Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "part four, Chapter 20"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Bluesmoke
I like this segment of your story. Sounds like Anna's not sure how she got in the hospital. Very good dialogue between characters. The setting is well placed and keeps the readers mind vivid in the suroundings. It flows nicely with an even pace thats comforable to the reader. Very nice idea in thought.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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I like this segment of your story. Sounds like Anna's not sure how she got in the hospital. Very good dialogue between characters. The setting is well placed and keeps the readers mind vivid in the suroundings. It flows nicely with an even pace thats comforable to the reader. Very nice idea in thought.
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Well, I've caught up. Good lord's willing and the creek don't rise, I'll stay online and get my writing kicked back into gear. One can read and crochet only so long.
I wonder if there's an Indian blanket flower pattern for a chrocheted afghan?
Roberta
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Well, I've caught up. Good lord's willing and the creek don't rise, I'll stay online and get my writing kicked back into gear. One can read and crochet only so long.
I wonder if there's an Indian blanket flower pattern for a chrocheted afghan?
Roberta
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am glad you are back. I have missed you.
Comment from TKField
Well, I was worried there for awhile, but it's looks like things will soon be coming up roses for Anna, Troy and Michael. You built the suspense well, with her coma etc.
I understand, it's common for people to lose memories of traumatic events that happen to them. Can't wait to see how they tell her all about the hostage situation.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Well, I was worried there for awhile, but it's looks like things will soon be coming up roses for Anna, Troy and Michael. You built the suspense well, with her coma etc.
I understand, it's common for people to lose memories of traumatic events that happen to them. Can't wait to see how they tell her all about the hostage situation.
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Barbara
I have to tell you that this is very well written, Barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where Anna finally wakes up and carries on a conversation with Troy. I enjoyed reading it
Bear
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Hey there Barbara
I have to tell you that this is very well written, Barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where Anna finally wakes up and carries on a conversation with Troy. I enjoyed reading it
Bear
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from HulyaY
As the common conclusion goes, the first line in the first chapter of a book must be one that hooks a reader. I am hooked (as have many other obviously through whose reviews your work has been recognized as "All Time Best." I hope you are enjoying your writing as much as this one reader has. Continued success in your beautiful story-telling technique.
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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As the common conclusion goes, the first line in the first chapter of a book must be one that hooks a reader. I am hooked (as have many other obviously through whose reviews your work has been recognized as "All Time Best." I hope you are enjoying your writing as much as this one reader has. Continued success in your beautiful story-telling technique.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from abbasjoy
Another good chapter now showing Anna's improvement, which your readers are very happy about. How much damage has been done, we wonder, and what scars have been left, not just physically but emotionally and psychologically.
The dialogue flows well and we feel as though we know the characters they interact so well together.
As usual, a good job!
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Another good chapter now showing Anna's improvement, which your readers are very happy about. How much damage has been done, we wonder, and what scars have been left, not just physically but emotionally and psychologically.
The dialogue flows well and we feel as though we know the characters they interact so well together.
As usual, a good job!
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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I appreciate your kind review
Comment from fictionwriter
Another great addition the story. I'm glad to see that Anna is awake. I quite enjoyed the scene between them even if it was for just a minute. Great job.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Another great addition the story. I'm glad to see that Anna is awake. I quite enjoyed the scene between them even if it was for just a minute. Great job.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
This moved it along, but it was so short I feel like it is being dragged out. And something about the nurse did not feel right. No typos.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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This moved it along, but it was so short I feel like it is being dragged out. And something about the nurse did not feel right. No typos.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. It is short because I don't have the time to post any more. I usually post around 1500 words, but right now I don't have the time. School ends Friday so I should have more time to spend on my writing.
Comment from Allison78
I think this is another very nice chapter you have written, I just happened to find her coming out of her coma kind of anti climatic. I just think Troy would have been overwhelmed with joy at seeing her wakeup. Just my opinion!
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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I think this is another very nice chapter you have written, I just happened to find her coming out of her coma kind of anti climatic. I just think Troy would have been overwhelmed with joy at seeing her wakeup. Just my opinion!
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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She had been waking up off and on for awhile, plus they still don't know if there is brain damage. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from LadyTreana
Very good writing. This is my first reading of your story and will now have to go back and read the beginning parts. Really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Very good writing. This is my first reading of your story and will now have to go back and read the beginning parts. Really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
