Goldilocks and the Three Bears
The acrostic version43 total reviews
Comment from visionary1234
LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!! I keep hearing that army song in my head as I read your verse - delicious! acrostic plus patter-song witty!!! Well deserving of 6 stars! :) Sharyn
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!! I keep hearing that army song in my head as I read your verse - delicious! acrostic plus patter-song witty!!! Well deserving of 6 stars! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thanks, Sharyn - no idea what army song you're referring to!
Steve
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I don't know what it's called - but it's in all the yankee army exercise drill things ... :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Wow! This poem gives new meaning to expressions like "fractured fairy tales"! it should serve as cautionary advice to anyone thinking about breaking and entering. LOL Good job
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Wow! This poem gives new meaning to expressions like "fractured fairy tales"! it should serve as cautionary advice to anyone thinking about breaking and entering. LOL Good job
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Craigitar
Excellent poem, acrostic or not. Smooth rhythm and rhyme. A neat revisiting of an old tale with little twist at the end. Well done. Good luck with the contest.
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Excellent poem, acrostic or not. Smooth rhythm and rhyme. A neat revisiting of an old tale with little twist at the end. Well done. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the great review and the six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Ricky1024
Good alliteration and good rhyming appeal.
However cute, this is a serious writing
contest and fairy tales won't cut the wood
or refill the Porridge Bowl.
Thanks,
Interesting.
HMMM...
R.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Good alliteration and good rhyming appeal.
However cute, this is a serious writing
contest and fairy tales won't cut the wood
or refill the Porridge Bowl.
Thanks,
Interesting.
HMMM...
R.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thanks for the review - I must have missed the bit that said the piece had to be serious...
Comment from cvcopac
Here it is! The final story on the story with a little educational dialogue for the kids. not only has it great syntax and rhyme but it's metered too. Brilliant and sophisticated acrostic if I ever seen one. Best of luck but you should'nt need much. cvc
Congrats--I knew it was you, had to be. Would you care to purchase a like new wheel barrow?
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Here it is! The final story on the story with a little educational dialogue for the kids. not only has it great syntax and rhyme but it's metered too. Brilliant and sophisticated acrostic if I ever seen one. Best of luck but you should'nt need much. cvc
Congrats--I knew it was you, had to be. Would you care to purchase a like new wheel barrow?
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - yes, another winner - if only it was real money (sigh) - took me a while to figure out the wheelbarrow reference, but I think I got there...
Steve
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Yup
Comment from expressions9
This is a very well-told and amusing story of Goldilocks and the Three Bears - perfect for kids! The font choice is very appropriate and the picture too. It has good rhyme and rhythm.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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This is a very well-told and amusing story of Goldilocks and the Three Bears - perfect for kids! The font choice is very appropriate and the picture too. It has good rhyme and rhythm.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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You're welcome and congrats on winning the contest!!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Loved it. This was wonderfully funny making Goldilocks some spoilt brat. I love the artistic license you used for the ending. Nice job on this. The flow and rhymes were great.
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Loved it. This was wonderfully funny making Goldilocks some spoilt brat. I love the artistic license you used for the ending. Nice job on this. The flow and rhymes were great.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from bowls
Very clever! I really like the bouncy rhythm which enhances your saucy tone. Great rhymes, too. All this and it's an acrostic, too. Very entertaining and exceptionally well done!
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Very clever! I really like the bouncy rhythm which enhances your saucy tone. Great rhymes, too. All this and it's an acrostic, too. Very entertaining and exceptionally well done!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Vladilynn
This one of the best acrostics I've seen here, nice story within. I loved writing acrostic too(before) lately, I've forgotten how to do it. LOL
Hopefully you win the contest. Goodluck!
Well written.
Love much,
Lynn:0)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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This one of the best acrostics I've seen here, nice story within. I loved writing acrostic too(before) lately, I've forgotten how to do it. LOL
Hopefully you win the contest. Goodluck!
Well written.
Love much,
Lynn:0)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thanks, Lynn - yes, it was a winner.
Steve
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WOW!! congratulations!!! Yahhhoo!!
Comment from squid152
Very clever acrostic poem you have written here. Well you seem to have covered the whole story in this poem. Great rhymes and smiple enough words to read to children-Gary
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Very clever acrostic poem you have written here. Well you seem to have covered the whole story in this poem. Great rhymes and smiple enough words to read to children-Gary
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
