Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from rtobaygo
EXCELLENT DIALOGUE BETWEEN CHARACTERS AS WAS THE INTERACTION. SCENE DEVELOPMENT AND INVOLVEMENT EXCELLENT. YOU HAVE THE READER DEVELOPED A FEEL FOR YOUR MAIN PROTAGONIST. WOULD HAVE RATED IT SIX STARS, BUT CAN'T FOR AWHILE.
TAKE CARE,
RAY
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EXCELLENT DIALOGUE BETWEEN CHARACTERS AS WAS THE INTERACTION. SCENE DEVELOPMENT AND INVOLVEMENT EXCELLENT. YOU HAVE THE READER DEVELOPED A FEEL FOR YOUR MAIN PROTAGONIST. WOULD HAVE RATED IT SIX STARS, BUT CAN'T FOR AWHILE.
TAKE CARE,
RAY
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW. I APPRECIATE YOUR SUPPORT.
Comment from Taurean Monkey
Your chapter is well written and although I haven't read every single one, your writing style enabled me to follow the scene with ease. I recognise the characters, which always helps. I was able to engage from start to finish without any distractions - that's unusual for me! I enjoyed reading your extract. Thank you TMonkey
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Your chapter is well written and although I haven't read every single one, your writing style enabled me to follow the scene with ease. I recognise the characters, which always helps. I was able to engage from start to finish without any distractions - that's unusual for me! I enjoyed reading your extract. Thank you TMonkey
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
Have not been following, probably will start. This part is well written and flows smoothly, not knowing the background it is still obvious that the man is madly in love with the lady. A very good read, enjoyed.
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Have not been following, probably will start. This part is well written and flows smoothly, not knowing the background it is still obvious that the man is madly in love with the lady. A very good read, enjoyed.
Comment Written 29-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anisa-
Well done! Uh oh, it looks like maybe Anna knows the nurse and it's somebody she doesn't like or who is going to steal her from the hospital??
"As early morning light shown(shone) through the c"
Looking forward to the next one.
Anisa
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Well done! Uh oh, it looks like maybe Anna knows the nurse and it's somebody she doesn't like or who is going to steal her from the hospital??
"As early morning light shown(shone) through the c"
Looking forward to the next one.
Anisa
Comment Written 29-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I thought I fixed that, darn, maybe I forgot to save it.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
What shoult Troy tell Anna? How about the truth? At least insofar as Bobby will never bother her again. Details can wait, but she should know she's free. Well done, Barbara. :) nancy
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What shoult Troy tell Anna? How about the truth? At least insofar as Bobby will never bother her again. Details can wait, but she should know she's free. Well done, Barbara. :) nancy
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbara,
After all the stress, Anna is finally coming awake. i thought it was done very tenderly and didn't milk the emotions; it felt natural. Very nice job--Ted
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Dear Barbara,
After all the stress, Anna is finally coming awake. i thought it was done very tenderly and didn't milk the emotions; it felt natural. Very nice job--Ted
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, hmmm, somehow I feel something is going to happen while she is gone for several hours. Usually tests don't take you several hours. Hope I'm only assuming. Love that Troy said he loved her. I hope she heard it thru her foggy state. Good job as always.
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Barbara, hmmm, somehow I feel something is going to happen while she is gone for several hours. Usually tests don't take you several hours. Hope I'm only assuming. Love that Troy said he loved her. I hope she heard it thru her foggy state. Good job as always.
Comment Written 29-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. There's a lot of line waiting for tests???????????
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ...
Whenever your name and writing appear in my "inbox" they are the first that I click on because I am really enjoying your story.
In this chapter, there is one small change recommended ..
* You have - As early morning light shown through ...
this should be - light shone through ...
Once again, I eagerly await the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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Hullo Barbara ...
Whenever your name and writing appear in my "inbox" they are the first that I click on because I am really enjoying your story.
In this chapter, there is one small change recommended ..
* You have - As early morning light shown through ...
this should be - light shone through ...
Once again, I eagerly await the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 29-May-2012
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I thought I had changed that, but I guess I forgot to save it. Thank you for catching it.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
It's moving along very nicely, Barbara. Anna is (hopefully) well on the mend now. That's assuming the tests all come back positive.
Enjoyed the chapter. Troy is very caring - a lovely person.
Anna titled her head - tilted
Hugs, Av
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It's moving along very nicely, Barbara. Anna is (hopefully) well on the mend now. That's assuming the tests all come back positive.
Enjoyed the chapter. Troy is very caring - a lovely person.
Anna titled her head - tilted
Hugs, Av
Comment Written 29-May-2012
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Thank you for catching that. I will make the correction.
Comment from tinams
This is another well written chapter Barbara I enjoyed reading it.Having been a mother with four children trapped in an abusive relationship, I relate to your story a lot, everything seems so very realistic, so well done :) Tina
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This is another well written chapter Barbara I enjoyed reading it.Having been a mother with four children trapped in an abusive relationship, I relate to your story a lot, everything seems so very realistic, so well done :) Tina
Comment Written 29-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
