Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

Rather than the somewhat cliche 3rd line, maybe a multi-syllable word to add flow. For example:

'Enveloped by darkness.
Unanswered questions fade away.
Positivity.'

Just me having an annoying fiddle, but your 575 is fine as it is.

Best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012

Thank you. HaHa, no worries on the fiddle, I find myself doing that with just about everything I read as well. Opinion is appreciated.

reply by Earl of Oxford on 03-Aug-2012

Thanks for your fun and gracious reply, Rose. x

Comment from bonnie composanto

Excellent

This is a nicely written 5-7-5 poem Midnight Madness. What we worry about late at night, seems to be not so bad in the morning. Welcome to Fanstory.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012

Thank you very much. :)

reply by bonnie composanto on 03-Aug-2012

You are welcome.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

This is goooood Rose. It's about that time of night when we begin to have doubts. But being one for the next day,I'll forget them and have at it.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012

Thank you so much! Im glad that you liked it. You are the first review for my very first entry on FanStory :) Once again, thank you.

reply by Gungalo on 03-Aug-2012

Sigh well congrats for that!!