Water
A 5-7-5 poem about water2 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Water all around
As far as the eye can see
All beneath my feet <<< Wow! You are walking on water! You really ARE Superman!
I am assuming that's what it means. If I'm wrong, you may tell me. In any case, you did well for a first try. For ANY try! :)
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Water all around
As far as the eye can see
All beneath my feet <<< Wow! You are walking on water! You really ARE Superman!
I am assuming that's what it means. If I'm wrong, you may tell me. In any case, you did well for a first try. For ANY try! :)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2012
Comment from Glasstruth
A great effort for the first time. It sounds like there's too much water, but then it's beneath your feet. Maybe if you wrote, "All above my head" Just a suggestion. Great effort! Les
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A great effort for the first time. It sounds like there's too much water, but then it's beneath your feet. Maybe if you wrote, "All above my head" Just a suggestion. Great effort! Les
Comment Written 01-Jun-2012
