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Comment from BeckyW
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Another exceptional poem Roger. You describe an aged man peering through "(his disguise)" his childish eyes as noted by his many childhood memories. I love that; what a wonderful concept. I love the elderly whose deep wrinkles and eyes tell their stories, along with spoken words if you're blessed enough to hear them. This man, in his own private world of youth, is expressing himself in your poem. In made me feel slightly emotional as I relate in so many ways. No doubt that many others will also:)

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
    Hi Becky, Thank you very much for your wonderful six star review. This poem is one of my personal favorites. I tried to reveal a little more of the scene in each verse and I'm so glad you liked it! I'll be taking a break for a while from FS, not sure how long but thank you again! You have been a wonderful supporter of my poetry and I appreciate every kind word!

    All the best to you,
    Rodger
Comment from DragonSkulls
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"The little boy peered out from the old man disguise," excellent metaphor, my friend. This is in perfect form and flow, as should any sonnet be. I'm glad to see you stuck with the 10 syllables per line. Excellent writing. Loved it. I wish you luck in the voting. /Ron

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
    Hi Ron and thanks for your wonderful review. I think pentameter is the way to go with this form too. I started writing them in tetrameter and they just didn't sound as well as pentameter. This one is not in the contest, I did not have an entry this time.
    All the best, Rodger
reply by DragonSkulls on 21-Aug-2012
    Wow, I didn't even realize you didn't get into it. I looked in your portfolio and saw this was a Kyrielle and just figured it for your contest, I guess. I feel like a heel now, lol.

    To be honest, I don't know the difference between the two meters. Could you enlighten me? Thanks R. /Ron
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
    Be glad to Ron. Iambic tetrameter just means 8 syllable lines in iambic meter and Iambic pentameter means 10 syllable lines in Iambic meter. I don't usually join my sponsored contests when they are full of requirements lol. It usually keeps me very busy just checking all the entries although this last contest gave me very few problems. Check out my latest writing prompt if you like to write nonsense poems. It's a nice break from all the rules of rhyme and meter.
    Thanks again Ron,
    Rodger
reply by DragonSkulls on 21-Aug-2012
    I tend to try steer clear of the contests that show the author's names. When I first joined the site, years ago, they didn't have any 'blind' contests. I learned over time that friends like to vote for their friends. I guess that scarred me deeply, lol. Every once in a while I'll enter one that displays the names but not often. Plus I'm not real chipper because work sucked all night long and now I have to turn around and go to bed so I can do it all again tonight. I'll give it some thought and we'll see what happens, but I might just pass on this one, R.

    Thanks for the info on the meters. Now I know. Have a great day, friend. /Ron
Comment from Joy Graham
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This is a very lovely kyrielle sonnet. We are learning about this type of poem in our Sonnet class with adewpearl. She suggested we check out your portfolio. I am a fan of 8 syllable lines in iambic tetrameter as well as the 10 syllable lines in iambic pentameter. I love meter and yours just skips along so nicely :) It is a pleasure to read your poem!

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
    Hello Joy, Thank you for your kind comments and five stars. This has quickly become one of my favorite poems. I really love the kyrielle sonnet and I usually write it in iambic pentameter, I just think it sounds better with ten syllables. With this format, one of the keys is making sure your couplet will make sense after you have written the first stanza. I have written a lot of this form. Some that I remember are: In Wakes of Passersby and Without an Uttered Word. Thanks so much for reviewing my work. Brooke is a wonderful friend and teacher. I'm currently in my third class with her and I'm really enjoying it.
    Best regards, Rodger
Comment from Maxine Kendall
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This is just marvelous, Rodger.
Very clever! I hope I've got it right in thinking that the boy is the child in all of us? As we age none of us feel much older than the child we were - in our mind that is. The body... now that's a whole different story. Lol
Your words conjure up such terrific imagery.
A perfect choice of form for this write in the Kyrielle Sonnet too.
Loved it!
Maxine xo

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2012
    Maxine! Thank you so very much for your wonderful words and six star rating. This is one of my favorites and I'm glad you liked it too. He is really an old man the whole time but what he sees in the shop connects him to his youth. Note the way I describe the boy; deep brown eyes, wrinkled smile, the cane.
    You are right, inside we always feel like a kid, well mmost of us anyway lol. Thanks again, my friend.
    all the best,
    Rodger xo
Comment from MissMerri
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I truly love this poem. It is so touching and yet not overly mushy. It is sweetly sentimental yet solid and definitely masculine in point of view. I also loved the way it brings to mind personal memories. A relatable experience, for sure.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
    MissMerri, Thank you sooo much for your wonderful review and exceptional rating! Out of all the hundreds of poems I have written in the last five years, this one has quickly become one that I cherish. It reminds me so much of my dad who died many many years ago. It is so great to have this piece validated by such a wonderful poet!
    All my best to you, Rodger
Comment from Somer
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There's a kid in everyone! Never trade your memories! I liked this one a lot, it had great meaning ! Very well done my friend :)

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
    Thank you very much! I'm glad you saw the deeper meanings here and enjoyed reading my poem.
    All my best, warren
Comment from Starlit Ink
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I like how you modified this form, and it was a nice little story. It makes one think of childhood memories of searching through old things with amazement.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
    Thank you very much! I'm glad you saw the deeper meanings here and enjoyed reading my poem.
    All my best, warren
Comment from Espresso momma
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Warren this is a beautiful poem of the child within us. I really enjoyed this. The photo reminds me of the beautiful little towns I visited in Lisbon a few years ago. Thank you.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
    Hi Roberta, Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading my poem.
    All my best, warren
Comment from heyjude
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Warren, this is wonderful. Yes, there is a child within
us and sometimes we feel like that little child looking
with wonder at life. Sometimes we are peering out beneath
that wrinkled face. I enjoyed this. Memories. I'm so
thankful God gave us memories to cherish.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
    Hi Judy, Thank you very much for your review and five stars. I appreciate you kind comments.
    best regards, Warren
Comment from MizKat
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Warren - This is a wonderfully written poem, but I think you're one of the best poets around here. I enjoyed this very much. Kat

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
    Hi Kat, Thank you very much for your kind comments and compliment! I really appreciate your support.
    all my best, warren