The Almighty
A set of Cinquain-For Peter@Poole22 total reviews
Comment from doterogod
I love this poem praising the Almighty! You have portrayed what I believe how anyone can not believe is beyond me. I think it's because they don't want to change their lifestyle.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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I love this poem praising the Almighty! You have portrayed what I believe how anyone can not believe is beyond me. I think it's because they don't want to change their lifestyle.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Hello again my friend, I thank you for the honor, I am humbled and grateful to you for your time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
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No problem keep in touch ok?
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You bet, and please take care, thank you.
Comment from deb552
This does read like a bedtime prayer, and the picture adds to that feel. I enjoyed the sincere yet light-hearted message you send about 'His" existence. It's well written with a good flow. Best of luck in the contest. deb
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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This does read like a bedtime prayer, and the picture adds to that feel. I enjoyed the sincere yet light-hearted message you send about 'His" existence. It's well written with a good flow. Best of luck in the contest. deb
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Hello deb, my friend, I appreciate your time and am glad that you like the write, thank you very much.
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It was my pleasure reading and sharing my thoughts with you. deb
Comment from Karl_Schembri
Tight, lives up to its name, flows nicely - I'm just a bit bothered by 'how could anybody'... sounds a bit prosaic although very logical ... don't know if this is at all helpful though.
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Tight, lives up to its name, flows nicely - I'm just a bit bothered by 'how could anybody'... sounds a bit prosaic although very logical ... don't know if this is at all helpful though.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Karl my friend, appreciate your time and your review is always helpful sir, thank you very much.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Kamran, Clearly I missed this wonderful write. It has a thoughtful message which makes a reader feel good to read. Congrats on making POM nomination and Good luck. An honor to be in the same contest with you! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Hello Kamran, Clearly I missed this wonderful write. It has a thoughtful message which makes a reader feel good to read. Congrats on making POM nomination and Good luck. An honor to be in the same contest with you! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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xoxo my friend, likewise, it's a honor for me too; I appreciate the time and the encouraging review, thank you very much and I wish you the best.
Comment from Jean Lutz
This is truth poured out with the pureness of a child. Congratulations on having this selected for consideration of poem of the month. It is a winner for me.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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This is truth poured out with the pureness of a child. Congratulations on having this selected for consideration of poem of the month. It is a winner for me.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Jean my friend, I am honored by your visit and so pleased to read your wonderful, encouraging review, thank you very much, God bless you.
Comment from Joyce Crowe
Excellent job with the Clinquain format. I like the last two lines in each verse best, because there is a little twist of humor that does not take away from the reverence of God. The picture chosen is perfect for this poem.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Excellent job with the Clinquain format. I like the last two lines in each verse best, because there is a little twist of humor that does not take away from the reverence of God. The picture chosen is perfect for this poem.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Hello again my friend, I am delighted you like the write, I appreciate your time and the wonderful, encouraging review, thank you very much, God bless you.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. It is like a pray. Yes, God is every where. He sees all and hears all. There is a little bit of him in everything that is part of world. Great work.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It is like a pray. Yes, God is every where. He sees all and hears all. There is a little bit of him in everything that is part of world. Great work.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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elliejean my friend, I am pleased to read your wonderful insights, I thank you for your time and the kind review, God bless you.
Comment from Peter@Poole
Your cinquains contain some insightful and intelligent reflections, capable of making the reader really think them through. You've managed to fulfil the structural requirements of this form by making careful use of enjambment [carry over of some lines]. This is a useful technique in many forms but might be seen as contrived in forms such as haiku, tanka, cinquain. You are at liberty to disagree with me, of course, and argue a contrary view. Since I'm referring to different tastes, I still think your fine writing deserves a six. Thank you for the dedication. Peter
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Your cinquains contain some insightful and intelligent reflections, capable of making the reader really think them through. You've managed to fulfil the structural requirements of this form by making careful use of enjambment [carry over of some lines]. This is a useful technique in many forms but might be seen as contrived in forms such as haiku, tanka, cinquain. You are at liberty to disagree with me, of course, and argue a contrary view. Since I'm referring to different tastes, I still think your fine writing deserves a six. Thank you for the dedication. Peter
Comment Written 11-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hello again my friend, much obliged and thank you very much for the kind, generous review as well as the wonderful suggestion, always respect your advice, thank you.
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I feel that enjambment [some say enjambement] looks better in longer pieces, but I've just reviewed an excellent example in Mauial's latest 5-7-5. Peter
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi ameen,
You have written a lovely set of cinquains. Your well chosen words are exquisite, the fkow is even and I love the theme. How could we deny His existence? Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hi ameen,
You have written a lovely set of cinquains. Your well chosen words are exquisite, the fkow is even and I love the theme. How could we deny His existence? Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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chey my friend, I thank you for your time and the encouragement, always grateful and honored by your visit, thank you very much.
Comment from Spitfire
Very clever stanza one with its reference to the sea and Jonah. Then stanza two with the virgin birth of Jesus.
Even the blind have an insight--great line and very persuasive.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Very clever stanza one with its reference to the sea and Jonah. Then stanza two with the virgin birth of Jesus.
Even the blind have an insight--great line and very persuasive.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Shari my friend, I am delighted to read your wonderful comments and am glad that you like the write, as always, much obliged, thank you very much, have a great week.
