Alone
Contest entry for Lonely Poem-freestyle29 total reviews
Comment from mtrybak
Very nicely written poem about how one feels after their partner is gone. Whether yor one year or 60 years, thepain of waking up alon is not something everyone looks forward to. Very well written and you did a great job with it! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Very nicely written poem about how one feels after their partner is gone. Whether yor one year or 60 years, thepain of waking up alon is not something everyone looks forward to. Very well written and you did a great job with it! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you mtrybak for the nice review of my work. I appreciate your well wishes and input.
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent sensory appeal with the sound of the train and the feel of the sheets and the overall silence of the empty room.
You convey perfectly the overwhelming feelings of loneliness when one loses the love of his/her life. Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Excellent sensory appeal with the sound of the train and the feel of the sheets and the overall silence of the empty room.
You convey perfectly the overwhelming feelings of loneliness when one loses the love of his/her life. Brooke
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you Brooke for your review. I appreciate your opinion very much.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi,
Your choice of art along with your words grasp the readers attention and the sense of aloneness due to becoming a widow is easily felt. A stark reality takes place. A very well written poem. Best wishes with this contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Hi,
Your choice of art along with your words grasp the readers attention and the sense of aloneness due to becoming a widow is easily felt. A stark reality takes place. A very well written poem. Best wishes with this contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Mtnspirit, thank you for reviewing my poem and well wishes for
the contest. The picture was taken a few winters ago from my front porch. It looked so cold and lonely is why I decided to use it. I'm glad you liked the poem and the picture.
Comment from Joannforsberg
Silence can be deafening. Such a heart wrenching poem, and so understood by some many.
The photo is perfect as it is darkest before the dawn, and some times in that early morning light is when we hurt the most.
My husband is still alive, although he came within hours of dying last year. So, these type of thoughts went through my mind.
Blessings, Jo
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Silence can be deafening. Such a heart wrenching poem, and so understood by some many.
The photo is perfect as it is darkest before the dawn, and some times in that early morning light is when we hurt the most.
My husband is still alive, although he came within hours of dying last year. So, these type of thoughts went through my mind.
Blessings, Jo
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you Joann for the kind review. I am glad your husband made it through his crisis. I have not lost my husband but yet these thoughts have gone through my head, too, when I lost my brother and Dad.
Comment from Rose Hearth
There doesn't seem to be a loneliness that can compare to the empty silence left by a loved one who has passed from this life. Good luck and blessed be.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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There doesn't seem to be a loneliness that can compare to the empty silence left by a loved one who has passed from this life. Good luck and blessed be.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you Rose for your heartfelt review.
Comment from tinlight
Your chosen artwork is most apt: Never did silence speak louder than on deserted streets muffled with fresh snow. Loneliness is not so heart-and-breath-stopping; more of a dull relentless ache. But loneliness and grief are brothers, and they work as a team.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Your chosen artwork is most apt: Never did silence speak louder than on deserted streets muffled with fresh snow. Loneliness is not so heart-and-breath-stopping; more of a dull relentless ache. But loneliness and grief are brothers, and they work as a team.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Tinlight, thank you for your keen observation and comments on my poem. I appreciate your input.
Comment from amarherig14
The fist days after our loved one passes are confusing, you still think they are around. We are in a state of non believe and feel very lonely.It takes time to accept what has happened.It's like we have been stripped of all that really matters. Afterwards, for many the emptiness is a way of living.You have described loneliness as it is. The wording is used is good for delivering your message. The art used is a plus to your write. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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The fist days after our loved one passes are confusing, you still think they are around. We are in a state of non believe and feel very lonely.It takes time to accept what has happened.It's like we have been stripped of all that really matters. Afterwards, for many the emptiness is a way of living.You have described loneliness as it is. The wording is used is good for delivering your message. The art used is a plus to your write. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you amarherig14 for your kind review of my work. You describe the feeling very well. I appreciate your input.
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You are welcome,justo66. Blessings, Margie
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Good work on loneliness. Your picture is so real here especially with 'Cold empty sheets
For a moment I forgot
My sleepy mind could not grasp' Good work.
ola thomas
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Good work on loneliness. Your picture is so real here especially with 'Cold empty sheets
For a moment I forgot
My sleepy mind could not grasp' Good work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Ola, first I'd like to tell you I love your name whether real or fictional it's fantastic. Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from rjuselius
i am so sorry for your loss!
this is a profound piece of poetry! silence has an empty face but sings volumes.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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i am so sorry for your loss!
this is a profound piece of poetry! silence has an empty face but sings volumes.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you rebekka for your review and keen comments of my work. I have not lost my spouse.I appreciate your empathy, however. This work is from my thoughts of how I would feel if I did. Instead I took the feelings of how I think my mother and my sister-in-law might have felt when my dad and brother died.
Comment from visionary1234
For some reason, the train whistle sounding in the silence is an incredible image echoing the loneliness of having lost a lover of longstanding. What a truly beautiful, haunting write! :) Sharyn
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For some reason, the train whistle sounding in the silence is an incredible image echoing the loneliness of having lost a lover of longstanding. What a truly beautiful, haunting write! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you Sharyn. I too, have always thought a distant train whistle in the night or early morning is one of the most lonely sounds I know.
