Grandpa T.
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Comment from Joan E.
Angelheart's ephemeral image establishes the mood well for this piece. Your use of dialog and your characters are quite believable. I liked the break in time and the levity at the end as well. -Joan
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Angelheart's ephemeral image establishes the mood well for this piece. Your use of dialog and your characters are quite believable. I liked the break in time and the levity at the end as well. -Joan
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much for this great review, Joan. I always appreciate hearing from you! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed this story about Quintin and his spiritually assisted swim. The like the first person POV and present tense combination. We would all love a guardian angel like Grandpa T.
Excellent writing!
DW
tiny SPAG:
"Hey, Aggie, you realize this changes nothing." Quintin says in reply. "You're still a know-it-all." << comma after '...changes nothing," Quintin...'
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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I enjoyed this story about Quintin and his spiritually assisted swim. The like the first person POV and present tense combination. We would all love a guardian angel like Grandpa T.
Excellent writing!
DW
tiny SPAG:
"Hey, Aggie, you realize this changes nothing." Quintin says in reply. "You're still a know-it-all." << comma after '...changes nothing," Quintin...'
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Hi, DW. Thank you so much for your generous and supportive review. I shall make your suggested change pronto!
I see that we are both taking Stacia's class. I love her! She does a great job with her classes. I think you'll like her.
Warm regards, Bev
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Super! I"m looking forward to the class.
Comment from marchapril
Very nice read. I liked how you tied the blue ball in at the end. The dialogue flows especially well in the 2nd half of the piece. The beginning could use a little bit of work with grammar and word placement, but other than that it was very good.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Very nice read. I liked how you tied the blue ball in at the end. The dialogue flows especially well in the 2nd half of the piece. The beginning could use a little bit of work with grammar and word placement, but other than that it was very good.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Writingfundimension ....
I enjoyed reading this story of the way your deceased Grandfather made his presence known to your brother who is a competitive swimmer. I find myself wondering if this only happens in the swimming pool or does it occur at other times as well?
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Hullo Writingfundimension ....
I enjoyed reading this story of the way your deceased Grandfather made his presence known to your brother who is a competitive swimmer. I find myself wondering if this only happens in the swimming pool or does it occur at other times as well?
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much, Nanette Mary. My story is a fictional piece, though I have had some paranormal experiences, just not this particular variety. Orbs and halos are pretty common phenomenon in the supernatural field.
Again, thanks so much for taking time to read and support my writing.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you Writingfundimension
You say this is fiction,just let me say this about your supernatural spiritual story. You had me believing it
It must be because your writing is so good.
Gert
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Hello to you Writingfundimension
You say this is fiction,just let me say this about your supernatural spiritual story. You had me believing it
It must be because your writing is so good.
Gert
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Hi, Gert. Great to hear from you! Thank you so much for this generous and supportive review. I sure appreciate your kind remarks, too. Warmest regards, Bev
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You are welcome
Gert
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:0) xxx
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
This is a story that is full of intrigue, then the anticipation builds. What is to follow ? Then a dramatic win at the competition, and this is followed by a surprise ending. Very well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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This is a story that is full of intrigue, then the anticipation builds. What is to follow ? Then a dramatic win at the competition, and this is followed by a surprise ending. Very well done.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thank you so very much, HHP. I sure appreciate your great review and words of support. Warmest regards, Bev
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hi bev, you are very welcome, i have a posting that needs i more review.'parkinson's relief' is the name of this poem/song thanks
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Comment from Ed_Anderson
This was an interesting and compelling story. I am a believer in ghosts so I immediately sided with Quint but understood Aggie's point of view. Great job I enjoyed this piece a lot.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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This was an interesting and compelling story. I am a believer in ghosts so I immediately sided with Quint but understood Aggie's point of view. Great job I enjoyed this piece a lot.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Hi, Ed. I'm a believer, too. Thank you so very much for this generous review. I really appreciate the support! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JW
This is a well written chapter. It has good storyline developments. It also reflects your good imagination.
How nice it would be if things like this occurred. JW
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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This is a well written chapter. It has good storyline developments. It also reflects your good imagination.
How nice it would be if things like this occurred. JW
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, Jonathon. I appreciate your words of support and generous review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from MumEsGirl
Wow that was some story. There are many who believe that the spirits of the departed are with them or that they have visited before passing.
This was a totally believable story which was well told and held me spell bound
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Wow that was some story. There are many who believe that the spirits of the departed are with them or that they have visited before passing.
This was a totally believable story which was well told and held me spell bound
hugs
kate
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much, Kate. I do believe that our loved ones visit, especially around holidays, birthdays, and special events.
I really appreciate your support and kind insights. Hugs, Bev
Comment from jadapenn
Ah, heck, I can't give you a sixer, friend. This was so special you had tears in my eyes. I have my little Dolphin who is swimming her guts out and this story really touched me. It is wonderfully written. Loved it. luv jada
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Ah, heck, I can't give you a sixer, friend. This was so special you had tears in my eyes. I have my little Dolphin who is swimming her guts out and this story really touched me. It is wonderfully written. Loved it. luv jada
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Dear Jada, I'm just happy that you enjoyed the story. Thank you for your support and the virtual six. Means a lot to me. Love, Bev
