Summer Retreat, Life's Relief!
Seasons don't always improve with age.69 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
I love summer but as I get older I find that I'm slowing down and watching more and doing less. You are right, seasons don't always improve with age.
Nice rhyme and alliteration and even flow of words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I love summer but as I get older I find that I'm slowing down and watching more and doing less. You are right, seasons don't always improve with age.
Nice rhyme and alliteration and even flow of words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from justatuna
This was something I really enjoyed reading. Found myself smiling throught. The reason was your ability to create excellent imagery. This was a joy to read. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This was something I really enjoyed reading. Found myself smiling throught. The reason was your ability to create excellent imagery. This was a joy to read. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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That's the one thing I enjoy about writing the most, and I am glad that came about, because relaying experiences and images is what I feel is important. I enjoyed reading this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from J. Dark
I really enjoyed this piece of poetry and thought it was a brilliant concept. "Steamed crabs and barbeques" really took me into the piece and I loved the references to children playing. Great poem!
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I really enjoyed this piece of poetry and thought it was a brilliant concept. "Steamed crabs and barbeques" really took me into the piece and I loved the references to children playing. Great poem!
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from bonnie composanto
This is a nicely written poem about the seasons and how they affect us, especially harder on the elders. I love the picture and it says what you wanted it to say.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This is a nicely written poem about the seasons and how they affect us, especially harder on the elders. I love the picture and it says what you wanted it to say.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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What a wonderful impression to create. I enjoyed the compliments and review. Thank you, Mike
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you are welcome
Comment from terry drake
It is easy to render your five stars on this poem because I share so much of your story. I was taken back a bit by your switch to five lines at the end; but after reading the verse it read just fine.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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It is easy to render your five stars on this poem because I share so much of your story. I was taken back a bit by your switch to five lines at the end; but after reading the verse it read just fine.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I call it a Cajun turn, as in so much of their music they slip a little something in to change the tempo. I find it works well with poetry too. I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
Life like nature has its seasons. Since we here in South Louisiana have just gone through another hurricane. Your words actually turned my thoughts to the nursing homes residents here currently without electricity and the "feels like" temperature is 100 degrees. May your words help many to renew.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Life like nature has its seasons. Since we here in South Louisiana have just gone through another hurricane. Your words actually turned my thoughts to the nursing homes residents here currently without electricity and the "feels like" temperature is 100 degrees. May your words help many to renew.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Now this could be a made up term by the utility, but earlier this summer we were hit with a rare storm called a, "Dereco." Living though it was like having an entire hurricane in one storm and did as much damage. I lucked out with losing a day in a half of electricity, but across the street it was five days.
I was also told at work the morning after being dropped off, "I got to the end of the street and turned on Old Harford and I swear lightning struck right behind me in a neighbors yard. I had the shakes driving the rest of the way."
I replied, "I heard that one and said, 'Damn that's close!', then lighting struck right behind me and I felt the heat and it was like someone threw a blockbuster between my legs." I looked up and said, "God, I know what close is!"
I did worry about my Louisiana friends quite a bit. I thank you for the compliments and review, also for sharing too. Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mike, you did a great job writing this poem about the different seasons that people like or dislike the best and the reasons for it....i prefer fall and spring.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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this is very well written, mike, you did a great job writing this poem about the different seasons that people like or dislike the best and the reasons for it....i prefer fall and spring.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I thank you for the reviewing my poem and the compliments. Mike
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Summer has its attractions as does every season. It's good to be reminded of them when the heat and humidity make even the simplest chores too much effort. Well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Summer has its attractions as does every season. It's good to be reminded of them when the heat and humidity make even the simplest chores too much effort. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Today was just such a day! I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from THE FREAK
Mike K2's (Love the K2 part) have indulged those with forgotten lives of the heat and summer frolic to which we all enjoyed as a child, and to notice better yet, proudly parade the one time of year we can appreciate a bit of decent weather, questions why two-thirds are wasted in doors, separated and ill-sociable to mother nature's reoccurring season. Furthermore, from the prospective of an old man to which has in-captivated an elderly old twenty three year old brings a notion to why I should appreciate the here and now, for my child will grow and possible ignore me within her own adult years, and to understand this, whilst gaily enjoying my summer days with my child, beckons a time to gain an ally, someone to share my days forevermore.
In summation; Mike's common complaint highlighting the frail and forgotten allows us to keep one thing in mind, and that IS our mind, for your sense of remembrance is a form of hope, granting access to a day or time within our lives that could possibly be relived...! And as we live longer and become more greedy, it is the elderly to whom has to save themselves with precious memories of days gone by.
All the best
THE FREAK
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Mike K2's (Love the K2 part) have indulged those with forgotten lives of the heat and summer frolic to which we all enjoyed as a child, and to notice better yet, proudly parade the one time of year we can appreciate a bit of decent weather, questions why two-thirds are wasted in doors, separated and ill-sociable to mother nature's reoccurring season. Furthermore, from the prospective of an old man to which has in-captivated an elderly old twenty three year old brings a notion to why I should appreciate the here and now, for my child will grow and possible ignore me within her own adult years, and to understand this, whilst gaily enjoying my summer days with my child, beckons a time to gain an ally, someone to share my days forevermore.
In summation; Mike's common complaint highlighting the frail and forgotten allows us to keep one thing in mind, and that IS our mind, for your sense of remembrance is a form of hope, granting access to a day or time within our lives that could possibly be relived...! And as we live longer and become more greedy, it is the elderly to whom has to save themselves with precious memories of days gone by.
All the best
THE FREAK
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I really enjoyed this review and thank you for it, what you said and your compliments. Mike
Comment from Bobbi22
Your poem explores the joys and labors of summer from the simplicity of children playing to the struggles that the elderly endure to breathe. The only negative I see here is the length of some lines - some words can be eliminated to make the poem read more fluidly. Otherwise very well written.
reminds just how little, it takes to enjoy the day --> no comma needed after little
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Your poem explores the joys and labors of summer from the simplicity of children playing to the struggles that the elderly endure to breathe. The only negative I see here is the length of some lines - some words can be eliminated to make the poem read more fluidly. Otherwise very well written.
reminds just how little, it takes to enjoy the day --> no comma needed after little
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I did touch up the commas, and tweeked the length; but ended up longer so to give it more appeal, I split the line. Much like a turn in a Cajun tune. I thank you for your compliments, suggestions and this review. Mike
