Twelve
Who I really am.26 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
I have read this poem before; I do not know why I didn't review it because I absolutely love it. Perhaps it was because there is so much sadness in my life that I simply couldn't at the time. "I can see the exit door, but the funny thing is...inside I'm still just twelve years old, wanting nothing more than...well...you know.
This poem deserves six stars, but I do not have any, and I don't think I have any left to give you because of the thirty days anyway.
Sorry I didn't review it earlier...
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
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I have read this poem before; I do not know why I didn't review it because I absolutely love it. Perhaps it was because there is so much sadness in my life that I simply couldn't at the time. "I can see the exit door, but the funny thing is...inside I'm still just twelve years old, wanting nothing more than...well...you know.
This poem deserves six stars, but I do not have any, and I don't think I have any left to give you because of the thirty days anyway.
Sorry I didn't review it earlier...
Comment Written 09-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
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Dawn, thank you so much for digging into my porfolio and reading this most personal poem. I'm so sorry for your sadness. Would you like to talk about it?
Comment from Scarbrems
How lovely this is. I love the repetition of the twelve year old in the tree. Your imagery is beautiful. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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How lovely this is. I love the repetition of the twelve year old in the tree. Your imagery is beautiful. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thanks, em. So happy that you liked it. That's the real me. :)
Comment from adewpearl
Phyllis, I love the structure of this poem as you progress through stages of the speaker's life.
Excellent alliteration and descriptive detail throughout.
I like the balance of warm nostalgic tone and humor in your observations.
Many readers will identify with the speaker's attitudes toward life, the little dissatisfactions that accompany each stage and the wishes for a simpler, more magical past.
And what a stunner of a closing stanza. :-) I'm so glad I read this. Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Phyllis, I love the structure of this poem as you progress through stages of the speaker's life.
Excellent alliteration and descriptive detail throughout.
I like the balance of warm nostalgic tone and humor in your observations.
Many readers will identify with the speaker's attitudes toward life, the little dissatisfactions that accompany each stage and the wishes for a simpler, more magical past.
And what a stunner of a closing stanza. :-) I'm so glad I read this. Brooke
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Brooke, thank you so much for reading this and for the fine, detailed review! :)
Comment from guinea
This is well written i thought. The imagery is great. I could picture each scene. Your words flow nicely. Shows deep thought.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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This is well written i thought. The imagery is great. I could picture each scene. Your words flow nicely. Shows deep thought.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much for the fine review! :)
Comment from micci
I have read a lot of these I am poems for this writing prompt your so far I think is the best I have read, enjoyed reading it, well done
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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I have read a lot of these I am poems for this writing prompt your so far I think is the best I have read, enjoyed reading it, well done
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you so very much... so glad that you like it. :)
Comment from Russ Ricker
Thank you so much for this wistful journey. You are them all, especially that 12 year old sitting in the tree. This poem flowed flawlessly and beaurtifully. Thanks.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for this wistful journey. You are them all, especially that 12 year old sitting in the tree. This poem flowed flawlessly and beaurtifully. Thanks.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much! I usually don't enter contests that only last one day, but this one was SO EASY to write. I'm thrilled that you thought it good enough for six stars... thanks again for your generosity! :)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I've found it is true that most of the time we remain a child on the inside, no matter what the mirror tells us. It's weird, reliving in our minds the lives of so many of our relatives who've gone on before us. A thoughtful poem. Go luck to you. Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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I've found it is true that most of the time we remain a child on the inside, no matter what the mirror tells us. It's weird, reliving in our minds the lives of so many of our relatives who've gone on before us. A thoughtful poem. Go luck to you. Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Jeanie, for this fine review. Yes, it really does feel strange. We're all so connected. :)
Comment from Gungalo
Well your free verse poem is wonderful in that you go from a 12 year old right up through the ages to a 12 year old again. Beautifully told.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Well your free verse poem is wonderful in that you go from a 12 year old right up through the ages to a 12 year old again. Beautifully told.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the clever review! LOL! I guess I did, didn't I?
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You surely did.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your I am Poem, Twelve , is beautiful. I too wish I was twelve sitting high in a tree with my buddies! We used to play in the woods out back of my house. We liked to play war, GI joes, BB guns, ride our mini bikes, hide and seek... Life was wonderful!
GREAT poem!!! I am my father right now.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Your I am Poem, Twelve , is beautiful. I too wish I was twelve sitting high in a tree with my buddies! We used to play in the woods out back of my house. We liked to play war, GI joes, BB guns, ride our mini bikes, hide and seek... Life was wonderful!
GREAT poem!!! I am my father right now.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the wonderful review! Sounds like you had a great childhood. :)
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The best!
Comment from Bina1
To return to the simple, easy days of childhood! But I don't think I would. What a beautiful poem, all areas of a life, the changes that time brings. Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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To return to the simple, easy days of childhood! But I don't think I would. What a beautiful poem, all areas of a life, the changes that time brings. Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thanks, Bina, for this wonderful review. I wouldn't mind going back to childhood, but then I'd have to go all the way thru school and college again! No, think I'll just stay where I am, like you. :)
