Super Storm Sandy
Nature flattens the East Coast.23 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I liked your poem. God and I have been distant, I haven't lost my faith, we're just distant. You did a great job with this and I wouldn't change a thing
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012
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I liked your poem. God and I have been distant, I haven't lost my faith, we're just distant. You did a great job with this and I wouldn't change a thing
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012
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Bless you for reading, glad you know Who comes first and why. God Bless you, Kace.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, aussie, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the destruction that sandy wrought, it was scary to see that massive storm on the radar.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012
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this is very well written, aussie, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the destruction that sandy wrought, it was scary to see that massive storm on the radar.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012
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Hello my friend, Thank you for reading and understanding Who comes first and Who controls the Universe. Blessings, Kace.
Comment from nancyjam
Dramatic personification of the super storm.
Terrible destruction. Man never will
control nature - he can only prepare and
take cover.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012
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Dramatic personification of the super storm.
Terrible destruction. Man never will
control nature - he can only prepare and
take cover.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much for reading; dreadful destruction. All we can do is watch and pray. Blessings, Kace.
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent use of personification as Sandy lifts her skirts :-)
good alliteration in danced with delight
good internal rhyme in tonight would be her night
Be afraid, New York - add comma for direct address
I like the Poseidon imagery
How small you are, New York - add comma for direct address
change it's face - drop the apostrophe
God can change it's face - drop the apostrophe
Vivid visual of homes smashed to toothpicks and great choice of a strong verb
good internal rhyme in wreak havoc on the weak and good consonance of hard C sounds
Even though I do not share your beliefs, you voice your beliefs about this as God's warning effectively
I believe in a far more benevolent God :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Excellent use of personification as Sandy lifts her skirts :-)
good alliteration in danced with delight
good internal rhyme in tonight would be her night
Be afraid, New York - add comma for direct address
I like the Poseidon imagery
How small you are, New York - add comma for direct address
change it's face - drop the apostrophe
God can change it's face - drop the apostrophe
Vivid visual of homes smashed to toothpicks and great choice of a strong verb
good internal rhyme in wreak havoc on the weak and good consonance of hard C sounds
Even though I do not share your beliefs, you voice your beliefs about this as God's warning effectively
I believe in a far more benevolent God :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Brooke, Thanks so much for reading and editing. The Book of Revelation reveals so much. I write from my heart and my heart goes out to the lost. Blessings, K.
Comment from Dodey
WOW This is such a powerful work Kace..with clear and well intended message..You have described the chaos and heartbreak this destuctive force of nature has brought well, also the consequences of those that do not heed His words.. Nature is so very beautiful,yet can turn so violent without much notice.Lovely presentation...Great choice of words and great imagery my friend..Bravo..Kind Regards to you..Dee
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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WOW This is such a powerful work Kace..with clear and well intended message..You have described the chaos and heartbreak this destuctive force of nature has brought well, also the consequences of those that do not heed His words.. Nature is so very beautiful,yet can turn so violent without much notice.Lovely presentation...Great choice of words and great imagery my friend..Bravo..Kind Regards to you..Dee
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much for reading and understanding. I feel so much for those folks that have suffered. Blessings, K.
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My pleasure Kace...I do too, We can only imagine' the suffering..God Bless them all.
Hope all is good with you my friend...Dee.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Aussie ....
Through what you have presented in this free-thought writing, you have surely voiced the thoughts and feelings of all those of us who live in countries far distant from America - and the devastating storm - Sandy.
It is difficult for us to even imagine how it must have been for those whose lives and homes were in the path of this powerful natural disaster.
I like the way you have recognised the storm as being a warning of what is surely yet to come because mankind continue along the sinful path they have chosen, defying God's Laws and failing to give Him the love, adoration, praise, thanksgiving, honour, glory and reparation that are due to Him.
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Hullo Aussie ....
Through what you have presented in this free-thought writing, you have surely voiced the thoughts and feelings of all those of us who live in countries far distant from America - and the devastating storm - Sandy.
It is difficult for us to even imagine how it must have been for those whose lives and homes were in the path of this powerful natural disaster.
I like the way you have recognised the storm as being a warning of what is surely yet to come because mankind continue along the sinful path they have chosen, defying God's Laws and failing to give Him the love, adoration, praise, thanksgiving, honour, glory and reparation that are due to Him.
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Hello Nanette Mary, Thanks for reading, I knew you would understand the message; maybe a little strong in parts - still, we reap what we sow and now is the time for man to wake up! Blessings, Kay.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Kace,
You have written a fine poem about the hurricane. You chose the perfect picture to highlight your expressive words. In your second to the last verse I would delete 'doth' and use 'does' instead. It seems a bit out of place as no where else have you used an old world word. Just a suggestion as the poem is excellent as is. Well done.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Hi Kace,
You have written a fine poem about the hurricane. You chose the perfect picture to highlight your expressive words. In your second to the last verse I would delete 'doth' and use 'does' instead. It seems a bit out of place as no where else have you used an old world word. Just a suggestion as the poem is excellent as is. Well done.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Hello Chey, Thank you for reading, I used 'doth' from the Bible, maybe you are right because it is old world. Blessings, K.
Comment from Larissa B
Hi,
This is the second Sandy- related poem I read this morning. Yes, nature's wrath does let us reevaluate our priorities.
Though I can't blame folks from crying over the loss of material things at this point... the shock is too overwhelming if you are the one right in the midst of it.
blaze
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Hi,
This is the second Sandy- related poem I read this morning. Yes, nature's wrath does let us reevaluate our priorities.
Though I can't blame folks from crying over the loss of material things at this point... the shock is too overwhelming if you are the one right in the midst of it.
blaze
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Indeed, I agree with you - the loss is raw and will continue to be so for those caught up in the maelstrom. Thanks for reading. Blessings, K.
Comment from Adele Symonds
Very, very good. Topical but expressing your own personal message well. It may not be the message that everybody believes but you express your personal opinion well and it is written in a way which should not offend those who old a differing opinion. The imagery and power of Sandy are well written. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Very, very good. Topical but expressing your own personal message well. It may not be the message that everybody believes but you express your personal opinion well and it is written in a way which should not offend those who old a differing opinion. The imagery and power of Sandy are well written. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Thank you Adele; from the heart this was written with no offense to those that have lost everything. The writing is on the wall and there are none so blind that will not see. Blessings, K.
Comment from terry drake
Your free verse was spiritual and revealing. The Anti Christ will let himself be known. More storms and pestilence shall come. Earthquakes and wars. Great poem.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Your free verse was spiritual and revealing. The Anti Christ will let himself be known. More storms and pestilence shall come. Earthquakes and wars. Great poem.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Hello Terry, Thanks for reading and knowing it isn't over, just the beginning. Blessings, K.
