Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Connie C
Honestly, Bev, this could be published! You are so good at helping us to see and know each of these individuals as well as the interactions between them. I like how you keep the element of mystery going. Chet does not appear to be the murderer, so we are left to wonder who it is. It's good that you provide a synopsis at the beginning to help refresh our memories. As always, I am soooooo impressed, my friend. Lots of hugs your way.
Connie
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Honestly, Bev, this could be published! You are so good at helping us to see and know each of these individuals as well as the interactions between them. I like how you keep the element of mystery going. Chet does not appear to be the murderer, so we are left to wonder who it is. It's good that you provide a synopsis at the beginning to help refresh our memories. As always, I am soooooo impressed, my friend. Lots of hugs your way.
Connie
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Connie, thank you so very much. Your words are really uplifting! I so appreciate your generosity with both your time and support. Honestly, you are one of the sweetest people I've ever met. Thanks for being you. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Maureen's Pen
OMG this was fabulous read. That was filled with so much I scarce know where to start. That interrogation scared the wits out of me. I always want to grab a pillow and hide at the scary parts- I'm a sap:)
But this was a well penned smooth write. It held me all the way through and I can see another murder is going to happen before they figure it out. Me trying to figure it out ahead of you writing it:) LOL
Exceptional and wow all rolled into one.
Thanks for scaring the wits out of me....
Maureen
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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OMG this was fabulous read. That was filled with so much I scarce know where to start. That interrogation scared the wits out of me. I always want to grab a pillow and hide at the scary parts- I'm a sap:)
But this was a well penned smooth write. It held me all the way through and I can see another murder is going to happen before they figure it out. Me trying to figure it out ahead of you writing it:) LOL
Exceptional and wow all rolled into one.
Thanks for scaring the wits out of me....
Maureen
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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My dear Maureen, you have absolutely made my day! I hadn't seen a post in a while and wondered if you were doing okay. Feeling alright? You know I worry when I don't see you writing.
Thank you for your generosity and wonderful insights, lovely lady. I will tell you that the next few chapters you might want to read in the daytime. Love it ... and you!
Xxx Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did a great job writing this chapter where the young rookie gets in his captain's face. and the one that confesses is not the killer
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did a great job writing this chapter where the young rookie gets in his captain's face. and the one that confesses is not the killer
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much sweetwoodjax. I sure appreciate your generous and supportive review.
Comment from Gungalo
Well it would seem that way. His prime suspect Chester has failed to describe the murder scene. That lets him off the hook. Where shall he turn? Sigh, another murder?
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Well it would seem that way. His prime suspect Chester has failed to describe the murder scene. That lets him off the hook. Where shall he turn? Sigh, another murder?
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much for reviewing, Gungalo. I appreciate the support.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Grammies
I found a few little errors you might want to edit:
- this (was) all a game
- in italics 'Chet Lapinski talks.....' I did not find this statement was verified in the interrogation a) he didn't appear to be very chatty b) oder was not mentioned and some people are fastidious in appearance yet reek of body odor so your killer's attributes need to be less vague or you have to add to Chet)
- together the two men ( which two, you mention Jana and Jolly)
- in time to prevent Detective Hutchins (s/b Hitchens)
Just a few things to start
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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I found a few little errors you might want to edit:
- this (was) all a game
- in italics 'Chet Lapinski talks.....' I did not find this statement was verified in the interrogation a) he didn't appear to be very chatty b) oder was not mentioned and some people are fastidious in appearance yet reek of body odor so your killer's attributes need to be less vague or you have to add to Chet)
- together the two men ( which two, you mention Jana and Jolly)
- in time to prevent Detective Hutchins (s/b Hitchens)
Just a few things to start
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you. Some of your points would be clarified by reading previous chapters of this ongoing novel.
Comment from God's Writer
This is an awesome part to this story. Well worth six stars. You certainly deserve all the stars in the sky. Thanjk you for tis awesome story.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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This is an awesome part to this story. Well worth six stars. You certainly deserve all the stars in the sky. Thanjk you for tis awesome story.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, Erick. I really appreciate your kind and generous review. Makes it worth the writing to read comments like yours. Warmest regards, Bev
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You deserved every one. As you know I don't flatter. I tell it the way I see it. My reviews are genuine and from the heart. I know you would rather appreciate the truth than a lie any day.
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Thanks again, Erick. And you are right on target, I do want to know how to keep writing better and better. Thanks for your honesty and friendship. Xxx Bev
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Well you ca count on me wrIting fairly/ YOU MAY NOT AGREE BUT i WILL TEL YOU IN ALL LOVE.
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Can't ask for anything more, my friend. Xxx Bev
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You have on lucky husband and children. Thank you for sharing with this child.
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You're welcome, Erick.
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Thank you!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The interrogation was perfectly handled, Bev - most impressive. It seems that Chet is lying, but while
the cops time is being wasted, someone else is likely
to be murdered.
Ron Jolly's opinion of the suspect(,) Chet Lapinski(,) had
"It's sounds like your - It sounds
Great writing, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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The interrogation was perfectly handled, Bev - most impressive. It seems that Chet is lying, but while
the cops time is being wasted, someone else is likely
to be murdered.
Ron Jolly's opinion of the suspect(,) Chet Lapinski(,) had
"It's sounds like your - It sounds
Great writing, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Margaret, thank you so much for your very generous review. I really appreciate you reading, especially since it's been a bit since I posted a chapter. Your support and sharp eye for SPAG's are always much appreciated. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Bev
An absolutely fascinating read!
The interrogation is so realistic.
Of course, knowing you, the confession is not that simple. There's much more intrigue to be revealed.
I finally had a six in the kitty!
Ron xox
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Hi Bev
An absolutely fascinating read!
The interrogation is so realistic.
Of course, knowing you, the confession is not that simple. There's much more intrigue to be revealed.
I finally had a six in the kitty!
Ron xox
Comment Written 03-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Ron, thanks so much for your very supportive review. And a special thanks for the lovely six! Chet's story doesn't add with the facts of the case. So, we're left with a very-much open case. Appreciate it! Xxx Bev
Comment from guinea
Very good chapter. The story is progressing nicely. I so love your Character Sheriff Oleson. I don't know if Mr. Lipinski is guilty or not. I guess I will soon see.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Very good chapter. The story is progressing nicely. I so love your Character Sheriff Oleson. I don't know if Mr. Lipinski is guilty or not. I guess I will soon see.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, guinea. I really appreciate your support for the chapter and continued interest. You are most kind! Bev
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Writingfundimension:
Just what a locality needs - someone trying to take
ownership of murdering someone when everything in the
authorities' guts is screaming, "Stop wasting our time
so we can go find the real killer before someone else
is murdered!"
Another fine chapter
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Writingfundimension:
Just what a locality needs - someone trying to take
ownership of murdering someone when everything in the
authorities' guts is screaming, "Stop wasting our time
so we can go find the real killer before someone else
is murdered!"
Another fine chapter
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Absolutely right on target, Jan. And it happens all too often, but that's a cop's life, I guess. I sure am learning to appreciate all they do as I bone-up for this series.
You are a very perceptive reader, my friend. And I very much appreciate that and your generosity .
Love, Bev
