Comment from Leeza Maisyan

Good

Great poem! Short but on to the point! It makes me think about how us Christians should be. We should bless others with the Love and Mercy we were blessed with! God bless. :)

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2012

Thank you, Just curious to know what would have helped make it better?

Comment from Deniz22

Exceptional

Simple, satisfying, spiritually succulent! Great job;few words with mighty thoughts. Thank you !


Simple, satisfying, spiritually succulent! Great job;few words with mighty thoughts. Thank you !

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2012

Wow, thank you. You made my day. Six stars are hard to come by these days.

Comment from Deo Dae

Good

This was a pretty solid poem, but I did have one problem with it and would like to get that out of the way. Not one word in this poem rhymed with another. I know I am a little crazy about rhymes, but I feel just the one right rhyme can sometimes make a poem. However, this poem was well written. Imagery was great, the story was easily followed, and it was very soulful. Keep it up!

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2012

Thanks for the review, but if you will look up the description of a tanka poem, it is supposed to be unrhymed. I do appreciate you taking time to review my work though,