Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Mounting Evidence"A collection of my poems
56 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Those emails that you say you read
about the joys we found in bed,
the evidence is gone, petite,
I hit delete.
This is a riot my friend. You used this new style and made it your own. Heeh, I like the verse above that I quoted.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Those emails that you say you read
about the joys we found in bed,
the evidence is gone, petite,
I hit delete.
This is a riot my friend. You used this new style and made it your own. Heeh, I like the verse above that I quoted.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you, my friend - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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Smiling.
Comment from ELumpkins
Good post. This fellow is in trouble. It seems the wife had all hands on deck to verify the cheats. There was no way to explain the butt beneath the sheet. Humorous
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Good post. This fellow is in trouble. It seems the wife had all hands on deck to verify the cheats. There was no way to explain the butt beneath the sheet. Humorous
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank you - yep, there would only be one more compromising situation for him and I couldn't put that in a family poem...
Steve
Comment from terry drake
Well you certainly deny the evidence to the end. You made a magical excursion through the accusations and were very creative with your excuses.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Well you certainly deny the evidence to the end. You made a magical excursion through the accusations and were very creative with your excuses.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Years of practice.... ;o)
Thanks, Terry
Steve
Comment from Spike the second
Steve
I like your poem a lot. My secretary's got a bust that's big. It's a bloody big one of William Shakespeare (supposed to be some sort of olde worlde poet):)
Brilliant stuff
Spike
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Steve
I like your poem a lot. My secretary's got a bust that's big. It's a bloody big one of William Shakespeare (supposed to be some sort of olde worlde poet):)
Brilliant stuff
Spike
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Yeah, I think I heard of him once - he was a ghostwriter for Francis Bacon or something...
Steve
Comment from doris1022
very funny write! good luck in the contest you get my vote. have a good weekend and keep the mental creations pumping. to share here at the fansotry.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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very funny write! good luck in the contest you get my vote. have a good weekend and keep the mental creations pumping. to share here at the fansotry.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thanks, Doris - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Once again, your wit and terrific sense of the absurd come shoutin' out in glee. What a fun read. I sit down to your work and think that it must be fun to be you. I hope you enjoyed the form as much as I enjoyed reading your submission. Again, thank you for jumping in. I was afraid it would not get much interest, being unknown. Guess I should have opened up for all eighteen as I got messages from others who had wanted to get into the contest. Guess I'll have to do it again sometime. Kudos for the rhyme and consistent rhythm. A favorite mission of mine.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Once again, your wit and terrific sense of the absurd come shoutin' out in glee. What a fun read. I sit down to your work and think that it must be fun to be you. I hope you enjoyed the form as much as I enjoyed reading your submission. Again, thank you for jumping in. I was afraid it would not get much interest, being unknown. Guess I should have opened up for all eighteen as I got messages from others who had wanted to get into the contest. Guess I'll have to do it again sometime. Kudos for the rhyme and consistent rhythm. A favorite mission of mine.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Yes it was fun and I could see the competition would be fierce.
Thanks for organising and congrats again on your win.
Steve
Comment from Joannforsberg
You heard my secretary's got
a bust that's big, a bod that's hot
and acts like she's a bitch in heat,
Miss Marguerite
Excellent...
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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You heard my secretary's got
a bust that's big, a bod that's hot
and acts like she's a bitch in heat,
Miss Marguerite
Excellent...
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thanks, Joann
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
Talk about the kid caught with his hand in the proverbial cookie jar LOL
What wonderfully funny illustrative examples in each stanza of the guy's guilt despite his protestations of innocence :-)
Your rhyming couplets are strong
and you use the cadence of this form to good effect :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Talk about the kid caught with his hand in the proverbial cookie jar LOL
What wonderfully funny illustrative examples in each stanza of the guy's guilt despite his protestations of innocence :-)
Your rhyming couplets are strong
and you use the cadence of this form to good effect :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Well, not quite IN the cookie jar (I would have had to put a warning on it) but he certainly was easing the lid off!
Thanks, Brooke.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
Keep a blank plane ticket with you at all times. You'll never know when it will come in handy. This is very well written with a humorous overtone.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Keep a blank plane ticket with you at all times. You'll never know when it will come in handy. This is very well written with a humorous overtone.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a lokk if you haven't already done so.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from ameen786
Brilliant! Steve my friend, you are a master of a writer-poet; outstanding story/poem with full of wits/humor and excellent rhyme/rhythm; the last stanza is dynamite! Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Brilliant! Steve my friend, you are a master of a writer-poet; outstanding story/poem with full of wits/humor and excellent rhyme/rhythm; the last stanza is dynamite! Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Kamran - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a lokk if you haven't already done so.
Steve
