Comment from rwilliam

Excellent

Tears dampened her cheeks, pooling on her pillowcase before melting into the soft down.--love this description!!!

EEEWWWW, LOVE the ending! YAY go find her!!!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012

Oh my, so good to see you again. I'm grinning from ear to ear. So glad you liked that.

Talk soon, only a few more chapters!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Hi, Gayle. Fascinating details about the secret life of Louise really liven this piece for me. Just enough supernatural implications to really give a great picture of the evil of the kind of people Louise and Darius were. Now to save Ella... Terry and Amy to the rescue. Excellent chapter, my friend! Nothing I'd change at all.

Hugs, Bev

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012

Hey Bev, so glad you liked that. I like to give even the secondary characters something unusual. Louise had quite the life. When I go back and do the full edit, I'll probably add another 15K to the length, getting all the wrinkles ironed out.

Thanks so much for the support and the great comments!

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by Writingfundimension on 25-Sep-2012

You bet, Gayle. My pleasure! Xxx Bev

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

Holy Toledo! What outstanding dialogue. You've really created plausible descriptions here, Annabelle. The story is flowing nicely.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012

Oh my, Freddie. Those words are music to my ears. I love dialogue and sounds like this chapter delivered.

Can't thank you enough for the comments and support, dear friend.

Hugs,
Annabelle

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Exceptional

Gayle:

First, it's a doggone shame (pun fully intended) any writer has to explain to a reviewer to pass if they are lost after reading his/her work, isn't it? I've had some reviewers give me 2 or 3 because a poem didn't rhyme or because it went over their head. And that's my fault, why?

Anyway, I could hear Ames as she was making those guttural signs which rise an octave each time she takes a breath. My daughter's labrador does that every time a fire truck passes our house, which is often since there is a fire house less than a mile from our house.

The connection between Ames/Terry and Ella will provide the path of rescue, I'm thinking.

thanks for sharing
love,
jan

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012

Hi Jan,

Such a treat seeing you, and bearing a sixer! Oh my, lovely arrangement! Thank you so much!

Amy's quite vocal and I remember clearly how those notes sound. The 'wooos' are a riot, too.

Now if we can just keep the alligator in the water, we'll be all right! Whew!

Big thanks and hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Stalking Wolf

Excellent

Story running good, seems that Louise won't get eat, just locked up, so sad. Amy feeling Ella and passing it on to Terry very realistic and cool, dogs would do just such a thing, enjoying.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012

Dogs are so attuned to their owners sometimes, it's like mental telepathy. So glad you like the story and I really appreciate your support.

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from nor84

Excellent

I'm dictating the review, so you may get words that don't make sense but sound like other words that do.

She's got a place off her suite that's set up like a voodoo shrine(.)Has a private entrance where folks come that don't wanna see or be seen, y'know?">>>semicolons are frowned upon in dialogue, but sentence fragments aren't. As always, my suggestions are just that.

They adore each other. It comes from the secrets, the unimportant little things that folk's hides (folks hide) or, if you prefer, folks hides, but no apostrophe.

lightheaded is one word, no hyphen.

Terry asks "Is there any problem with me going for a little boat ride?"

And Solange replies "Oui" -- shouldn't that be "Non" since it isn't a problem?

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012

Hey Norma, good to see you. I don't know why I do that with the semicolons! I don't like them either. Go figure. I'll get the apostrophe outta there, too.

That non-oui thingy. I wanted to show Solange agreeing to the request and offering to notify Pierre. Let me go back and see.

Looks like the dictating equipment is doing great!

Hugs and thanks,
Gayle

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

I would have paid more attention to the dog in the first place. It seems if they trusted their dogs, they should have too. but that's my opinion. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012

Me, too! But then, Amy wasn't sure what was going on there for a while. Still, they should have listened to her.

Thanks so much for the fine comments!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Kym Jade

Excellent

Go Terry and Amy. We hope the connection between the twins is strong enough to overcome any evil, voodoo or plots that is keeping them apart.


Great write and a joy to read

Best wishes

Kym

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012

Hey Girls, hope all is well. Thanks for droppiong by and for the great comments and support!

Thanks so much,

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Rob Caudle

Exceptional

Bravo, Gayle, I was entranced from the first word. As you know I love the New Orleans connection to voodoo and the black arts. You have done a great job here with the subject. This was a superb read. I fear however that we are coming to the end of our tale. I have enjoyed it all very much. My only complaint is, like all good books, I don't want it to end. Truly a fine and engaging piece.

Rob

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012

Oh my, Rob, lookee there, a sixer! Thank you so much for the honor and for the truly wonderful words. They, and your continued support through this book, have been so important to me.

We're winding down but all of a sudden the characters are raring to go again. Maybe three more? We'll see. I'm always the last to know.

Again, m'dear, thank you so much for the sixer and your friendship,

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from jjstar

Excellent

I'm so sad this is ending, but I trust you have an equally awesome one that brewing! Great job as usual. I'm so glad that someone finally recognized the truth about Louise. I love it when a plan comes together! Well, crap. I just went to rate and all I can give you is five stars. I just got reloaded with sixes so I guess I've been done dirty by Fanstory? HeHe

Includin' she's a voodoo sorceress, just like her mama."==finally, someone came out and said it..I'm so relieved!

private things ==maybe private stash?

, and what the fuck! Who's gonna believe this shit?"--haha, indeed. Truth is stranger than fiction sometimes.

Crazy shit. She grew up with it and it's as real to her as Sunday Mass, maybe more." ==great analogy..picturing Sunday mass

raised families. ==just a thought==sounds a little off-raise families..we raise kids, but maybe managed families..I don't know..thinking..

let go and burried her face in the other's shoulder.
==buried (?) lol

"Ames! Let's go get Ella!"====yipppeeeeee! She's back! Here we go. You go girl! Time for Louise to pay the piper and for Terry to save Ella!

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012

I'll take the virtual sixer, JJ, and smile all the way. Yes, I kept Louise under wraps for just such an end. Glad you liked it. I used stash...very good one, nailed that extra 'r' in buried.

Thank you so much for the wonderful support and friendship. Means more than you know!

Hugs,
Gayle