Cutters
a poem about different types of cutting20 total reviews
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
What a great piece of writing! Perfect syllable count, and what an image that comes to mind- I love music and can definitely relate to this as music pretty much delegates a lot of my memories. Great work! Holly
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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What a great piece of writing! Perfect syllable count, and what an image that comes to mind- I love music and can definitely relate to this as music pretty much delegates a lot of my memories. Great work! Holly
Comment Written 19-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks, this grew out of a conversation I had with my granddaughter about some emo kids she knew who were cutters.
Comment from DMCranfield
Wow. I was incredibly touched by your piece.
Interestingly enough, I just wrote a blog about the different songs I have been moved by... and, in a way, kind of emotionally cutting myself with them.
Incredible, beautiful, touching. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Wow. I was incredibly touched by your piece.
Interestingly enough, I just wrote a blog about the different songs I have been moved by... and, in a way, kind of emotionally cutting myself with them.
Incredible, beautiful, touching. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Again, my thanks.
Comment from Titanx9
I know there's a message in this one that I am simply not getting, but it sounds cogent. Is music a punishment for you or do you consider new material cuts? Either way, I exercised my noggin with this one. Great job! Good luck!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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I know there's a message in this one that I am simply not getting, but it sounds cogent. Is music a punishment for you or do you consider new material cuts? Either way, I exercised my noggin with this one. Great job! Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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It's about using music to evoke painful memories. Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I take it the main character is playing music as a punishment. To keep the nostalgia and memories attached to the music enveloping them. The flow and rhythm were great and the feeling came through loud and clear. Nice job.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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I take it the main character is playing music as a punishment. To keep the nostalgia and memories attached to the music enveloping them. The flow and rhythm were great and the feeling came through loud and clear. Nice job.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Yes.
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from green5587
you, certainly, hold nothing back, do you. I get this with a bang. Very clear message. The style is correct, good job. We all punish using different methods. If I may make one suggestion, using artwork will add more punch. A reviewer of one of my works told me this and it has made an impact. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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you, certainly, hold nothing back, do you. I get this with a bang. Very clear message. The style is correct, good job. We all punish using different methods. If I may make one suggestion, using artwork will add more punch. A reviewer of one of my works told me this and it has made an impact. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thanks, glad you you liked it. I'll see what I can do.
Comment from 9999pool
Wow, sound like magic to cut myself with music with a clever twist of the mighty tongue. Cut as in cut a record. Actual can also say 'I burn myself in music, drowned in memories.' LOL. Good write. Entertaining and super sharp. Watch that cut..first cut is always the deepest, did someone not say? Excellent work. Cheers.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Wow, sound like magic to cut myself with music with a clever twist of the mighty tongue. Cut as in cut a record. Actual can also say 'I burn myself in music, drowned in memories.' LOL. Good write. Entertaining and super sharp. Watch that cut..first cut is always the deepest, did someone not say? Excellent work. Cheers.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thanks, glad you you liked it.
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Welcome. Cheers. Richie.
Comment from Craigitar
I like this neat little 5-7-5 poem. It flows nicely, no choppiness characteristic of poorly constructed, limited format poetry and I understand it (a big plus); music induced memories can cut deeply. I find no room for improvement or correction. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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I like this neat little 5-7-5 poem. It flows nicely, no choppiness characteristic of poorly constructed, limited format poetry and I understand it (a big plus); music induced memories can cut deeply. I find no room for improvement or correction. Good job.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from fairy77
Wow!The way you phrased this was certainly eye catching.You did well to bring awareness and you indeed cut yourself with music.Guilty also.Well done!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Wow!The way you phrased this was certainly eye catching.You did well to bring awareness and you indeed cut yourself with music.Guilty also.Well done!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow, this tiny poem is extraordinarily evocative! I admire your courage to write and share it. I liked your use of alliteration in this 5-7-5 to intensify the emotion even further. This has to be a winning entry! Best wishes- Joan
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Wow, this tiny poem is extraordinarily evocative! I admire your courage to write and share it. I liked your use of alliteration in this 5-7-5 to intensify the emotion even further. This has to be a winning entry! Best wishes- Joan
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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thank you.
It evolved out of a conversation I had with my granddaughter about emo kids she knew who were cutters.
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Thank you for sharing the back-story. Good luck in the voting booth. -Joan
Comment from Treischel
An interesting 5-7-5 poetry example that evokes some very interesting emotions. Cut with a blade or cut a tune, hmmm deeper than I thought. And memories are recalled as associated with music. More profound than first glance.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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An interesting 5-7-5 poetry example that evokes some very interesting emotions. Cut with a blade or cut a tune, hmmm deeper than I thought. And memories are recalled as associated with music. More profound than first glance.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thank you. It evolved out of a conversation about emo kids cutting themselves and why.
