Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Something there is..."A collection of my poems
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Comment from Ralph Miller
I don't know it but I'll take a look. I did enjoy your's though; interesting rhyming pattern apart from anything else. And it made winter here seem almost warm.
Ralph
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
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I don't know it but I'll take a look. I did enjoy your's though; interesting rhyming pattern apart from anything else. And it made winter here seem almost warm.
Ralph
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
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Thanks for the nice review.
Steve
Comment from amarherig14
This version of Frost's poem is revengeful. His brother stole his love so ke killed both and they were buried beneath the snow. Very creative take on it. The art used is a plus to your write.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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This version of Frost's poem is revengeful. His brother stole his love so ke killed both and they were buried beneath the snow. Very creative take on it. The art used is a plus to your write.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your review.
Steve
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You are welcome,Steve.Warm regards,Margie.
Comment from Glasstruth
I can definitely see the Robert Frost effect here. You've captured his winter magic. Wish it was snowing here. Lately it's been 90's and 100's. The aabb pattern simple, but works effectively. Well done. Les
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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I can definitely see the Robert Frost effect here. You've captured his winter magic. Wish it was snowing here. Lately it's been 90's and 100's. The aabb pattern simple, but works effectively. Well done. Les
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you, but you haven't looked at that rhyming pattern closely enough - aaba bbcb ccdc - I have heard it called chain rhyme - deceptively simple
Steve
Comment from Hitcher
Well I think it is a kick-ass, soulful little offering mate, and it gets the big thumbs up from me, my kind of poetry friend. A thoroughly enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Well I think it is a kick-ass, soulful little offering mate, and it gets the big thumbs up from me, my kind of poetry friend. A thoroughly enjoyable read!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you! I appreciate the six stars.
Steve
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
One of my favorite poems.
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.
My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
At first I thought, "Oh boy, here we go...this better be good.''
I must say, it was. The author did a sensational job in this tribute to the master's work. Thanks for sharing your creativity here. Well done!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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One of my favorite poems.
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.
My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
At first I thought, "Oh boy, here we go...this better be good.''
I must say, it was. The author did a sensational job in this tribute to the master's work. Thanks for sharing your creativity here. Well done!
cheers
js
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you. And for reprinting Frost's poem - I have grabbed it to use in replies to the surprising number of reviewers who have never heard of it!
Steve
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Oh boy. Why, oh why am I not surprised? Disgusted. Yep. Disappointed. You bet.. But hardly surprised.
Blame it on Reader's Digest. Blame it on the teevee. I dunno. Ugh! Bet they've all heard of Lady Gaga though.
You saw it here, folks. The dumbing down of the sheeple.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Frost's poem is one of the most quoted poems - "And miles to go before I sleep" - I'm glad you had fun with your poem and it is a good read! I enjoyed it very much. The ending, although cryptic, made me smile. Frost is turning over in his grave! LOL Thanks for this - you did a great job.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Frost's poem is one of the most quoted poems - "And miles to go before I sleep" - I'm glad you had fun with your poem and it is a good read! I enjoyed it very much. The ending, although cryptic, made me smile. Frost is turning over in his grave! LOL Thanks for this - you did a great job.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I didn't really think anyone would mind and hey, about 50% of reviewers have never even seen his version!
Steve
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Oh my goodness. Please tell me that isn't so! LOL
Comment from Suzie Q
Really like this! I guess I'm the only one who's unfamiliar with the Robert Frost version:) I especially liked " You stole my love, your first mistake, Now you must pay for my heart's ache" Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Really like this! I guess I'm the only one who's unfamiliar with the Robert Frost version:) I especially liked " You stole my love, your first mistake, Now you must pay for my heart's ache" Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Far from it - many people have fessed up to not knowing it. Here it is in full, much gentler and more serene than mine with just a little 'deep and meaningful' at the end.
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.
My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
Steve
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Thank you so much for taking time to share it with me. Now I'm "in the know" :)
Comment from micci
I love the title of your poem, I have never read the poem stopping by the woods on a snowy evening but I very much enjoyed your dark poem revenge is always fun, great job
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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I love the title of your poem, I have never read the poem stopping by the woods on a snowy evening but I very much enjoyed your dark poem revenge is always fun, great job
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you. Here is frost's poem for your enjoyment.
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.
My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
Steve
Comment from jb wade
I like this very much. I read it with no pre-conceived idea. I see it as a fresh and creative piece of work. The theme is very apt. That's really the only reason God made snow.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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I like this very much. I read it with no pre-conceived idea. I see it as a fresh and creative piece of work. The theme is very apt. That's really the only reason God made snow.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you.
Did you mean god made snow to cover up the footprints of a murderer???
Steve
Comment from DALLAS01
What form is this. I noticed that the last word in each third line has its rhyme in the last of word of the first line in the following stanza. This is an awesome version.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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What form is this. I noticed that the last word in each third line has its rhyme in the last of word of the first line in the following stanza. This is an awesome version.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Well spotted - you don't see this very often - I have heard it called chain rhyme, with that third line 'linking' to the three lines in the next stanza. Here is frost's famous poem that I copied it from.
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.
My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
Steve
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That poem was one of me Dad's favorites. thanks for the info. Not sure I have ever noticed this form on fanstory before.
