A Cinderella for Me
Aiden learns a valuable lesson19 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I am laughing at the humor of the Rulebook
I also like the poetic stanzas
I know, sweetie - add comma for direct address
What a delightful and naturally compassionate grandchild :-) A lovely story :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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I am laughing at the humor of the Rulebook
I also like the poetic stanzas
I know, sweetie - add comma for direct address
What a delightful and naturally compassionate grandchild :-) A lovely story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Make sure to follow that rule when the opportunity arises. Thanks for the correction and for reading this short piece. I have another on the works.. Thanks for the generous rating, John
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello judg. This is a beautifully written story. I could feel the love you put into it and felt happy that such a small little girl understood the Christmas spirit and the spirit of giving. Beautiful! xxoo Kiwi
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Hello judg. This is a beautifully written story. I could feel the love you put into it and felt happy that such a small little girl understood the Christmas spirit and the spirit of giving. Beautiful! xxoo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you kiwi for reading and sharing. I do appreciate it very much. John
Comment from Rondeno
This is a delightful, heart-warming story with a strong moral. You have written it skilfully, with more than a hint of humor.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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This is a delightful, heart-warming story with a strong moral. You have written it skilfully, with more than a hint of humor.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thank you very much Ron for stopping to read and the great commentary. The stories come easily when I have this beautiful grandchild to inspire me. Once again, thanks ... John
Comment from Pen&Ink
A great little story with a great big moral. Nicely told from the child's perspective. Good use of simple conversations displaying some deep thinking on the part of the child. A lesson valid all year, but especially poignant in the current season.
Ray
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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A great little story with a great big moral. Nicely told from the child's perspective. Good use of simple conversations displaying some deep thinking on the part of the child. A lesson valid all year, but especially poignant in the current season.
Ray
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thank you Ray. You got the point and perspective of the story, some others did not. I appreciate your time in reading and commenting. John
Comment from mtrybak
I LOVED the title of the story and the story itself. It's not unusual for kids to react exactly as Aiden did. That's the beauty of the young and innocent. Nobody's taken away things from them yet. I just got out of the hospital and am headed to over Yahoo. Just like this story will stay with me for a while, so will you and our friendship!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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I LOVED the title of the story and the story itself. It's not unusual for kids to react exactly as Aiden did. That's the beauty of the young and innocent. Nobody's taken away things from them yet. I just got out of the hospital and am headed to over Yahoo. Just like this story will stay with me for a while, so will you and our friendship!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Thanks Michele... I appreciate your reading and your great comments. Hospital???? E-mail me... I'll check for it in the AM when i do the papers....
Johnny
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Yes, hospital. I'm still working on the reply to the e-mail you sent me and called me a freaking Princess. I'm just going to add on to that reply. Did you think I forgot about you?
Comment from Thomas Raine
What a nice story, it's sweet to see kids make choices like that, and it goes to show you the power of the human heart. The best joys on holidays is indeed in the giving, not the receiving, at least for me. There is a lot of pleasure in showing your loved ones how you feel.
Thanks for sharing,
- TR
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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What a nice story, it's sweet to see kids make choices like that, and it goes to show you the power of the human heart. The best joys on holidays is indeed in the giving, not the receiving, at least for me. There is a lot of pleasure in showing your loved ones how you feel.
Thanks for sharing,
- TR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Thank you TR for reading this little story and sharing such great comments. I do appreciate it. John. (my real name)
Comment from writing2inspire
This was a great story, and your writing style was excellent. The "Guide to being the Funnest Grandma" would seem to produce questions and seems to distract from the message of the story. In the second to the last paragraph you wrote: "don't want her not to have" which is a double negative--hard for children to grasp. Since the story turns on Aiden's reaction to a little girl crying, you should have described the situation more. This is a wonderful story that should be told in many different ways to kids at this time of year.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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This was a great story, and your writing style was excellent. The "Guide to being the Funnest Grandma" would seem to produce questions and seems to distract from the message of the story. In the second to the last paragraph you wrote: "don't want her not to have" which is a double negative--hard for children to grasp. Since the story turns on Aiden's reaction to a little girl crying, you should have described the situation more. This is a wonderful story that should be told in many different ways to kids at this time of year.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Wow! Thank you. No one pointed the 2x negative. I should fix that. Thanks for reading and your commentary. I do appreciate it. John
Comment from J. Dark
This is a very well written and charming tale with a good moral lesson too. This is just the sort of thing a young child would think and say - I could picture it easily. I laughed out loud at the handbook references. Well done, this is a fine work.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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This is a very well written and charming tale with a good moral lesson too. This is just the sort of thing a young child would think and say - I could picture it easily. I laughed out loud at the handbook references. Well done, this is a fine work.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Thanks Mrs. D, I appreciate your stopping to read and comment. I have another one with Aiden I am going to post soon. Thanks again, John
Comment from 4tulips
Yes indeed this is a very inspiring story for many other children to read. It goes to show that little children are able to understand the gift in giving to those who have so little. You must be very proud of her and I hope she will continue to show her kindness to others as she grows up in years. Thanks for sharing this story.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Yes indeed this is a very inspiring story for many other children to read. It goes to show that little children are able to understand the gift in giving to those who have so little. You must be very proud of her and I hope she will continue to show her kindness to others as she grows up in years. Thanks for sharing this story.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Thank you tulip for stopping by to read and for your commentary. I do appreciate it
John
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is an absolutely heartwarming story, beautifully written with a wonderful narrative voice and genuine, authentic characters. The dialogue is very natural and the plot is inspirational. Excellent!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012
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This is an absolutely heartwarming story, beautifully written with a wonderful narrative voice and genuine, authentic characters. The dialogue is very natural and the plot is inspirational. Excellent!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Dawn, I appreciate it very much, both your time and commentary.
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Entirely my pleasure.
