Comment from Sally Carter

Excellent

Chuckle...
A bit cheeky, but that's the tradition for limericks.
Your meter is spot on, fun rhymes on the long lines, great images.
What more can I say? The best of the entries I have read yet, though I have a few more to go.
I really wish you well with this one.
Regards
Sally

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012

Thanks, Sally. I actually found the acrostic element more difficult than I anticipated and I threw this together almost in despair with about ten minutes to go to deadline.
Steve

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

The wives knew about her. That is a gosh aweful limerick. But you rhymed it out well. Nicely written. Good artwork too. Excellent.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012

Thank you.
Steve

Comment from Carrie Carson

Excellent

Nasty but I think that's what makes it fun...I never did get why wives seemed to be in a constant state of worry...like their husbands weren't safe or reliable enough to make choices.

Good form, right on the prompt.

Technically, whore is for payment, slut or floozy would be someone for fun. Mmmm, maybe P A R T Y would have worked, too. But I like this one. Good luck in the contest. :) Carrie

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012

Carrie, thanks for your thoughtful review. I ended up under time prssure with this one - fifteen minutes till deadline and nothing on paper yet - so I just went with this one even though I wasn't really happy with it. You are right about the word 'whore' - since I wrote it I've thought maybe 'tramp' would have been a better decription, but of course that would have meant an entirely new poem.
Turns out is snared a win anyway.
Steve

reply by Carrie Carson on 08-Oct-2012

CONGRATULATIONS!! I love it when that happens. This struck a truism that is clear in its presentation, I think voters picked up on that, too. Great job. :)

Comment from Angels27

Excellent

Very awesome Acrostic poem mystery author. I enjoyed reading it. The lines flowed so beautifully. The picture complimented your writing so well. All the best in the contest :)

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012

Thank you.
Steve

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Ah, I love it! I have a hard enough time writing a
true limerick. This appears much harder.
I salute you for the incredible/edible/beddable
rhyme. Well done, and best of luck
at the polls.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012

Thanks, Lee.
Yes, I entered for this with casual optimism, but gained a lot more respect for its difficulty as deadline loomed - this was a bit scrambled together but worked well enough to snare the prize.
Steve

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Clever and bawdy, as a good limerick should be.

Fun creative rhyming and good form.

The picture is an apt compliment to your thematic 'portrait' of a whore.

Good entry, no nits.

Good luck in the contest

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012

Thanks, Rama.
Steve

Comment from Az-Zahra

Excellent

Oops. eventhough it tells about a "naughty" woman, but It describes well. And the picture enhances the poem itself. I think it suits the rule for limerick poem

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012

Thank you.
Steve