Life is Grand
Quatrains + Couplet15 total reviews
Comment from deb552
This is really good Debbie. No 6's yet, but worthy of one. You have opened up and shared all that you've dealt with and are dealing with so honestly; not something most people can do. It's a difficult read because of the vivid emotional images your words create. Having said that, by sharing these, you are allowing us readers to have a better understanding the different sides of you. You're also helping those who suffer from depression, and other mental diseases, as well as physical disabilities, realize that life isn't all bad, and they can get help. That's where the positive side of your poem comes in. It's almost as though you've 'cleansed your mind' of the hurtful part of your life, so you could then embrace the positive. I'm not sure what I just said makes sense, but I hope you know what I mean and that I'm saying it in a good way. xxx deb
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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This is really good Debbie. No 6's yet, but worthy of one. You have opened up and shared all that you've dealt with and are dealing with so honestly; not something most people can do. It's a difficult read because of the vivid emotional images your words create. Having said that, by sharing these, you are allowing us readers to have a better understanding the different sides of you. You're also helping those who suffer from depression, and other mental diseases, as well as physical disabilities, realize that life isn't all bad, and they can get help. That's where the positive side of your poem comes in. It's almost as though you've 'cleansed your mind' of the hurtful part of your life, so you could then embrace the positive. I'm not sure what I just said makes sense, but I hope you know what I mean and that I'm saying it in a good way. xxx deb
Comment Written 25-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Makes perfect sense to me!!! I hope people find it inspiring. All of this physical stuff is doing a number on my depression, but I keep fighting it. thanks so much~Debbie
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I'm glad i got my thoughts out in a clear way. Sometimes I over think things and then my thoughts get all jumbled up! deb
Comment from turtledove
dejohnsrid, how true. Loved the artwork and colours. Found your poem so honest, touching and helpful. Thank-you!! Hope all is well, turtledove.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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dejohnsrid, how true. Loved the artwork and colours. Found your poem so honest, touching and helpful. Thank-you!! Hope all is well, turtledove.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review and stars!!! Debbie
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You're Welcome! td
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This is a great releasing work. Sharing difficult times and disease is difficult, but I think it helps us gain strength as well.
Great written work. Overall lovely read which showcases your courage to keep going.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Edit check:
"Let me tell you this is too" // This line doesn't seem to make sense to me, missed word?
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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This is a great releasing work. Sharing difficult times and disease is difficult, but I think it helps us gain strength as well.
Great written work. Overall lovely read which showcases your courage to keep going.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Edit check:
"Let me tell you this is too" // This line doesn't seem to make sense to me, missed word?
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Yes, I did fix that. Thanks so much for pointing it out. I have the worst time proofing my own work. Hugs! Debbie
Comment from terry drake
You paint a bitter picture of aging and learning to accept what life throws at us in our old age. Your rhyme scheme is very good and the cadence of the poem was as well. there were only a few rough spots but for the most part it was grand.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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You paint a bitter picture of aging and learning to accept what life throws at us in our old age. Your rhyme scheme is very good and the cadence of the poem was as well. there were only a few rough spots but for the most part it was grand.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Yes, it is a bit bitter as I am 49 and having the problems of an 80 year old. Hope it didn't come off too strong because I do truly have much to be thankful for~Debbie
Comment from JW
Once, many years ago - in referring my life I stated that if I did not laugh, I would certainly be crying.
Reading this poem easily reminded me of that day.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Once, many years ago - in referring my life I stated that if I did not laugh, I would certainly be crying.
Reading this poem easily reminded me of that day.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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I definitely have those days. It really helps to focus on something constructive like writing. Take care, Jonathon~Debbie
Comment from zlp22
Very enjoyable poem to read. Good flow of words kept me interested, the color of pale pink was relaxing. I am glad that in the end you are not giving up.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Very enjoyable poem to read. Good flow of words kept me interested, the color of pale pink was relaxing. I am glad that in the end you are not giving up.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thanks-not ready to give up yet. I just need to whine once in a while!!! Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are so strong, I admire you. When I was going through weekly chemo treatments, one day I was down. I just felt awful and I didn't know if I could make another hour let alone another day. I looked at my oncologist with tears in my eyes and said, "I can't do this." He took my hand and said, "You need to cowboy up, if you're going to make it through." To be honest I became furious with him. Now, I am glad he didn't give into my pitty party.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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You are so strong, I admire you. When I was going through weekly chemo treatments, one day I was down. I just felt awful and I didn't know if I could make another hour let alone another day. I looked at my oncologist with tears in my eyes and said, "I can't do this." He took my hand and said, "You need to cowboy up, if you're going to make it through." To be honest I became furious with him. Now, I am glad he didn't give into my pitty party.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Yes, I have a pitty party every once in a while. I am sure you have noticed that!!! Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from linsbm
Life is grand, yes it is. Life is an open oppurtunity for everyone to take advantage. Making one's own life is such a big responsibility to make it works the best.
I like the simplicity of the language used in conveying this beautiful thought.It stimulate one's thinking and to every ones benefit. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Life is grand, yes it is. Life is an open oppurtunity for everyone to take advantage. Making one's own life is such a big responsibility to make it works the best.
I like the simplicity of the language used in conveying this beautiful thought.It stimulate one's thinking and to every ones benefit. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thank you for reviewing!!! Debbie
Comment from Sharrum
Very nice poem. I love the rhyming. I feel your message. Health tends to go south as we get older, which is very hard to accept. Excellent job with your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Very nice poem. I love the rhyming. I feel your message. Health tends to go south as we get older, which is very hard to accept. Excellent job with your poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from Ekim777
They say the body is the temple of the soul and when it deteriorates all we can do is detach our minds and our souls. What have we left, fading memories. Can we really grow old gracefully? Maybe if we fight back the shadow death we will see a light on the end of the tunnel. Is life really a long day's journey into light? Whatever the case, it is a long, lonely road without someone walking in our shoes.I like your final couplet. Keep well. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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They say the body is the temple of the soul and when it deteriorates all we can do is detach our minds and our souls. What have we left, fading memories. Can we really grow old gracefully? Maybe if we fight back the shadow death we will see a light on the end of the tunnel. Is life really a long day's journey into light? Whatever the case, it is a long, lonely road without someone walking in our shoes.I like your final couplet. Keep well. -Ekim777
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review!!! Debbie
