Going Home
NEVER underestimate 82 year olds!78 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Oh, how I can identify with the mother in this one. Each time I am hospitalized, they want to send me to a nursing home as I am in a wheelchair which apparently makes me incompetent in their eyes. They will have to drag me out of here kicking and screaming!!! I did finally agree to some in-home help which seems to have satisfied everyone at the present. But, yes, with loss of privacy for sure. Great write. This is true to life as I tried to say in all of my ramblings!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Oh, how I can identify with the mother in this one. Each time I am hospitalized, they want to send me to a nursing home as I am in a wheelchair which apparently makes me incompetent in their eyes. They will have to drag me out of here kicking and screaming!!! I did finally agree to some in-home help which seems to have satisfied everyone at the present. But, yes, with loss of privacy for sure. Great write. This is true to life as I tried to say in all of my ramblings!!! Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx so much Debbie - I hear you loud & clear!
Comment from ridinaround
I just finished the class on script writing and so thought I'd give this a go. Interesting perspective, good story, and fine dialog. I need some success, got any to spare?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I just finished the class on script writing and so thought I'd give this a go. Interesting perspective, good story, and fine dialog. I need some success, got any to spare?
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx so much ridin' ... how was the class? I almost enrolled in it myself, but was already doing another class here, and there's only one of me, dammit! thx so much for tackling my script - I'll look forward to seeing YOURS, yes???
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I posted one about my mother's passing, and am working on a screenplay of a scene in my book, One Wrong Move. The class was good, probably too basic for you. Onward thru the fog.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Great story and presumably with a fair bit of real life in it. Strikes more of a chord as my father in law is in a similar situation at the moment (although, sadly there can be no happy ending there)
Good strong message about how many people, often kind, well-meaning people, can be blind to the real person and their real needs.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Great story and presumably with a fair bit of real life in it. Strikes more of a chord as my father in law is in a similar situation at the moment (although, sadly there can be no happy ending there)
Good strong message about how many people, often kind, well-meaning people, can be blind to the real person and their real needs.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx so much kiwi - I think the message and the scenario are probably applicable to everyone at some time in their lives! appreciate your review! best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from G.B. Smith
Aloha nui Sharyn
Girl friend, this is priceless and I loved these lines (Being my age it is a wonderful thing to do a BM)
Your script reads very well and it totally deserves the 6Th star
Bear
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Aloha nui Sharyn
Girl friend, this is priceless and I loved these lines (Being my age it is a wonderful thing to do a BM)
Your script reads very well and it totally deserves the 6Th star
Bear
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Bless you Bear - both for reading, and the 6th star ... and may many more wonderful BM's come your way!
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OH SHIT
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with such elegance you express it!
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No. I am such a jerk at times, but I do have my lucid moments
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hmmm ... perhaps I should introduce you to my mother!!
Comment from Taffspride
I find this funny and poignant all at the same time. I can find little to say about it, except that it is extremely well written, and would so love to see a live performance, even with the Aussie slang. It reads/speaks well with any slang.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da (Cheers)
Taffspride
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I find this funny and poignant all at the same time. I can find little to say about it, except that it is extremely well written, and would so love to see a live performance, even with the Aussie slang. It reads/speaks well with any slang.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da (Cheers)
Taffspride
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx so much taffs! yep - I don't think the Aussie bit is too worrisome as the emotions are pretty universal, don't you think? thx so much for reviewing! best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from adewpearl
I love this spunky old woman's attitude - my sister is 80 and has been in the hospital and then in rehab after the hospital visit several times in the past few years due to heart troubles, MS, diabetes... She has the same complaints - that people wake her in the middle of the night to give her pills and that she has lost all dignity with people discussing and observing things like her bowel movements. I love the sarcastic comments she makes regarding this :-) This is so realistic and witty :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I love this spunky old woman's attitude - my sister is 80 and has been in the hospital and then in rehab after the hospital visit several times in the past few years due to heart troubles, MS, diabetes... She has the same complaints - that people wake her in the middle of the night to give her pills and that she has lost all dignity with people discussing and observing things like her bowel movements. I love the sarcastic comments she makes regarding this :-) This is so realistic and witty :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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thx so much Brooke - yes, the aging process leaves a LOT to be desired, doesn't it?!!! bless you for reviewing! Sharyn
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It sure hasn't done a darn thing for me or either of my older sisters
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me neither dammit!
Comment from RaymondJohn
This is complete enough it could stand alone. You have a very likable narrator, something I probably mentioned to you before. The issues are important and becoming more so with our aging population. The best analogy I can come up with is an aged woman used to sit out on a rocking chair every day for eight hours in her assisted living home. Her aides pleaded for her to do something else, but Ellie knew her son was coming to see her today. That went on for ten years, and he never showed up until after her death because he wanted to know how much money he would be inheriting. I am very pleased to tell you that the SOB didn't get a cent. Ellie changed her will and left it to the home. Best. Ray
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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This is complete enough it could stand alone. You have a very likable narrator, something I probably mentioned to you before. The issues are important and becoming more so with our aging population. The best analogy I can come up with is an aged woman used to sit out on a rocking chair every day for eight hours in her assisted living home. Her aides pleaded for her to do something else, but Ellie knew her son was coming to see her today. That went on for ten years, and he never showed up until after her death because he wanted to know how much money he would be inheriting. I am very pleased to tell you that the SOB didn't get a cent. Ellie changed her will and left it to the home. Best. Ray
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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well good for her! Yes, Ray, so many people think "old" people are not real people any more and that's really sad. One of my shows is actually all about aging, do you believe ... heaven knows, I have plenty of material! Thx so much for reviewing - best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from Sherry Asbury
An ellipsis is a pair of arms stretched round someone we love,
telling them how much we care and what sacrifices we will make. This is so unique and heart-rending. I read it over and over - crying for happy every time. What a joyful piece of writing that makes sunlight out of shadow. Bravo!!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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An ellipsis is a pair of arms stretched round someone we love,
telling them how much we care and what sacrifices we will make. This is so unique and heart-rending. I read it over and over - crying for happy every time. What a joyful piece of writing that makes sunlight out of shadow. Bravo!!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Oh Sherry thank you so much my dear! You've just made my morning. I'm so happy when my work reaches out and "touches" someone's heart ... and the magic '6' is a lovely bonus too! Best wishes,Sharyn
Comment from Charade
I think the opening "explanation has a type-o; "In this particular play you're going to "see" has all the parts played by one person..." I think the word "what" needs to be in there. Thanks for the disclaimer by the way.
"that they don't want her to go back to her own home/ at all." I think this has a type-o.
I love that I can see this unfolding as if I'm there, great job setting the scene for the me.
"Her house is big, beautiful, old and it's a geriatric's nightmare - flights of steps everywhere, loose paving stones ..." I like this sentence, it helps me to 'see' the problem better.
I'm really starting to feel for the old woman...great job!
"but Mother rattles around" extra space in here.
Funny!
I like how this play unfolds.
I have one question! What happens with the sisters; I mean they have POA right? This was a wonderful story, thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I think the opening "explanation has a type-o; "In this particular play you're going to "see" has all the parts played by one person..." I think the word "what" needs to be in there. Thanks for the disclaimer by the way.
"that they don't want her to go back to her own home/ at all." I think this has a type-o.
I love that I can see this unfolding as if I'm there, great job setting the scene for the me.
"Her house is big, beautiful, old and it's a geriatric's nightmare - flights of steps everywhere, loose paving stones ..." I like this sentence, it helps me to 'see' the problem better.
I'm really starting to feel for the old woman...great job!
"but Mother rattles around" extra space in here.
Funny!
I like how this play unfolds.
I have one question! What happens with the sisters; I mean they have POA right? This was a wonderful story, thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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aaaah ...the sisters come next! thx for picking up those typos charade, I'll whiz back and fix! and thx for reviewing and enjoying!
Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a superb script, V. Every detail is perfectly placed adding a wonderfully organic feel to this write. The mother's reactions and character are totally believable and, I might add, right on target from what I've seen in the nursing homes. Great job! Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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This is a superb script, V. Every detail is perfectly placed adding a wonderfully organic feel to this write. The mother's reactions and character are totally believable and, I might add, right on target from what I've seen in the nursing homes. Great job! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Thx so much Bev - so glad you enjoyed!
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You're very welcome!
