Summer Retreat, Life's Relief!
Seasons don't always improve with age.69 total reviews
Comment from givan
Beautiful. I love the way you show how no matter what age you are some things stay the same. You still do some of the same stuff you did as a kid and sometimes you only do it a little differently.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Beautiful. I love the way you show how no matter what age you are some things stay the same. You still do some of the same stuff you did as a kid and sometimes you only do it a little differently.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Things also change, such as I figured adventure that I loved so much was over and I actually took up writing in want of a boring pursuit, but so far, writing has been the grandest adventure of all.
I loved this review and thank you for it! Mike
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writing is great. I did not know before I took a college writing class that I would actually enjoy writing, whether it is a story or a poem. I thought that with high school gone so long ago, that I would only read what others have written, but I have found a lot of enjoyment out of spinning stories or creating poetry-whether it is from what I see or what I imagine. Wishing you the best in your writing, continue enjoying your adventure.
Comment from Maustin
"As your body ages and the seasons seem more severe,
remember what made them special, that you revere.
Comfort and effort become less a concern,
as you find reasons to come out and renew your spirit,
with another wonderful season to discern."
Interesting stanza here. Yes, I have heard about the seasons and age. I work with population. I see too.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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"As your body ages and the seasons seem more severe,
remember what made them special, that you revere.
Comfort and effort become less a concern,
as you find reasons to come out and renew your spirit,
with another wonderful season to discern."
Interesting stanza here. Yes, I have heard about the seasons and age. I work with population. I see too.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I thank you for sharing with me your favorite, the review and the compliment. Mike
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So welcome, Mike.
Miracle *;)~
Comment from juliedickson55
Yes, unfortunately I like the IDEA of summer, but it's just too hot.
"Summer's bounty isn't worth the extra trip,
as legs cramp and lungs labor in arid grip."
I prefer autumn cool nights and warm afternoons, but fall is over with too quickly. They say the seasons are each 3 mos, but why does autumn seem shorter?
Statistically midlife? I wonder where that is now?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Yes, unfortunately I like the IDEA of summer, but it's just too hot.
"Summer's bounty isn't worth the extra trip,
as legs cramp and lungs labor in arid grip."
I prefer autumn cool nights and warm afternoons, but fall is over with too quickly. They say the seasons are each 3 mos, but why does autumn seem shorter?
Statistically midlife? I wonder where that is now?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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It always seems that way, and as I refer to it, "A war between summer trying to maintain its foothold, and winter wanting to come in. I'm forty seven now, but I only want to remain living as I have quality of life. Life expectancy in the US is 78.5. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it. Mike
Comment from adewpearl
Strong rhyming couplets
and in later stanzas, other rhymes
good alliteration in legs cramp and lungs labor and this and many other lines describe in a compelling way the way extremes of weather affect our bodies as we age
I also like the advice in the closing to look back on our fond memories to keep in mind what about the seasons we first revered :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Strong rhyming couplets
and in later stanzas, other rhymes
good alliteration in legs cramp and lungs labor and this and many other lines describe in a compelling way the way extremes of weather affect our bodies as we age
I also like the advice in the closing to look back on our fond memories to keep in mind what about the seasons we first revered :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Not alliteration, altercation! LOL Wow, I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. I always can't figure out how I come up with things, but with poetry, you sort of take the mundane and try to work out a way to make it take a forefront it normally wouldn't. Have a great week ahead! Mike
Comment from mermaids
I think winter can take a toll on older people. Your words describe well how the seasons can affect us as we age. Remember what made them special, you revere is my favorite line, it focuses on being positive.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I think winter can take a toll on older people. Your words describe well how the seasons can affect us as we age. Remember what made them special, you revere is my favorite line, it focuses on being positive.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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The poem didn't really work for me strictly talking about summer, and by including both seasons, I think one better understands who the extremes become harder to handle.
I thank you for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
What started out as what could've been a fearful lament ended up with an upbeat, happy, positive resolution. Well done, my friend. Thanks for sharing your insight with us here. A winner! Enjoy your Labor Day weekend, as you should!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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What started out as what could've been a fearful lament ended up with an upbeat, happy, positive resolution. Well done, my friend. Thanks for sharing your insight with us here. A winner! Enjoy your Labor Day weekend, as you should!
cheers
js
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I don't like writing sad and melancholy poems, but find that mood does add a bit of drama to contrast a happier outlook. I thank you for this enjoyable review and the compliments. You enjoy your holiday as well! Mike
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well concerting poem I feel like that when I was young I loved the snow now its cold ad slippery when it snows thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This is a very well concerting poem I feel like that when I was young I loved the snow now its cold ad slippery when it snows thank you for sharing
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I thank you for this enjoyable review and I really like that you can identify with it. Mike
Comment from Katherine2
You did a wonderful summer poem. I liked the way the lines were broken up. I especially liked the last line. Good content. I really enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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You did a wonderful summer poem. I liked the way the lines were broken up. I especially liked the last line. Good content. I really enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I enjoy writing as if a poem is a string of pictures that dance though one's mind. I think the little Cajun turn in it keeps it fresh. Thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Inky Cat
A nice message. I think we do lose that sense of amazement of the world changing, either blooming into spring, shining in golden summer, or sparkling in snow. Even though I'm only (almost) 40, I will remember, next time I'm walking home under a late summer sky, to forget my workday and tiredness, and enjoy what nature has to offer. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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A nice message. I think we do lose that sense of amazement of the world changing, either blooming into spring, shining in golden summer, or sparkling in snow. Even though I'm only (almost) 40, I will remember, next time I'm walking home under a late summer sky, to forget my workday and tiredness, and enjoy what nature has to offer. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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"Like" I walk back and forth to work and there is always something new, and something else to take you back a bit. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from misscookie
This is lovely poem not only about the reason
it's boutaging and make it the best days that we have, not to take anything for grants.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This is lovely poem not only about the reason
it's boutaging and make it the best days that we have, not to take anything for grants.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I thank you for this enjoyable review and the compliments. Mike
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My pleasure
