Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from jmdg1954
Wow.... This was the first chapter of this book I've read but let me tell you, it kept my interest from the beginning. Your attention to detail is superb giving the reader just enough to picture it without explaining every minut detail.
The lack of dialogue I thought made it long to read but like I said, I am not familiar with the previous chapters...
Thank you for the interesting reading you provided.
John
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Wow.... This was the first chapter of this book I've read but let me tell you, it kept my interest from the beginning. Your attention to detail is superb giving the reader just enough to picture it without explaining every minut detail.
The lack of dialogue I thought made it long to read but like I said, I am not familiar with the previous chapters...
Thank you for the interesting reading you provided.
John
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you, John. I appreciate your very specific insights into this chapter. I will take a look toward maybe adding a bit more dialogue. I appreciate your generosity and encouragement.
Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Bev,
An extremely interesting chapter. Good insight into the characters. I caught a couple of misspellings which I've noted below. No big deal, probably typos.
Gertrude's movement(s) stilled.
straight-ba(c)ked chair...
An enjoyable and intriguing read.
Ray
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Hello Bev,
An extremely interesting chapter. Good insight into the characters. I caught a couple of misspellings which I've noted below. No big deal, probably typos.
Gertrude's movement(s) stilled.
straight-ba(c)ked chair...
An enjoyable and intriguing read.
Ray
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Hi, Ray. Thanks for catching the spaggies. I really appreciate you taking time to read and your generous review!
Warm regards, Bev
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It's a good story, but I haven't followed it as closely as I'd like. Maybe I'll get caught up, but I'm a long ways in arrears.
Ray
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Thanks for the thought, Ray! Appreciate it ... Bev
Comment from rushingwater
oooooh I liked the nice little twist at the end of this, gets the ole sherlock juices going. You write very well and keep a steady storyline without interruption in thought. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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oooooh I liked the nice little twist at the end of this, gets the ole sherlock juices going. You write very well and keep a steady storyline without interruption in thought. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much, rushingwater. I really appreciate you taking time to read the chapter and your very generous review!
Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
I am so happy to see a new chapter of this story, Bev :) This gave me a very eerie feeling. Getting a look at the killer. Seeing the conditions his mother is living in. I worry about the safety of that nurse. Looking forward to the next chapter!
"Gertrude's (movemented) stilled." - movements maybe?
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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I am so happy to see a new chapter of this story, Bev :) This gave me a very eerie feeling. Getting a look at the killer. Seeing the conditions his mother is living in. I worry about the safety of that nurse. Looking forward to the next chapter!
"Gertrude's (movemented) stilled." - movements maybe?
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thanks for catching the SPAG, Joy! And I really appreciate your generous and supportive review. Hugs, Bev
Comment from irishauthorme
Very concise writing, and you kept your story moving fast enough so that it was interesting, in spite of almost no dialogue. Good tension with the murder, and then the build-up with the pending house visit by Marsha, following two previous nurses who had begged off the case. Great location scene, the old house, and then the appearance of the mysterious son Eddie, who may prove to have some telepathic abilities, and gives his mom rose quartz rosaries?
Great chapter, irish
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Very concise writing, and you kept your story moving fast enough so that it was interesting, in spite of almost no dialogue. Good tension with the murder, and then the build-up with the pending house visit by Marsha, following two previous nurses who had begged off the case. Great location scene, the old house, and then the appearance of the mysterious son Eddie, who may prove to have some telepathic abilities, and gives his mom rose quartz rosaries?
Great chapter, irish
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you very much for your generous and supportive review, irish. I really appreciate your specific insights into this chapter. That's always so helpful!
Warmest regards, Bev
