Through the Fence
True story of a day with my child in South Australia29 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Vance, This is one of the sadest stories I have read. You know sometimes fences are good. Sometimes there bad. It's the same with memories. I am so sorry I don't have a six for this. ****** You so deserve it. What a talent. Very well written. Lindaxx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Hi Vance, This is one of the sadest stories I have read. You know sometimes fences are good. Sometimes there bad. It's the same with memories. I am so sorry I don't have a six for this. ****** You so deserve it. What a talent. Very well written. Lindaxx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind remarks. There is wisdom in your comment about fences sometimes being good and I agree! Also, there are all kinds of different fences and walls....many that do indeed protect us. Blessings to you... Vance
Comment from Patricia0129
I enjoyed your poem. A form of Free Verse. There are many FENCES in life it seems. Time my friend...it just keeps on rollin, yes memories... Keep looking through the fence and keep them a live...they are Sweet, and Bittersweet at times. Thanks for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed your poem. A form of Free Verse. There are many FENCES in life it seems. Time my friend...it just keeps on rollin, yes memories... Keep looking through the fence and keep them a live...they are Sweet, and Bittersweet at times. Thanks for sharing your work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Patricica: Thanks so much for your kind words and encouragements as they are very genuinely appreciated! Stay close! Vance
Comment from Deorre Leonard
What a poem. Its expressive and very creative. Drove away to my office pulled over and cried. God I hate fences. you did a great job with this. well done. Deorre
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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What a poem. Its expressive and very creative. Drove away to my office pulled over and cried. God I hate fences. you did a great job with this. well done. Deorre
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Deorre:..beautiful name BTW! Many thanks for your kind remarks and generous review. I appreciate hearing from you and hope to see you often. Cheers! Vance
Comment from dmt1967
I hate fences as well I hope you are not too unhappy it was a very sad poem and I liked the picture the grey background suited the poem good luck in the contest and thank you
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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I hate fences as well I hope you are not too unhappy it was a very sad poem and I liked the picture the grey background suited the poem good luck in the contest and thank you
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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dmt: Thanks for your generous review and I'm really glad you enjoyed this poem. It was a bit of a catharsis for me as I still miss him as we are now separated by a really big fence...Pacific Ocean. But he will be here for Christmas and joy will be found. Thanks and glad to see you again! Vance
Comment from donette1914
very sad poem and i could realy feel this. very well done with deep emotions and thankyou for sharing your work it was a pleasure to read your work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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very sad poem and i could realy feel this. very well done with deep emotions and thankyou for sharing your work it was a pleasure to read your work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Thanks donette: Wonderful to hear from you again and I really appreciate your generous rating. I'm really glad you enjoyed this and I hope to deliver more in the future. Please stay tuned!! Vance
Comment from Lobengula
That's a lovely and most moving story/poem. When a little child puts his/her arms around you and kisses you, you really have to watch it from making a fool of yourself and start crying. I can fully appreciate your feelings, believe me. My son did that a few times when he was a little boy.
Very nice piece, Vance.
Every good wish, Mike
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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That's a lovely and most moving story/poem. When a little child puts his/her arms around you and kisses you, you really have to watch it from making a fool of yourself and start crying. I can fully appreciate your feelings, believe me. My son did that a few times when he was a little boy.
Very nice piece, Vance.
Every good wish, Mike
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Mike: those wonderful hugging times are to be remembered forever and I cried a lot writing this poem...as I am even now, just embracing the power and majesty of love in general but so hard or special with those uncomplicated little ones that have no fear of expressing what nature and God intended and gifted freely! Thanks for sharing your thoughts and feelings! Blesssings, Vance
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Yes, Vance, you've hit the nail on the head there. Their complete openness of expression. They want to give you a kiss and a hug -- so they do!
Every good wish, Mike
Comment from MelissaBickel
You touched my heart here in many ways. I hate those metaphorcial and literal fences at time. This made me think of my son and those opportunities I wish I'd taken advantage of when he was small and even now, there are so many stolen moments I miss out of as miles and miles seperate our states....Vance this is priceful and deserves more than a six.. it has my respect.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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You touched my heart here in many ways. I hate those metaphorcial and literal fences at time. This made me think of my son and those opportunities I wish I'd taken advantage of when he was small and even now, there are so many stolen moments I miss out of as miles and miles seperate our states....Vance this is priceful and deserves more than a six.. it has my respect.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Melissa: Thank you so much for your generous six stars and your warm and thoughtful comments. The fence is enormous now as he is now in College in Canberra, Australia and I'm here in Vegas..but tickets are on the way for Christmas and hopefully, there will be no fences at least for the holidays!! Cheers! Vance
Comment from bgcnorth
This is touching-it is filled with emotion. Struggling with joy and pain throughout. Fences are there keep us both in and out. They keep us safe from others and others safe from us. We spend life times building fences in our lives.
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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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This is touching-it is filled with emotion. Struggling with joy and pain throughout. Fences are there keep us both in and out. They keep us safe from others and others safe from us. We spend life times building fences in our lives.
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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I'm sure I responded to this earlier but somehow may have not transmitted it properly so just in case I say again MANY THANKS FOR YOUR KIND REVIEW!! VANCE
Comment from meggreen
We find many fences in our lives; some keep the good in and some, the good out. What a lovely poem about a wonderful memory of time spent with a beloved child! What a wonderful memory to keep when, later in life, the inevitable fences come between you and him as he grows and moves out of your home and into his own. I hope it will be a home with no fence...
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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We find many fences in our lives; some keep the good in and some, the good out. What a lovely poem about a wonderful memory of time spent with a beloved child! What a wonderful memory to keep when, later in life, the inevitable fences come between you and him as he grows and moves out of your home and into his own. I hope it will be a home with no fence...
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Meggreen: Thanks so much for your kind review and comments! Today, the fences reach from Las Vegas to Canberra, Australia but we shall open a gate at Christmas time and make some new memories with no gates!!! Your comments touched me and I thank you so much for that! Blessings: His Grayness...Vance
