Fallen so weak in love
Feelings of the one who stands on the weaker side of love!3 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
snehsweet, in the 5/7/5 form required by this contest, you need to have a specific syllable count in each line. The first line needs to have 5 syllables. The second line needs to have 7 syllables. The third lines should consist of 5 syllables. In your first stanza your syllable count is 5/6/7
Your second stanza is 5/8/5
Your third stanza is6/7/6
Your fourth stanza is5/7/6
You express the speaker's emotions effectively
the 4 rating is due to syllable count problems :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2012
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snehsweet, in the 5/7/5 form required by this contest, you need to have a specific syllable count in each line. The first line needs to have 5 syllables. The second line needs to have 7 syllables. The third lines should consist of 5 syllables. In your first stanza your syllable count is 5/6/7
Your second stanza is 5/8/5
Your third stanza is6/7/6
Your fourth stanza is5/7/6
You express the speaker's emotions effectively
the 4 rating is due to syllable count problems :-) Brooke
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2012
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I modified my work..Can u tell me if it is OK now?
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I just reread your poem. Yes, in its revised for it is now in good 5/7/5 format.
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thanks...:)
Comment from mumsyone
Syllable count is good now.
Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. Even with three stanzas, the 5-7-5 would call for 3 lines (in each stanza) of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. I hope you can fix it so that it qualifies for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2012
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Syllable count is good now.
Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. Even with three stanzas, the 5-7-5 would call for 3 lines (in each stanza) of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. I hope you can fix it so that it qualifies for the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2012
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i modified the poem..tell me if its good now?
Comment from angela-mcfarlane
This is a great poem. It captures the heartache of love so well and questions why do you still love and want this person who makes you feel this way.
Well done and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2012
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This is a great poem. It captures the heartache of love so well and questions why do you still love and want this person who makes you feel this way.
Well done and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2012
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hey..thanx a lot
