Comment from Nanette Mary

Excellent

Hullo Kiwisteveh ....

First of all - congratulations on being the Winner of this Contest. It is well-deserved as you have presented us with a most amusing story-poem. Your well-chosen and descriptive words provide vivid imagery for your readers.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed it.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you!
Steve

Comment from Cornelius2000

Excellent

This is big fun....I love the rollicking meter and you've done a good job with the rhyming (even if you did have to make up a word, frettish, to do it). My favorite word, however, is "frumptious." I may use that one myself, some time. Thanks for a fun read.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Yes, I was so keen on using lettuce fetish that I just had to create a rhyme for it!
Thanks for the frumptious review.
Steve

Comment from Perp Ihebom

Excellent

This is a nice piece of fun poetry that is very suitable for young minds. The play with words is delightful and the rhythm in the first stanza made it song-like. kudos

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - this was a lot of fun and it is good to see so many other people enjoying the naughty Cheezel.
Steve

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was very funny. I can see why you won. Cheezel made me laugh as he ended the night content in his winnings. The flow and rhythm were great. The fun rhyming was easy to read and digest. (no pun intended).

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - this was fun to write as well.
Steve

Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Cute indeed! From the photo throughout the verse it kept my attention which is hard for anyone to do. I loved it! The photo is the funniest part of all and exemplifies your poem making your imagery "pop" out even more. Loved the flow also...

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thank you, Deborah Marie, and welcome to FanStory.
Glad you enjoyed the tale of my reprobate old Cheezel.
Steve

Comment from Eric Corsten

Exceptional

This is right up my ally...I love it...I guess that's how it's really done ..OK ..great poem..I think I'm a new fan..Nice work...I think you gave me a bad review ..maybe not..any way..here it is

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thanks, Eric, for the review and the six stars. I had to look back a way but I did find a piece of yours I reviewed - one of your first ones here and I, along with a few others, commented on your irregular rhythm. Many people loved the poem, although most were impressed by the spinster finds happiness story rather than by the quality of the writing.
I've had a look through a number of your poems and there is a lot to like about them, especially the obvious joy you take in the sound of words, although sometimes there's a feeling this over-rules where the poem would otherwise be going.
There are quite a few minor errors of grammar - not a big deal in my opinion as they can easily be edited for correctness.
Good luck with the planned book - did I see an illustration for it pop up on one of your poems?
Steve

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Congratulations on your contest win. This is a very well written story with humorous overtones. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thanks, Charlie.
Steve

reply by c_lucas on 15-Nov-2012

You're welcome, Steve. Charlie

Comment from McMurry903

Excellent

This is a clever and extremely humorous piece that had me captivated throughout. So very well written with a perfect photo also. Great job! Brian :)

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thanks, Brian - glad you enjoyed.
Steve

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

That is so cute. I loved that he likes to eat the bunnies. I bet there aren't very many turtles that eat rabbits, but that's one way of keeping them from winning the races. WEll done.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thank you - glad you enjoyed - no bunnies were harmed in the writing of this poem.
Steve

Comment from Mai Mai

Excellent

This is an interesting piece. I like the little story you told and you made me smile as I read. It is quite entertaining and I see why it won. Great job and good luck.

Mai Mai

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thank you, Mai Mai - interesting name - here in New Zealand it refers to a duck-hunter's improvised hide or shelter!
Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed the tale of naughty Cheezel the Weasel.
Steve

reply by Mai Mai on 15-Nov-2012

Mai Mai is French for Grandma, this is the name my granddaughter calls me.