Going Home
NEVER underestimate 82 year olds!78 total reviews
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
And enjoy I did, Sharon. This is one of those pieces that restores my dwindling faith in this site as a venue for seriously talented visionary writers. The flawless, subtle wit and expert pacing of this one literally DEMANDS to be on-stage, or even on film. You have a masterful command of dialogue and I don't toss out kudos like that like some fairy godmother waltzing through the gutter distributing flower petals.
Laughed out loud at the deep, but hilariously cynical descriptions of the mother... ''her narcissism, her destructiveness, her selfishness, her failed attempts at loving us, her wounded courage ... and her attachment to ... beautiful ... things ... her treasure trove of rare antique cups & saucers...''
PRICELESS!
great stuff! Keep going. wanna see more of this kinda work here..
cheers!
js
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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And enjoy I did, Sharon. This is one of those pieces that restores my dwindling faith in this site as a venue for seriously talented visionary writers. The flawless, subtle wit and expert pacing of this one literally DEMANDS to be on-stage, or even on film. You have a masterful command of dialogue and I don't toss out kudos like that like some fairy godmother waltzing through the gutter distributing flower petals.
Laughed out loud at the deep, but hilariously cynical descriptions of the mother... ''her narcissism, her destructiveness, her selfishness, her failed attempts at loving us, her wounded courage ... and her attachment to ... beautiful ... things ... her treasure trove of rare antique cups & saucers...''
PRICELESS!
great stuff! Keep going. wanna see more of this kinda work here..
cheers!
js
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx again js!!! dig those flower petals big-time!
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Sharyn, I really enjoyed this monologue. It was for the most part full of some great humor. Mom knew what she wanted, knew her limitations and wasn't settling for less. You hatched a great plan between the 'OT' and your mom. Took care of the problem in one nutshell.
Great imagery throughout this piece. Well done again my friend,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Sharyn, I really enjoyed this monologue. It was for the most part full of some great humor. Mom knew what she wanted, knew her limitations and wasn't settling for less. You hatched a great plan between the 'OT' and your mom. Took care of the problem in one nutshell.
Great imagery throughout this piece. Well done again my friend,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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oh good - glad you enjoyed Jim - thx!!
Comment from volcomfury
I took a while but I read it. Your script is very interesting and witty. The artwork was fun, good writing over all. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I took a while but I read it. Your script is very interesting and witty. The artwork was fun, good writing over all. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx volcom - bless you for trying something new!
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi visionary1234
I think this captures the old folk encouter as they age and the problems their children and would be carers face in dealing with them. None of us like to admit we can't cope any longer, and once dementia sets in it gets worse.
I can sympathise with both the mother and the sisters in this, the first because I know what its like to feel ashamed of my parents and my home, and the second because I know what its like to be trapped into always being the 'reliable' one always there to take care of things, always there on demand - only difference being that I didn't need her support, she needed mine!
Patrick
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Hi visionary1234
I think this captures the old folk encouter as they age and the problems their children and would be carers face in dealing with them. None of us like to admit we can't cope any longer, and once dementia sets in it gets worse.
I can sympathise with both the mother and the sisters in this, the first because I know what its like to feel ashamed of my parents and my home, and the second because I know what its like to be trapped into always being the 'reliable' one always there to take care of things, always there on demand - only difference being that I didn't need her support, she needed mine!
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thank you so much Patrick - I think many people can find something in this story to identify with - myself included! Glad you can relate and contemplate those feelings - it means I've done my job. Blessings, and thx for reviewing! Sharyn
Comment from Slush Pile
Hello there :-)
Though I normally have no interest in scripts, I happened on this one through the plain old 'read' tab. I was feeling a little bored and your introduction caught my interest.
Well, I'm very glad I found this. This type of writing is new to me, but I enjoyed it immensely. I did as you instructed... I sat back and watched it 'play in my head' as a theater production. Very lovely. Very amusing.
I think I'll have to read more like this. Kind'da cool.
Thank you for the wonderful introduction to scripts.
Blessings,
Slush Pile
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Hello there :-)
Though I normally have no interest in scripts, I happened on this one through the plain old 'read' tab. I was feeling a little bored and your introduction caught my interest.
Well, I'm very glad I found this. This type of writing is new to me, but I enjoyed it immensely. I did as you instructed... I sat back and watched it 'play in my head' as a theater production. Very lovely. Very amusing.
I think I'll have to read more like this. Kind'da cool.
Thank you for the wonderful introduction to scripts.
Blessings,
Slush Pile
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Thx again SOOOO much SP!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did a great job writing this script about the daughter who tells about her mother wanting to go to her own home and enjoy it again.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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this is very well written, visionary, you did a great job writing this script about the daughter who tells about her mother wanting to go to her own home and enjoy it again.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx sweets!
Comment from Spitfire
Smart move to give the OT an accent. Brilliant monologue to fill in the background. I have to say my sympathies were for the mother-- a pisser of a gal. It's hard though for me to envision a single person performing this, but I know talented actors who do one man/woman shows. I've never been to one, however. Is this the same idea?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Smart move to give the OT an accent. Brilliant monologue to fill in the background. I have to say my sympathies were for the mother-- a pisser of a gal. It's hard though for me to envision a single person performing this, but I know talented actors who do one man/woman shows. I've never been to one, however. Is this the same idea?
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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yep - moi - it works spits and yes, it's a HELL of a lot of work! but fabulous fun especially with a great director! I've just submitted a full length script to PlayLab in Australia, so we'll see if they bite - it's for a 2 week scholarship to workshop my script, complete with actors & directors! Fingers crossed - my hopes aren't up, but it's a start. Have to get off my ass and start submitting to theatres. And yes, am totally open to developing some pieces with an ensemble - it would certainly save on my voice! and yes, this is absolutely the same idea! yeah! thx for stopping by!
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I'm wishing you luck. With no sets and only one actor this is a theater's paradise.
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yep - all they need is bums in seats - how hard can it be?
Comment from purrfect tale
Wow, you really touched me with this one. I was completely drawn into the story and this woman's concerns for her mother. It left me with the feeling that it was mom's last day in her own home.
She's 82 and a bit shaky on her pins(,)
Oh hi(,) Mrs Grey, just checking on you. - with direct address, if the name is in the middle you use commas before and after
Frankly(,) if I were on hospital staff I wouldn't be - Frankly is in introductory element. Key to recognizing them is that you can delete them and the sentence would still have the same meaning. The can be one word or a phrase.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Wow, you really touched me with this one. I was completely drawn into the story and this woman's concerns for her mother. It left me with the feeling that it was mom's last day in her own home.
She's 82 and a bit shaky on her pins(,)
Oh hi(,) Mrs Grey, just checking on you. - with direct address, if the name is in the middle you use commas before and after
Frankly(,) if I were on hospital staff I wouldn't be - Frankly is in introductory element. Key to recognizing them is that you can delete them and the sentence would still have the same meaning. The can be one word or a phrase.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thx Ms Prr ... will go back & take a peek! don't forget though that it's written as spoken, so a hurried hospital staffer wouldn't actually worry too much about pausing for commas! Same with "frankly" - it gives actor a chance to move focus to audience and address them, rather than jump ship straight into "if I were on hospital staff" ... this isn't prose remember ...
Comment from wordsfromsue
Sharyn, what a gift for your mom. How long ago was this? I'm a little surprised she went back to rehab willingly. My heart went out to her. To not be able to call your own shots anymore has to be so scary.
Very enjoyable script.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Sharyn, what a gift for your mom. How long ago was this? I'm a little surprised she went back to rehab willingly. My heart went out to her. To not be able to call your own shots anymore has to be so scary.
Very enjoyable script.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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This all happened last November Sue - and she's still happily now at home! Scary time for all! thx so much for stopping in to review (good to take a break from those colonoscopies I bet!) best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from MoonStoneWriter
As a director, not as a playwright, I read this. If it were performed at the little community theatre in the town I grew up in, sell-out crowds.
The humor, the human frailties of all the characters , and the personal connections would touch each and every audience member. You know how it has affected me in light of my mother's passing. I, too, have hate memories of my mother, but in the last two years of her life, the hate faded like an old photograph. If she had made it to her birthday, she would have been 82.
I hope one day, my dramatic work will be as widely read and respected as yours. You are a gifted playwright.
You were right. I truly enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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As a director, not as a playwright, I read this. If it were performed at the little community theatre in the town I grew up in, sell-out crowds.
The humor, the human frailties of all the characters , and the personal connections would touch each and every audience member. You know how it has affected me in light of my mother's passing. I, too, have hate memories of my mother, but in the last two years of her life, the hate faded like an old photograph. If she had made it to her birthday, she would have been 82.
I hope one day, my dramatic work will be as widely read and respected as yours. You are a gifted playwright.
You were right. I truly enjoyed this.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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thx again Carol! and if ever you want to perform it, let me know! you'd be most welcome!
