Comment from EMB

Excellent

Well, this was certainly an entertaining piece of poetry. I loved the narrative approach. In fact, I could see this as a picture book, it's so good. Your rhyming was delightful, and it definitely added to the flavor of the piece.

Very nice job.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012

Thanks Edward for reading and commenting on my silly poem. I am glad you liked it. I had fun making it up. :o)

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

This is excellent, but I think you need to look at the second to the last line in the last stanza. I don't think that is what you meant to say. I loved this story told Beverly Hillbillies style. It was adorable, and the rhyming and flow were great. Fix that line

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012

Thanks Val for helping me see my error. It's amazing to me
how many times I can proof read something and still miss "it."
Glad you liked my little tale.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

Very well written poem it made me laugh just one thing Never try to out run a (oountry) girl is that meant to e country
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012

Thanks for noticing and pointing out my typo. I have corrected it. Yes, it's country. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.

Comment from wiljacro

Excellent

HI! justjo66. A great smiley tale of a really determined girl name of Lilly Pearl out to get herMan whatever the trouble it took. The twist in the tail when it turns out to be a problem of a bad memory on Burfords part, makes for a happy ending. Well done, you made my day. wiljacro.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012

Glad to have given you a smile today. I wrote this all because of the clip art and on the way home yesterday passed a
truck with Buford's something on the side. I liked the name. :o)

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

This story within a poem titled "The Tale of Lilly Pearl" is indeed an absolutely hilarious piece of poetry. Well done indeed and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012

Thank you Chris. I am glad you enjoyed this little
tale.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

justjo66 - This is a cute humorous poem that I enjoyed very much. The picture you chose to go with it is perfect too. Kat


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 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012

Thanks Kat. I wrote this just for fun. My husband has a
distant cousin named Lilly Pearl and her husband is RB. :o)