The Door to the Elders
Rejection by those who judge49 total reviews
Comment from hari anand
I have come up short in the eyes of those who judge, I we are our own better judge, I hate those who judge others to hide their own shortcomings.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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I have come up short in the eyes of those who judge, I we are our own better judge, I hate those who judge others to hide their own shortcomings.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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thank you for your kind insight to this piece...dark lord
Comment from artemis53
The picture is exquisite, the colors are in tune with the theme and your words are precise and descriptive (I always have liked the phrase "scorched earth" and first heard it used in music by Joni Mitchell in her 'Turbulent Indigo composition). We don't walk the same path but you've expressed yourself with great fluency and a meticulous flow.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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The picture is exquisite, the colors are in tune with the theme and your words are precise and descriptive (I always have liked the phrase "scorched earth" and first heard it used in music by Joni Mitchell in her 'Turbulent Indigo composition). We don't walk the same path but you've expressed yourself with great fluency and a meticulous flow.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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thank you so very much...dark lord
Comment from sibhus
Hmm, a really interesting poem with such a dark feeling to it. I like how it has a brooding sense to it a s if the Elders are simply bored and waiting for you to fail. An excellent poem.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Hmm, a really interesting poem with such a dark feeling to it. I like how it has a brooding sense to it a s if the Elders are simply bored and waiting for you to fail. An excellent poem.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much...dark lord
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes I enjoyed this short work a very powerful write you fear rejection by those who judge at the door of the elders this is well written well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Yes I enjoyed this short work a very powerful write you fear rejection by those who judge at the door of the elders this is well written well done regards Jill
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much...dark lord
Comment from juliedickson55
Ohhh. Eerie and mysterious in the delivery. I like it.
The sights:
"The Door to the Elders stands before me "
Odor bombards the senses with fragrance.
"Taking a whiff of the sulfur that surrounds the mountain sanctuary"
And the ears are startled with violent sound.
"Thunder Claps are heard "
I like the way you examine the different senses in your poem.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Ohhh. Eerie and mysterious in the delivery. I like it.
The sights:
"The Door to the Elders stands before me "
Odor bombards the senses with fragrance.
"Taking a whiff of the sulfur that surrounds the mountain sanctuary"
And the ears are startled with violent sound.
"Thunder Claps are heard "
I like the way you examine the different senses in your poem.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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WOW! Thank you so very much for the kind words, much appreciated...dark lord
Comment from gudbjorg
Your poem is well written and easy to comprehend, although I prefer upholding the light in order to see through the darkness, like a path through the cobweb of difficulties and disappointments. Like this phrase, "I catch a glimpse of success."Glimpse is a good word, it ministers faith that you can do it, you don't have to fail or feel rejected. We must all learn to rule our own lives and find our
destiny. You have a good talented to write, so keep it up.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Your poem is well written and easy to comprehend, although I prefer upholding the light in order to see through the darkness, like a path through the cobweb of difficulties and disappointments. Like this phrase, "I catch a glimpse of success."Glimpse is a good word, it ministers faith that you can do it, you don't have to fail or feel rejected. We must all learn to rule our own lives and find our
destiny. You have a good talented to write, so keep it up.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much, you brighten my day with your words...dark lord
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Glad to hear that!
Comment from Heaven Bound
An interesting read. Well-written. You do have a way of putting the words together that keep us focused. As for the dark side aspect - I'll visit it occasionally, but don't want to stay there.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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An interesting read. Well-written. You do have a way of putting the words together that keep us focused. As for the dark side aspect - I'll visit it occasionally, but don't want to stay there.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from kashmayank
Nice work if there is such a doothen it will be nice finding it because then we will have all the wisdom of the world wont we anyways best of luck nice work
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Nice work if there is such a doothen it will be nice finding it because then we will have all the wisdom of the world wont we anyways best of luck nice work
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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thank you for visiting my work...dark lord
Comment from justatuna
I had to give this one a 6. Very intense style of writing. Wasn't sure if it would by my style. It was, it was excellent. Flowed very well while painting a very somber picture. Excellent message as well. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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I had to give this one a 6. Very intense style of writing. Wasn't sure if it would by my style. It was, it was excellent. Flowed very well while painting a very somber picture. Excellent message as well. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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WOW!!!! Thank you so very much for the incredible review. It means the world to me that you think this highly of my work...dark lord
Comment from Alexmi1984
That was a beautifully written dark, Gothic poem. I think that even in my wildest dreams, it might be almost impossible for me to write such a gem. Images, flow, reading easiness were the things that I enjoyed the most as I read your poem.
Great job!!
Alex :)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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That was a beautifully written dark, Gothic poem. I think that even in my wildest dreams, it might be almost impossible for me to write such a gem. Images, flow, reading easiness were the things that I enjoyed the most as I read your poem.
Great job!!
Alex :)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
