Dark Heaven
A poem that speaks lust.2 total reviews
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Who or what does the grey dog symbolize? I was a little confused by that. I liked the rest of the piece though. Just need a little more information.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Who or what does the grey dog symbolize? I was a little confused by that. I liked the rest of the piece though. Just need a little more information.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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It's a haiku. A 5-7-5 poem. Words are limiyed in this poem. ^-^
Comment from Tina McKala
I like it, but I don`t understand the first line very clearly...what exactly is the grey dog? :) Or is it just a random dog outside barking? Or is it a person? (There`s one more thing that came into my mind, but that one is pretty much too perverted, so I hope it`s not that :D)
But your poem made me wonder and it has nice flow, good job!
Tina
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I like it, but I don`t understand the first line very clearly...what exactly is the grey dog? :) Or is it just a random dog outside barking? Or is it a person? (There`s one more thing that came into my mind, but that one is pretty much too perverted, so I hope it`s not that :D)
But your poem made me wonder and it has nice flow, good job!
Tina
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thanks Tina. I appreciate it a lot. his really has a sexual undertone. The grey dog would be just like any other dog but grey would also symbolize confusion. Thank you. ^-^
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Thank you for your answer, yes, I got that undertone, I loved that, just my dirty mind came up with some images and I wasn`t sure which one of them and if it was a metaphor or not and it what way :D
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Yeah. It takes a writer to understand it. Thanks Tina. It's my first poem here and I'm just using my smartphone. I won't forget my first reviewer. Thanks. ^-^
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You`re welcome!
