbly sensuous verse that streams all the way through with lovely poetic tones. An atmosphere beautifully captured with your repeated "not yet, not yet...", and wonderfully concluded in the end. A most expressive presentation. Great stuff!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
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thank you so much Enrique!
