My Character Studies ... ! (Vol. 1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Elder"Metre ... Freeverse & Acrostic
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Comment from TammyGail
B... Wow this made for some read - the imagery you used alongside your ink was perfect - the poem invokes emotion and than some - thank you ever much for the notes as well as the read always a pleasure to read your scribe -
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012
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B... Wow this made for some read - the imagery you used alongside your ink was perfect - the poem invokes emotion and than some - thank you ever much for the notes as well as the read always a pleasure to read your scribe -
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012
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Thanks ...T. Much appreciated as always, in the slough of despond as far as my writing is concerned, just taking some time out and thinking...!
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understood sweetie - do send me a message from time to time - I worry about you
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No worries...!
Comment from juliedickson55
"Gaurdians of Holy Truth" [Guardians= though spelled correctly in the poem, itself]
I love the visual that this line invokes:
"A slaughter will cleanse you.
Cheribums sanctify an unholy mess,
Fire will burn each unholy wretch" good rhyme mess/wretch.
Good alliteration here:
peep and pervert
Injury and injustice
"His eyes see's all" [sees- no apostrophe needed]
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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"Gaurdians of Holy Truth" [Guardians= though spelled correctly in the poem, itself]
I love the visual that this line invokes:
"A slaughter will cleanse you.
Cheribums sanctify an unholy mess,
Fire will burn each unholy wretch" good rhyme mess/wretch.
Good alliteration here:
peep and pervert
Injury and injustice
"His eyes see's all" [sees- no apostrophe needed]
Comment Written 16-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Excellent, will ammend...
Comment from sunnilicious
Good religious perspective. Nice writing style. Good flow of rhythm. Descriptive and informative. Excellent closing. Well done. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Good religious perspective. Nice writing style. Good flow of rhythm. Descriptive and informative. Excellent closing. Well done. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Excellent, much thankfulness... glad you can appreciate.
Comment from Gungalo
His eyes see's all,
When he sends the man around
A slaughter will cleanse you.
Cheribums sanctify an unholy mess,
Fire will burn each unholy wretch;
What will you become, when,
The man comes around.
Unholy desire will cease,
Rich purity blesses God's peace.
What will you do? This is a great interpretation Bic of the biblical passage.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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His eyes see's all,
When he sends the man around
A slaughter will cleanse you.
Cheribums sanctify an unholy mess,
Fire will burn each unholy wretch;
What will you become, when,
The man comes around.
Unholy desire will cease,
Rich purity blesses God's peace.
What will you do? This is a great interpretation Bic of the biblical passage.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Excellent G... glad you like.
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Big smile.
Comment from John Lofburger
If it is satire poetry, indeed, it is an extremely good derisive pasticcio of the wailing and cursing of those who believe that they inherited a right upon God, through some special business arrangement.
Good satire, good poem, well structured, words very well chosen.
I like.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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If it is satire poetry, indeed, it is an extremely good derisive pasticcio of the wailing and cursing of those who believe that they inherited a right upon God, through some special business arrangement.
Good satire, good poem, well structured, words very well chosen.
I like.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Excellent muchappreciate the good feed back.