Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Murder in the Cowshed"A collection of my poems
39 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is amazing! I loved it!! How clever to write a murder by a jealous cow! Mind you, that is not unheard of! I wish you the best of luck with this one, it rhymes well, the rhythm is great and it's soooooo funny!! xsx
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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That is amazing! I loved it!! How clever to write a murder by a jealous cow! Mind you, that is not unheard of! I wish you the best of luck with this one, it rhymes well, the rhythm is great and it's soooooo funny!! xsx
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the great review and for the six stars. Glad you enjoyed my piece of silliness.
Comment from lewische
This was so funny! I keep imagining a cow on Freud's couch! And I liked the sound made by'soggy kersplash'. Really lovely, good luck in the competition. Cherri
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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This was so funny! I keep imagining a cow on Freud's couch! And I liked the sound made by'soggy kersplash'. Really lovely, good luck in the competition. Cherri
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thanks, cherri - glad you enjoyed and got a chuckle
Comment from nancyjam
I'm still laughing.! This is so entertaining
and witty. Cleverly rhymed lines that tell
a very funny story with lots of
great images. I think you have a winner here.
Great job. Nancy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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I'm still laughing.! This is so entertaining
and witty. Cleverly rhymed lines that tell
a very funny story with lots of
great images. I think you have a winner here.
Great job. Nancy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the great review and for the six stars. Glad you enjoyed my piece of silliness.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Wow! and Ewwww! This is a well-written, wickedly funny poem
about jealousy, and animals certainly can be jealous. What an end for Zach!
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Wow! and Ewwww! This is a well-written, wickedly funny poem
about jealousy, and animals certainly can be jealous. What an end for Zach!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thanks, Janice.
What a way to go - just going through the motions...
Comment from MumEsGirl
Great fun write with a lovely twist in the end. I love your images of all those gorgeous girls revelling in the farmers touch.
Shame jealousy is rife, even where we least expect it
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Great fun write with a lovely twist in the end. I love your images of all those gorgeous girls revelling in the farmers touch.
Shame jealousy is rife, even where we least expect it
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thanks, Kate.
Cows have feelings, too, you know.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a funny well told story in a poem it made me laugh and I enjoyed reading it very much good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
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This is a funny well told story in a poem it made me laugh and I enjoyed reading it very much good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Than you - glad you got a laugh - that's what my stuff is all about.
Comment from Meta~Mark
Ok now you have my attention, bovine psychology and green eyes monster and Freud in this metaphor laced splendid story of open in black and white and cow shed, wow 10 stars
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Ok now you have my attention, bovine psychology and green eyes monster and Freud in this metaphor laced splendid story of open in black and white and cow shed, wow 10 stars
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thanks, Mark.
Comment from Capricorn30
I love the picture--cows are kind of cute! I grew up around them, we owned one that looked exactly like this cutie here in the photo!
This is so darned humourous--it tells a cute story of a farmer and the psychological mind of his cows;
Poor Zach, drowning in all that goo!
Nice alliteration in "faint,flawed and flimsy"
I also like the mention of the detectives--Columbo,he was my favourite!
Thank you for making me smile--great poem you have provided FS with!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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I love the picture--cows are kind of cute! I grew up around them, we owned one that looked exactly like this cutie here in the photo!
This is so darned humourous--it tells a cute story of a farmer and the psychological mind of his cows;
Poor Zach, drowning in all that goo!
Nice alliteration in "faint,flawed and flimsy"
I also like the mention of the detectives--Columbo,he was my favourite!
Thank you for making me smile--great poem you have provided FS with!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thank you - the smile is what it's all about.
Comment from Jaq Cee
Hahahaha that really made me laugh. What a great,witty poem and very well written. You could really envisage the cows, each one individually. Once again, great poem. Jaq
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Hahahaha that really made me laugh. What a great,witty poem and very well written. You could really envisage the cows, each one individually. Once again, great poem. Jaq
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the great review and for the six stars. Glad you enjoyed my piece of silliness.
Comment from cvcopac
Had me engrossed from the first line. I think that's anapest or dactyl meter--I'm no expert there but I like the sing-song rhythm, nonetheless. Great story and a pleasing read. All the good ones come on at the same time--just like TV. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Had me engrossed from the first line. I think that's anapest or dactyl meter--I'm no expert there but I like the sing-song rhythm, nonetheless. Great story and a pleasing read. All the good ones come on at the same time--just like TV. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the great review and for the six stars. Yeah, one other entrant used the exact same meter and rhyme scheme - think it flows naturally from that first line which was required. Glad you enjoyed my piece of silliness.
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what are the odds on that?
