Comment from Charlene0513

Poor

To Shahd Alsoud,
Although I have empathy for what your land is facing with the water reserve, this is not on the lines of a 5/7/5 poem that requires only those 17 syllables.
Your short story is important though and should be valued.
Personally, I would love to visit the Dead Sea and hear stories of yore of our Savior.
To give you an example of a 5/7/5 poem:

A but-ter-fly is |5
part of na-ture with col-ors |7 =syllables
but live for a day |5
I hope this helps.
Charlene

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012

Thanks a lot Charlene. Can you please tell me how can I post an essay for free. I'm totally new on this. Thanks in advance.

reply by Charlene0513 on 18-Aug-2012

Up top you will see the Sub-Titles.
Click on "Write."
It will disclose to you what type of work you wish to post. Click on Essay if that is what you wish to post.
Go to your documents and copy or highlight in blue your works and then paste them to the area provided.
But be sure to edit your work before you click "Save" at bottom of page. As sometimes some words do not join or you may not have paragraphs divided properly.
Put the Title and Sub-title in areas shown.
Hope this helps!
Charlene

Comment from Onixxiya

Needs Improvement

You have a lot to say, and it is interesting stuff. But I am afraid my rating is based upon the fact this is down as your 5-7-5 contest entry. Did you submit the wrong piece? If so, come back to me when it is amended and I will re-review.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012

Thanks a lot. I'm new to this but I can't know what this 5-7-5 contest mean. Can you help me please. I appreciate it a lot.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

This is more like a short story, commentary/philosophy. That's not a 5-7-5. You could get many 5-7-5 haiku out of there though. Maybe you should check out PoetryDance(s) website for assitance of poetry writing. Good luck to you.

Eid Mubarak.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012

Thanks for the comment. I'm new to this site but can you yell me more about the 5-7-5 thingie I can't understand it.
Eid Mubarak.

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012

Thanks for the comment. I'm new to this site but can you tell me more about the 5-7-5 thingie I can't understand it.
Eid Mubarak.

reply by sunnilicious on 18-Aug-2012

U're welcome.
You write 3 descriptive lines about something that does not need a picture because your words evokes the image in your mind.....
Line 1 is a word syllable count of 5.
Line 2 is a syllable count of 7.
Line 3 is a syllable count of 5.

Example written by Sunnilicious:
crescent rising moon
romantic and wonderous
god is most magnificent

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012

Thanks a lot for making this clear to me. But can I ask you how can I post essays on my profile.

reply by sunnilicious on 18-Aug-2012

I dunno. Maybe, you can edit it from poem to non-fictionstory. Otherwise go to WRITE. Click on story/essay. Then, add it that way. Or just ask FanStory Customer Service. All the best. Peace, love and happiness for always.

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012

Thanks. Wish you the best.