Jerry Jing-Jang Comes to Town
A cowboy tale74 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
Well told story with strong rhymes and
vivid images.
I like the pace and rhythm as well.
Enjoyed the bits of humor in the
story too.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Well told story with strong rhymes and
vivid images.
I like the pace and rhythm as well.
Enjoyed the bits of humor in the
story too.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Thanks for the review and the good wishes for the contest. I'm so glad you enjoyed my story poem.
Comment from DIS-illusioned
"One of my Dad's tall tales
Jerry Jing-Jang Comes to Town"
Aww, ain't Daddy's old stories just great? :) This Jerry fella sounds Chinese, though.
Good rhymes and reading flow.
"Tho brave Jerry Jing-Jang never runs
He'd need his brains before his guns."
Haha! I like that. :)
"Outlaws who have been drinking beer
Don't always manage too think very clear.
Brash and bold, they learned too late,
Their hog-tied buddy, of course, was bait."
Hahaha! :)
Ha! Scaredy-cat sheriff. LOL!
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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"One of my Dad's tall tales
Jerry Jing-Jang Comes to Town"
Aww, ain't Daddy's old stories just great? :) This Jerry fella sounds Chinese, though.
Good rhymes and reading flow.
"Tho brave Jerry Jing-Jang never runs
He'd need his brains before his guns."
Haha! I like that. :)
"Outlaws who have been drinking beer
Don't always manage too think very clear.
Brash and bold, they learned too late,
Their hog-tied buddy, of course, was bait."
Hahaha! :)
Ha! Scaredy-cat sheriff. LOL!
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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His real name is Gerry, short for Gerald. I changed the first letter to make it easier for kids to sound it out. The Jing-Jang part he just made up. I'm glad you got a kick out of it. Thanks for this great review.
Comment from fictionwriter
What a wonderful little poem. I quite enjoyed this tale spun in the singsong manner. What a clever cowboy you've conjured up here. Wonder if there is truth to the tales your father used to tell you. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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What a wonderful little poem. I quite enjoyed this tale spun in the singsong manner. What a clever cowboy you've conjured up here. Wonder if there is truth to the tales your father used to tell you. Well done.
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I don't think there's much truth to them. He enjoyed telling tall tales when I was young enough to believe him. Still, it's fun to write them and he gets a kick out of them. Thanks for this great review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written with strong images throughout I enjoyed sharing the adventure very well presented regards Fuller Jill
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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This is very well written with strong images throughout I enjoyed sharing the adventure very well presented regards Fuller Jill
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your saga of the Wild West hero is delightful and well-written. Your narrative has a well-develooped plot that explains the hero's strategy and the results. Good
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Your saga of the Wild West hero is delightful and well-written. Your narrative has a well-develooped plot that explains the hero's strategy and the results. Good
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. Thanks for this great review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Kudos's Daddy. I enjoyed the story very much! It really doesn't take much thought to out smart a drunk!Thanks for sharing the story. Sure am tired of 5/7/5 poems today' Good job, Honeycomb
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Kudos's Daddy. I enjoyed the story very much! It really doesn't take much thought to out smart a drunk!Thanks for sharing the story. Sure am tired of 5/7/5 poems today' Good job, Honeycomb
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I find 5-7-5 hard to review. The review has to be longer than the poem. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Tonulak
This poem has a children's and a Western lilt at the same time. It's very musical, the "jing-jang" is kind of a stirrup sound (like when the spurs jingle in a cowboy movie). I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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This poem has a children's and a Western lilt at the same time. It's very musical, the "jing-jang" is kind of a stirrup sound (like when the spurs jingle in a cowboy movie). I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. Thanks for this wonderful review.
Comment from geetika sethi
Well written and interesting . Well I gave u a 4 only for 1 reason that it didn't catch my attention . I was not about to sit still n read n absorb it . but ven that failed then nothing would work
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Well written and interesting . Well I gave u a 4 only for 1 reason that it didn't catch my attention . I was not about to sit still n read n absorb it . but ven that failed then nothing would work
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Cindy,
This is a wonderful story poem for the contest. I was totally engaged in it from the first line to the last. I wish I had a six for you as this piece deserves at least that. I love the story of Jerry Jing-jang and I think it is true! You did a good job of telling this tale. Your rhyming is exceptional and the flow is smooth. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessinsgs, chey
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Hi Cindy,
This is a wonderful story poem for the contest. I was totally engaged in it from the first line to the last. I wish I had a six for you as this piece deserves at least that. I love the story of Jerry Jing-jang and I think it is true! You did a good job of telling this tale. Your rhyming is exceptional and the flow is smooth. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessinsgs, chey
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed Jerry Jing-Jang. Thanks for this wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Starlit Ink
I love western stories, especially about cowboy heroes, so I liked this poem. The rhyming was great, and there was a happy ending with the cowboy saving the day. You used your imagination to write an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 24-May-2012
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I love western stories, especially about cowboy heroes, so I liked this poem. The rhyming was great, and there was a happy ending with the cowboy saving the day. You used your imagination to write an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 24-May-2012
reply by the author on 24-May-2012
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I'm so glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. It was fun to write this one, inspired by my dad's old stories. Thanks for this wonderful review.
