Comment from Schalk Jacobs

Excellent

Sorry, but have been a bit busy the last few months. Love this poem and your word choice of lore and brutality helps paint a true picture of the sea.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015

Hi, Schalk, thank you for dropping by.
I hope you have a good Christmas.
God bless.
Nicole

Comment from pbroussard209

Exceptional

I loved this, it is everything I think about the sea, I am not a beach person, I have a healthy fear of the ocean, I hate going to Florida, because I know my kids are out playing in the waves. I am a ball of axiety the whole time, lol.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015

Thank you, Trish, for your awesome review. Yes, a rough sea is a scary, dangerous sea indeed.
Nicole

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Wow, so you write poems as well, Nicole, and very well at that. Yes, the mysteries of the ocean is tantalising, but to have great respect is paramount for when the sea gets angry it is relentless. Liked this a lot.
Loved your art work to go with it. All the best. Ulla

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015

Thank you, Ulla.
Nicole

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Yes, an eternal mystery indeed.

Eternal writhing motion;
powerful, brutal ocean. - my favourite lines. You've captured the essence of the ocean with these words.

Enjoyed, Nicole.

Sonali

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015

Thank you, Sonali.
Nicole

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Endless whispers calling me,
softest murmurs, restless sea.
Timeless, tortured, helpless plea,
tireless, constant haunting sea.

What a treat to find a poem from you, Nicole -
the words, and both rhythm and rhyme flowing
smoothly throughout - with good imagery.


Margaret

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015

Thank you, Margaret.
Nicole

Comment from Annette Gulliver

Excellent

Such beautiful artwork, Nicole, you certainly are one very talented lady with a paint brush.
I enjoyed this poem. It brought the sea to life, with the sirens calling to those in peril on the waves. I have a lot of respect for the sea, when she is angry she shows no mercy.
Annette

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015

Yes--no mercy. You are right about that. Thanks, Annette.
Nicole

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is a beautiful and eerie write, curly, great imagery presented in both the words and the artwork. I enjoyed reading this and love the picture. I love to watch the ocean churn and crash but do not wish any boats to be on the water at the time.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015

Thank you, Sweetwoodjax, for reading.
Nicole

Comment from Robert Louis Fox

Excellent

I really like the art. Very imaginative. The hair on the mermaid looks a lot like yours.

If bear were "bearing" you'd be maintaining parallel structure. And 'ing' being a soft foot, I think the meter stays the same.

Having been on the high seas, I can say that your description captures the movement of the waves and its haunting appeal. My mistress the sea takes me, she kills but cannot hate.

Thanx for taking me back.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015

Thank you, Robert, for your thoughtful comments. I'm not a poetry expert, so I struggle. However, 'bearing' puts that line up to an 8 syllable count, while the others are all 7. I have read that meter and syllable counts may clash--but I'm uncertain of when or how. So, I took your advice (because obviously something was wrong) by changing that last line in the first stanza to: turmoil waters herald strife. Now it reads like this:

Restless seas of depth and power,
against barren rocks you shower.
Waves spewing undying life,
turmoil waters herald strife.

I hope that's better.
Yours sincerely
Nicole

reply by Robert Louis Fox on 22-Nov-2015

I like it, but to be honest, I didn't dislike it before. I saw that the first 3 lines were past tense and the 4th in the present.

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015

Okay, thanks.
Nicole

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Nicole

_ Neat poem paired very well with your artwork.
_ Something so mystifying yet soothing about the deep blue sea and all its magnificence.

* Happy Thanksgiving & Merry Christmas *

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jacqueline-Jackie-Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015

Thank you, Jax, for reading.
Nicole

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The seas have many story to tell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for some exciting reads. There is very good imagery and descriptive schemes.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015

Thank you, Charlie.
I hope you are having a good day.
Nicole

reply by c_lucas on 23-Nov-2015

As well as I can expect. Charlie