Comment from mystery poet

Excellent

Some days are like that it seems.
A rose garden life is not.

I like poems written in rhyming couplets
for they move along briskly and usually
have good rhythm. This is a very readable
write and it's a nice piece of work!

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2012

Glad you enjoyed!!! Debbie

reply by mystery poet on 22-Jun-2012

A pleasure!

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

The next to the last stanza shouldn't it read, What you "reap" is what you sow? Yeeees, our life's can get in a mess sometimes, all you can do is wear boots and
shovel! LOL You know all about making lemonade don't you? Good job. Honeycomb

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thanks I corrected that!!! Debbie

Comment from Eliane Rabello

Excellent

Great alliteration. I enjoyed reading your poetry, it's so intense and real. The shoveling metaphor is what I liked most. Very pertinent to the whole idea. My favorite stanza is the last one cause it screams out what we so often complain about in life.

I don't remember shoveling shit
How did my life get so full of it?

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thanks so much!!! Debbie

Comment from mk

Excellent

great poem and superb ending. i think on the second stanza line two you meant to put why this happens...would flow better..loved the ending and the meaning..

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thanks I corrected that!!! Debbie

Comment from geoniasha

Excellent

Nicely said -- although it's not the 'shoveling' that causes the problem; it's the dumping. I would suggest that you add an 's' to 'happen' in the second stanza. Thank you for sharing what, I feel, many of us can relate to. geo

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thanks I corrected that!!! Debbie

reply by geoniasha on 20-Jun-2012

You're quite welcome. geo

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

This is one of my first shoveling poems. At first I thought it was about leaves and such, and it ended up being used to shovel shit.

You raise an interesting question in the beginning. If one feels negative feelings, are they real? If not, then no feelings are real, good or bad.

Why this happen, I'm at a loss << Why this happens, ...

DW

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thank you-I corrected that!!! Debbie

Comment from mermaids

Exceptional

The last two lines are worth nothing less than a six. You surprised me here and gave me a laugh. I felt this way this morning but have come out of it. Excellent use of words.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it. I am surprised at the positive responses to it-I almost didn't post it!!!

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

LOL oh you had me laughing with your last two lines...that was a creative twist and I loved it.

Well penned Debbie, this was a beauty:)
Funny I think I was asking myself the same question:)

Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it. I am surprised at the positive responses to it-I almost didn't post it!!!

Comment from Crackerberries

Excellent

Wow this was quite a read and you know, I laughed but it's not funny... my life has a lot of that in it too sometimes and I so could relate with you on this poem.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thank you-there are difficult times in life for sure~Debbie

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Your poem is humorous, but oh so true. I have often wondered why do bad things happen to good people. It just doesn't make sense.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012

Thanks so much!!! Debbie