Ethics
An Acrostic13 total reviews
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Wow! This was a very strong acrostic, Kamran. Please accept a virtual six from me! Loved the ending rhymes of the first four lines then the separation line which sums it all up- truly the feeling of guilt and desperation in a desert. Powerful work! Holly
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Wow! This was a very strong acrostic, Kamran. Please accept a virtual six from me! Loved the ending rhymes of the first four lines then the separation line which sums it all up- truly the feeling of guilt and desperation in a desert. Powerful work! Holly
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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My friend, I am pleased you like this write, very kind of you to stop by, always grateful, thank you very much.
Comment from mshirachot
Funny coincidence (though I believe nothing is "by chance") my husband's next six weeks class is on "Ethics". I'll have to pass this poem along to him, especially since you included the photograph as that is his major!
The poem descriptively entails the consequences of unethical choices! Great job. Best wishes with the contest entry.
Blessings to you,
Marsha
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Funny coincidence (though I believe nothing is "by chance") my husband's next six weeks class is on "Ethics". I'll have to pass this poem along to him, especially since you included the photograph as that is his major!
The poem descriptively entails the consequences of unethical choices! Great job. Best wishes with the contest entry.
Blessings to you,
Marsha
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Hello Marsha, my friend, I am glad you stopped by and that you like the poem, I appreciate your time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Though acrostics are one of my least fave poetry forms, you've done an excellent job of expressing your strong faith here, Kamran, and with the bonus of rhyme too.
The weakest rhyme is obviously 'gone', and I'd suggest the line ends with maybe 'bone/bones'. This would also add dramatism as to 'have something in one's bones' is very strong and personal. I sure won't be offended if you don't agree. :-)
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Though acrostics are one of my least fave poetry forms, you've done an excellent job of expressing your strong faith here, Kamran, and with the bonus of rhyme too.
The weakest rhyme is obviously 'gone', and I'd suggest the line ends with maybe 'bone/bones'. This would also add dramatism as to 'have something in one's bones' is very strong and personal. I sure won't be offended if you don't agree. :-)
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Ray my friend, I am honored and grateful to you for your time and the wonderful, constructive review; I'll definitely work on your perfect suggestion, thank you sir.
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Thanks for your wonderful reply, Kamran.
I've said it before, but I'll repeat - you are a great guy and a true gentleman.
Ray x (platonic kiss, LOL)
Comment from Ricky1024
This acrostic poem has somr depth in heart with a message although it is way to short.
it needs to be lenthened.
imagery is average.
Objective Content is feaseable.
Thanks,
R.c
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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This acrostic poem has somr depth in heart with a message although it is way to short.
it needs to be lenthened.
imagery is average.
Objective Content is feaseable.
Thanks,
R.c
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thanks RC.
Comment from expressions9
The weight of guilt over past wrongs is very evident in this well-written Acrostic poem. "Even in the wilderness I am not alone" and "Solitude's no more companionable!" both say so much about this weight. A very thought-provoking Acrostic :)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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The weight of guilt over past wrongs is very evident in this well-written Acrostic poem. "Even in the wilderness I am not alone" and "Solitude's no more companionable!" both say so much about this weight. A very thought-provoking Acrostic :)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Hello Expressions9, my friend, I appreciate your time and am glad that you like the write, thank you very much.
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You're welcome.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your Acrostic poem for the word Ethics is extremely well written with fine imagery, excellent rhyme and meter.
You used very fine alliteration with the C words: (cannot condone)..
You also used good metaphor: "weight of my soul."
I enjoyed your lines:
In spite of my remorse the pain's not gone
Careless past behavior I now bemoan
Solitude's no more companionable!
I wish you good luck in the Acrostic poetry contest.
Would I recommend your poem to other reviewers?
Yes , I would,
Missy.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Poet,
Your Acrostic poem for the word Ethics is extremely well written with fine imagery, excellent rhyme and meter.
You used very fine alliteration with the C words: (cannot condone)..
You also used good metaphor: "weight of my soul."
I enjoyed your lines:
In spite of my remorse the pain's not gone
Careless past behavior I now bemoan
Solitude's no more companionable!
I wish you good luck in the Acrostic poetry contest.
Would I recommend your poem to other reviewers?
Yes , I would,
Missy.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Missy my friend, I thank you for your time and the encouraging review.
Comment from bkbehera
"Even in wilderness I am not alone
The weight of my soul I cannot condone
Here in desolation I couldn't atone
In spite of my remorse the pain's not gone"
The picture of a cactus grove on a deserted land represents the struggle for existence, utmost self confidence.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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"Even in wilderness I am not alone
The weight of my soul I cannot condone
Here in desolation I couldn't atone
In spite of my remorse the pain's not gone"
The picture of a cactus grove on a deserted land represents the struggle for existence, utmost self confidence.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Hello bk, my friend, I appreciate your time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
Comment from Ekim777
With communion with our souls, we shall be as wanderers across the facr of the earth. And the earth shall be a wilderness. A rapport with our souls is vital. It should be a beacon of light among others. No one can atone for our isolation until our souls can tranform it into solitude. The last three lines are all too negative we will never exit the dark tunnel of our existences until we confront the abyss within. Everyone to his/her own salvation. The final line; "Solitude is no longer companionable" this is intriguing Solitude cannot be shared. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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With communion with our souls, we shall be as wanderers across the facr of the earth. And the earth shall be a wilderness. A rapport with our souls is vital. It should be a beacon of light among others. No one can atone for our isolation until our souls can tranform it into solitude. The last three lines are all too negative we will never exit the dark tunnel of our existences until we confront the abyss within. Everyone to his/her own salvation. The final line; "Solitude is no longer companionable" this is intriguing Solitude cannot be shared. -Ekim777
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Ekim my friend, I thank you for your wonderful, profound reflections, please take care, God bless you.
Comment from RIDAAHSAn
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Comment from c_lucas
There is always a shining Light which will guide us to the safety of His arms. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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There is always a shining Light which will guide us to the safety of His arms. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Charlie my friend, appreciate the time and the thoughtful review, thank you very much.
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You're welcome, E. Charlie
