Blue Void
Abstract contest entry10 total reviews
Comment from Simple Reflection
Nice! I have to admit I was a little disappointed that this poem was abstracting the same art as the prompt. (I guess I was hoping to see a new abstract) But when I read your last lines, your author's notes, and then reread your poem...I thought this was most impressive! Great alliteration, great poem! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Nice! I have to admit I was a little disappointed that this poem was abstracting the same art as the prompt. (I guess I was hoping to see a new abstract) But when I read your last lines, your author's notes, and then reread your poem...I thought this was most impressive! Great alliteration, great poem! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you liked my abstract poem. I had thought of using something else but this picture really moved me.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Good theme and thought progression - I like the notion of orange clouds descending and lighting the void. The art and poem combo is terrific.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Good theme and thought progression - I like the notion of orange clouds descending and lighting the void. The art and poem combo is terrific.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Wow! Thank you Elly for the six stars. I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from reconciled
Sounds like me getting up in the morning lol Wonderful poem of the birth of the earth. Great read....good to see you love Michael
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Sounds like me getting up in the morning lol Wonderful poem of the birth of the earth. Great read....good to see you love Michael
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thanks Michael. I always appreciate your kind words and evaluation of my writing.
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my pleasure...
Comment from visionary1234
Great abstract piece here jo!!! One of the best of these entries I've read so far - simple, to the point, abstract but not so convoluted that I have no idea what you're talking about! Well done! :) Sharyn
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Great abstract piece here jo!!! One of the best of these entries I've read so far - simple, to the point, abstract but not so convoluted that I have no idea what you're talking about! Well done! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you Sharyn for your kind review. I was afraid the
poem was too simple and not abstract enough. I am glad you
liked it.
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frankly, I prefer simplicity!!! :)
Comment from Flamingbush
Ooh, this is wonderful. I adore the imagery in it.
Blue void, circling out of control: a picture of total chaos
My mind can't conceive: neither can mine
This barren ball
Bleak and black
No day or night freezing!
Then,
Orange clouds descend
Warmth is felt
Light shines into the void
A beautiful picture of creation
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Ooh, this is wonderful. I adore the imagery in it.
Blue void, circling out of control: a picture of total chaos
My mind can't conceive: neither can mine
This barren ball
Bleak and black
No day or night freezing!
Then,
Orange clouds descend
Warmth is felt
Light shines into the void
A beautiful picture of creation
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you flamingbush for your kind review. I am glad
you liked the imagery.
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You're welcome. God bless.
Comment from EMB
You know, I didn't realize until reading this poem how little vibrant colors come into play in my imagination when thinking on when He created the world. You have given me something I obviously didn't have before with this wonderful poem, and for that, I am grateful.
Nice work. :)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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You know, I didn't realize until reading this poem how little vibrant colors come into play in my imagination when thinking on when He created the world. You have given me something I obviously didn't have before with this wonderful poem, and for that, I am grateful.
Nice work. :)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you Edward for your review of my poem. I am glad it
opened your mind to something new.
Comment from McMurry903
Very well done, I really enjoyed the abstract way you described the creation. Beautifully written with a nice overall presentation. I wish you the best of luck in this contest!! Brian :)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Very well done, I really enjoyed the abstract way you described the creation. Beautifully written with a nice overall presentation. I wish you the best of luck in this contest!! Brian :)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you Brian for the review and contest best wishes. I
am glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from Frank Atwood
Nice poem. I truly believe one learns after the light touches one's soul, then the true learning of truth begins. God bless and keep up the great writing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Nice poem. I truly believe one learns after the light touches one's soul, then the true learning of truth begins. God bless and keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you Frank for your kind review of my poem. Yes, you are right. Once we have the Light there is no true darkness
anymore.
Comment from RaymondJohn
You have very accurately shown what things probably were like. The void and nothingness before creation is different from that which came after. It's the difference between some things being a trillion miles apart, and there being nothing to measure. Fine write. Ray.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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You have very accurately shown what things probably were like. The void and nothingness before creation is different from that which came after. It's the difference between some things being a trillion miles apart, and there being nothing to measure. Fine write. Ray.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you Ray for reviewing my poem in such a gracious way.
Comment from Jacqueline1616
Very interesting...I love the way of this.
Circling out of control
A cold lonely place
My mind can't conceive (I love this verse especially)
Warmth is felt
Light shines into the void
(wonderfully put!)
A very different way of describing creation......makes my spin a bit, a thought of the "blue void"...But I do love that you make people think of what is not part of your everyday pattern of thought.
Thank You...wonderfully done!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Very interesting...I love the way of this.
Circling out of control
A cold lonely place
My mind can't conceive (I love this verse especially)
Warmth is felt
Light shines into the void
(wonderfully put!)
A very different way of describing creation......makes my spin a bit, a thought of the "blue void"...But I do love that you make people think of what is not part of your everyday pattern of thought.
Thank You...wonderfully done!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you Jacqueline for reviewing my poem. I am glad you thought it interesting and liked it.
