Comment from Nescher Pyscher

Excellent

Wow.

I've got nothing to say about this, Ric. It's a beautiful poem.

I wish I could leave this review space blank, and let you know I read it.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

what an excellent poem
a very enjoyable read
from top to bottom
it flowed smoothly
an enchantment
of romantic
enhancement
........John

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2005

Comment from Balladeer

Excellent

Water flows as smooth as the words of your prose...The liquidity of the story cascades off the rocks of my perception... Write On... Peace

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2005

Comment from WritePoeticSorceress

Excellent

This poem really touched me, thinking about how my husband I went through hard times a few years back. What a beautiful job-Keep writing!

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2005

Comment from Moonchild28

Excellent

This poem is poignant and powerful and very well written. I see a victim of rape and the shame and guilt of self blame. Feeling unworthy to be loved.

So take the initiative...
Wrap me in your arms,
Whisper you love me,
And I'm safe from harm.
Tell me you need me,
And you'll always stay...
Despite all my guilt,
Despite all my blame.
Tell me you're sorry,
And dispel my pain.
Wipe away my tears...
Kiss away my shame.
Tell me you want me,
When my passion wanes.
Assure me we'll work harder,
To restore the flame.
Reach out to me,
And promise you'll help.
Because, you see,
I can't do it by myself

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2005

Comment from raywithrow

Excellent

This is really good!!! Who was it directed to , and does that person know, or even begin to imagine how lucky they are? I enjoyed this a lot!!!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2005

Comment from CarolinasAngel

Excellent

This is wonderful, and something I can really relate to. I didn't see any errors. In fact I think it was very well written. I enjoyed every single word.

:o) Candy

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2005

Comment from passions4life

Excellent

Love it! I could feel the yearning, the excitement and the pain...the words touched my senses.

When I read and reread it, the words seem to make me rush... wanting more...

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2005

Comment from Gabe

Excellent

Nice, unique and interesting poem,here. Very passionate and full of the intensity that is in love. Nicely presented! One thought - the passion and direction in the poem lends itself to someone who is hopeful in the relationship. Yes....?

The line: "But despite my desire, My passion wanes."
seems to betray the verses before it as well as those that follow. It may be just how I read it.

A very intense poem!

-peace!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2005

Comment from Iron Maiden7o7

Excellent

I like this one very much my dear. Very well written with a whole lot of raw emotions. The flow was very good also. I like the type of poem that it is. Very different and reads very well, thanks for sharing. :-)

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2005