Cheezel the Weasel
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Comment from mommerry
There was a rythm to this verse that made it very special. The rhyming, too, was well done. I found nothing but a good dose of nonsense and that answered the challenge.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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There was a rythm to this verse that made it very special. The rhyming, too, was well done. I found nothing but a good dose of nonsense and that answered the challenge.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Keeper Tony
Fantastic and so very musical, something which i always look for in poetry, especially the humorous ones. There is great intellect on show in your writing, which is crafted wonderfully. Has ended my night with a grin. Thankyou for posting this and huge applause for the effort.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Fantastic and so very musical, something which i always look for in poetry, especially the humorous ones. There is great intellect on show in your writing, which is crafted wonderfully. Has ended my night with a grin. Thankyou for posting this and huge applause for the effort.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for the kind words - the grin is really what it's all about.
Steve
Comment from Humbly K
A well written and laid out poem that is enjoyable and interesting to read from the start to finish. This poem is filled with very nice flowing rhymes and a coherent rhythm.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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A well written and laid out poem that is enjoyable and interesting to read from the start to finish. This poem is filled with very nice flowing rhymes and a coherent rhythm.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thank you - gld you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
love his rhyming name
strong use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like wears a wooly waistcoat and wonderful descriptive detail
I love the verb waddle :-)
your lines have a great flow - I am in love with the tortoises start toddling line for several reasons
more excellent alliteration throughout
and the story line is great
OK - this one has to get a six :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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love his rhyming name
strong use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like wears a wooly waistcoat and wonderful descriptive detail
I love the verb waddle :-)
your lines have a great flow - I am in love with the tortoises start toddling line for several reasons
more excellent alliteration throughout
and the story line is great
OK - this one has to get a six :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thanks, Brooke - a Six from you is special - I am rather pleased with this one, myself. Think I got the bouncy rhythm and the extra sound features just about right.
Steve
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an excellent poem and worthy of an example to others what a funny lyrical poem looks loike. This is highly readable and funny.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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This is an excellent poem and worthy of an example to others what a funny lyrical poem looks loike. This is highly readable and funny.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thanks, Bill - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from nomi338
This is a funny, frisky, folly. This poem is so good, it has a limerick kind of feel to it and yet it is more than a limerick. It is really just a fun poem. It may not be suitable for very young children as the reference to bunnies being eaten may upset some children. Very good write.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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This is a funny, frisky, folly. This poem is so good, it has a limerick kind of feel to it and yet it is more than a limerick. It is really just a fun poem. It may not be suitable for very young children as the reference to bunnies being eaten may upset some children. Very good write.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thank you - yes, I tried for that bouncy rhythm and fun use of words for extra effect - fortunately the voters agreed.
Steve
Comment from cvcopac
I'm still laughing, but the syntax, language, rhythm, rhyme, and imagery are no laughing matter. Serial stuff only a pro could could dish out. Great stuff--story, and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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I'm still laughing, but the syntax, language, rhythm, rhyme, and imagery are no laughing matter. Serial stuff only a pro could could dish out. Great stuff--story, and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Does being a pro mean I get paid???
Thanks for the review.
Steve
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Only if you win the contest, you do OK. Still waiting for another Jock and In adventure.
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Maybe In and Cheezel would make a good pair!?
Steve
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Why not?
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this poetic story about the weasel who ate the jockeys, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this poetic story about the weasel who ate the jockeys, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed the Cheezel the Weasel tale.
Steve
Comment from bgcnorth
Funny. Love the rhyming a pictures at the race. The bit about Cheezel being a sinner made me laugh out loud yes indeed it did. Hope you will tell us more about this character you have created...now that he (I think) has come to life.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Funny. Love the rhyming a pictures at the race. The bit about Cheezel being a sinner made me laugh out loud yes indeed it did. Hope you will tell us more about this character you have created...now that he (I think) has come to life.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Oh, yes, Cheezel is definitely a male, and a rather naughty one at that - you could say he's 'stoatily' unrepentant. Others have requested a sequel - let's see if the tired old brain can get into that zone again....
Steve
Comment from Deorre Leonard
I love the picture it goes well with this hilarious poem. It has a good flow. The character is great. This is a very well written poem. Well said. Deorre
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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I love the picture it goes well with this hilarious poem. It has a good flow. The character is great. This is a very well written poem. Well said. Deorre
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thanks, Deoore - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
