The Door to the Elders
Rejection by those who judge49 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Dark Lord,
I found this piece quite thought provoking. The whole sense of what the elders were, or are, seemed tied up in a darker realm of acceptance.
But for me this was like watching a clip of Gothic darkness, just a different way to express the passions of life and death. The underworld and all it brings pulls me in to ask more questions about why, how and when.
I'm not sure I can say I liked it. But it did stop me in my tracks and allow me a few moments of feeling the uncertainty while at the door of the elders.
Well penned, some great imagery and a definite flare of darker energy.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Hi Dark Lord,
I found this piece quite thought provoking. The whole sense of what the elders were, or are, seemed tied up in a darker realm of acceptance.
But for me this was like watching a clip of Gothic darkness, just a different way to express the passions of life and death. The underworld and all it brings pulls me in to ask more questions about why, how and when.
I'm not sure I can say I liked it. But it did stop me in my tracks and allow me a few moments of feeling the uncertainty while at the door of the elders.
Well penned, some great imagery and a definite flare of darker energy.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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I thank you for stopping by and reviewing my work, I do appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Gungalo
And now what happens? Dark Lord who leads us against the foes of the underworld. Where shall we go, what shall we do? What must we do to not fail, not disappoint the Elders?
Oh the is such a good write, Dark Lord.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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And now what happens? Dark Lord who leads us against the foes of the underworld. Where shall we go, what shall we do? What must we do to not fail, not disappoint the Elders?
Oh the is such a good write, Dark Lord.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you once again for your kindness, I will be crafting another soon...dark lord
Comment from RaymondJohn
First of all, change the color scheme. I had to highlight your poem to read it. I like the arcana of your write. It's the conspiracy-theorist's favorite fantasy. Interesting write. Ray.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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First of all, change the color scheme. I had to highlight your poem to read it. I like the arcana of your write. It's the conspiracy-theorist's favorite fantasy. Interesting write. Ray.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for stopping by and reviewing my work...dark lord
Comment from Gladness
This is kind of wierd.It sounds like you are going to the devil's domain hoping for approvial. He never does anyone any good. I like the phrase "gargoyles of denial" and it's a cool picture you found to go with this.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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This is kind of wierd.It sounds like you are going to the devil's domain hoping for approvial. He never does anyone any good. I like the phrase "gargoyles of denial" and it's a cool picture you found to go with this.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind words...dark lord
Comment from J. P. Egry
This poem is a wonderful Gothic metaphor for those of us who have knocked on that mythical, magical door that refuses to open for any submission anywhere no matter how often we think that at last we have the combination. How can any/every writer not relate to this one????
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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This poem is a wonderful Gothic metaphor for those of us who have knocked on that mythical, magical door that refuses to open for any submission anywhere no matter how often we think that at last we have the combination. How can any/every writer not relate to this one????
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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You're welcome!!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I like your imagery. It's tough to perform, knowing you're doomed to be judged a failure no matter what.
I think Thunderclaps is one word.
Interesting blank verse assessment of the poet's situation. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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I like your imagery. It's tough to perform, knowing you're doomed to be judged a failure no matter what.
I think Thunderclaps is one word.
Interesting blank verse assessment of the poet's situation. :) Nancy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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You're welcome...Lady of Light
Comment from EMB
Well I, for one, have no clue as to what the door to the Elders is supposed to represent. I did like your flow of words, but they flowed through me instead of in me. The images and symbolism went beyond my current cognitive skills. Even needing wisdom to "continue a life" is beyond me. I'd understand wisdom to improve or better one's life, but to continue all one needs to do is keep breathing and look both ways before crossing a road (in more ways than one).
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Well I, for one, have no clue as to what the door to the Elders is supposed to represent. I did like your flow of words, but they flowed through me instead of in me. The images and symbolism went beyond my current cognitive skills. Even needing wisdom to "continue a life" is beyond me. I'd understand wisdom to improve or better one's life, but to continue all one needs to do is keep breathing and look both ways before crossing a road (in more ways than one).
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you for taking time to read and review my work...dark lord
Comment from c_lucas
It is a good thing when one is not held accountable for his sins. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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It is a good thing when one is not held accountable for his sins. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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As always, thank you for taking time to read and review my work...dark lord
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You're welcome, DL. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
good alliteration in strive to succeed
excellent flow to your lines
good consonance of hard C sounds in crumble to the scorched
struck down by the gargoyles of denial - I love that image
You do know how to create a dark mood in a dramatic way!! Brooke :-)
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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good alliteration in strive to succeed
excellent flow to your lines
good consonance of hard C sounds in crumble to the scorched
struck down by the gargoyles of denial - I love that image
You do know how to create a dark mood in a dramatic way!! Brooke :-)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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As always, thank you for taking time to read and review my work...dark lord
