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A nuclear blast destroys a deep love5 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
I was sneaking around and found your poem, Mike. I love writing these short poems and I know how difficult they can be to get your message in three lines restricted by syllable count. In other words, I think you did mighty fine for your first time!! I suppose if I had the love of my life with me, I'd want to go together :>)
Welcome to FanStory and it's always nice to meet new friends. If you have any questions about FS, please feel free to ask. I've been hanging out here for a while.
Best wishes in the contest!
Smiles,
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I was sneaking around and found your poem, Mike. I love writing these short poems and I know how difficult they can be to get your message in three lines restricted by syllable count. In other words, I think you did mighty fine for your first time!! I suppose if I had the love of my life with me, I'd want to go together :>)
Welcome to FanStory and it's always nice to meet new friends. If you have any questions about FS, please feel free to ask. I've been hanging out here for a while.
Best wishes in the contest!
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Well hi Indy! Gee, thank you for you kind words. I generally don't write poems, but when I read that I could enter with a horror theme I figured I know how to do that. I was really worried that I blew it, so it helps to hear from you and other wonderful people that I did pretty good. I will take you up on your offer to get help if I need it, and I do need it. I hope to join soon so I can enter my writing. Just broke right now, but get paid in 4 weeks. Thank you for reading my poem, reviewing it and contacting me. Your friend, Mike Limon
Comment from Rob Caudle
Mike, OK, as you may know I am not a poet but I have learned a little about how the forms work in my brief time here. You form is spot on. The subject is different then some I liked that. I am unable to help with any improvement as I am not sure it needs any good luck with the contest.
Rob
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Mike, OK, as you may know I am not a poet but I have learned a little about how the forms work in my brief time here. You form is spot on. The subject is different then some I liked that. I am unable to help with any improvement as I am not sure it needs any good luck with the contest.
Rob
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Hi Rob. Yes, based on the other replies that I received tonight, I'm being told that I did well. Considering that I write short stories, and not poems, with this being my first, I am pleased with myself. Thank you for your kind words. I am going to add you to my profile as a follower of your work. Take care Rob, and keep in touch. I just joined last night, and trying to me new friends. Mike
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cool, mike, glad you here one little word of advice, when giving 4 star reviews try to give a reason personally I am ok without but some do take offense. Go to the forums page and roam around, that it is a good way to get a fast education on the site
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Thanks Rob for that bit of advice. I guess I should explain to the writer why I didn't give them five stars, or maybe I should loosen up, and give them 5 stars. Did I do that do you? I hope not. Mike
Comment from c_lucas
If we have a nuclear war, more than love will be wiped out. This is a very thought provoking poem. What is the imminent end? Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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If we have a nuclear war, more than love will be wiped out. This is a very thought provoking poem. What is the imminent end? Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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That's for sure! The imminent threat of killing all that exsist. Thank you for your comments and review. By the way c_lucas, I am reviewing one of your stories. I saw a message that this poem had 3 reviews, and I left to see what people had written. Going back to read your story.
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You're welcome, M. Charlie
Comment from Darakhshan17
This is a good 5-7-5 line. Sometimes beautiful stories have sad endings. I dont think that the worst thing is dying together in love though. It is living together without love that is the worst thing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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This is a good 5-7-5 line. Sometimes beautiful stories have sad endings. I dont think that the worst thing is dying together in love though. It is living together without love that is the worst thing.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I agree with you. But from a horror story point of view, death is the ultimate worst thing that can happen. Life is wiped out along with the many years of love that these two people had. This is my first poem so it is rough given the guidelines I had to follow. Thank you for your review.
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For your first, this one's actually very good. Now i understand your perspective. Waiting for more poems from you!!
Comment from Lastamen
No conceivable way in which to calculate the tremendous loss that would come as a result of this magnitude of destruction. A married couple - on the brink of life and discovery - obliterated in a matter of seconds - the horror. Well done.
Till the last amen.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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No conceivable way in which to calculate the tremendous loss that would come as a result of this magnitude of destruction. A married couple - on the brink of life and discovery - obliterated in a matter of seconds - the horror. Well done.
Till the last amen.
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Thank You! Considering this is my first poem ever, and the guide lines I had to follow, it wasn't easy for me. I can whip up a horror story and go into detail with the characters, but not in a three line poem. Thank you for your comments and review. It encourages me to try my hand at more poems.
