Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Bev. It's Monday morning and I am settling in with my laptop to read your chapters. I am hooked on this story and it will be a pleasure to have an enjoyable read this morning. My laptop plays tricks on me so let me know if my rating doesn't work out. I accidentally gave someone a 3 star the other day. I never give below 5 stars. Also, the "s" key doesn't always work. If I miss any, you will understand I am sure. The laptop allows me to rest while I am reading and save back pain.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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Hi Bev. It's Monday morning and I am settling in with my laptop to read your chapters. I am hooked on this story and it will be a pleasure to have an enjoyable read this morning. My laptop plays tricks on me so let me know if my rating doesn't work out. I accidentally gave someone a 3 star the other day. I never give below 5 stars. Also, the "s" key doesn't always work. If I miss any, you will understand I am sure. The laptop allows me to rest while I am reading and save back pain.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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Thanks for reading and the excellent rating, Joy. I'm thrilled you're enjoying the story!! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Doc Holiday
So Darcy is responsible for Chet losing his job.
Very interesting that they not onlu know each other, but have worked together in the past.
I don't think he did it. It would almost be too obvious, especially with the addition of the niece. They may know something that can help with the investigation. I don't think the niece is that innocent, never did!
Sorry it took me so long to get caught up, Bev...
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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So Darcy is responsible for Chet losing his job.
Very interesting that they not onlu know each other, but have worked together in the past.
I don't think he did it. It would almost be too obvious, especially with the addition of the niece. They may know something that can help with the investigation. I don't think the niece is that innocent, never did!
Sorry it took me so long to get caught up, Bev...
Comment Written 04-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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No problem, Doc! It's nice of you to read and review. I enjoy getting your insights. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Meta~Mark
this is a crime story and a wonderful read..I love the description of the dialogue..hey your hurting me..you can see the police brutality in the characters mind..nice spion oh my god..who did it was it him or who?? excellent!
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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this is a crime story and a wonderful read..I love the description of the dialogue..hey your hurting me..you can see the police brutality in the characters mind..nice spion oh my god..who did it was it him or who?? excellent!
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Thank you so much, Metaphorical-Mark. I appreciate you stopping by and offering your generous review. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
This is a very well-written piece, and even though I haven't read too much of the previous chapters, it stands well on its own merit as a stand-alone work -- the mark of a well-constructed chapter in any book.
Great dialogue, both inner and outer and strong, believable characters.
When the reader comes to the end, it leaves them wanting to turn the page and read more right away.
well done. keep going...
cheers
js
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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This is a very well-written piece, and even though I haven't read too much of the previous chapters, it stands well on its own merit as a stand-alone work -- the mark of a well-constructed chapter in any book.
Great dialogue, both inner and outer and strong, believable characters.
When the reader comes to the end, it leaves them wanting to turn the page and read more right away.
well done. keep going...
cheers
js
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Thank you, js. I really appreciate you taking time to read this chapter and your generous review. Thanks much! Bev
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Yhis is the first I have read of this which makes it a bit difficult to review. You seem to have a good story, set the scene well and have good character development. Good luck with the rest of your book!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Yhis is the first I have read of this which makes it a bit difficult to review. You seem to have a good story, set the scene well and have good character development. Good luck with the rest of your book!!! Debbie
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Thank you so much, Debbie. I appreciate your generous review and words of support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from visionary1234
ok - you have me hooked - now I need to go back and catch up! You move the story along nicely, taking time to set the scene ... ("sunlight oozing under the window" is great)and give the precise details that really bring the scenes to life ... dialogue moves the story forward too - go for it!
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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ok - you have me hooked - now I need to go back and catch up! You move the story along nicely, taking time to set the scene ... ("sunlight oozing under the window" is great)and give the precise details that really bring the scenes to life ... dialogue moves the story forward too - go for it!
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thanks so much, V. I sure appreciate your interest and great review. How kind of you! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from guinea
Good writing. The murder mystery is capitvating. The imagery is great. Shows deep thinking. I like the caharacter of Sheriff Derek Oleson.
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Good writing. The murder mystery is capitvating. The imagery is great. Shows deep thinking. I like the caharacter of Sheriff Derek Oleson.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thank you so much, guinea - much appreciate your generous review. I like Derek Oleson, too! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from whispering fox
excellent detective story!it kept my complete interest.the characters were believable while the mysterious plot thickens!the flow of your book chapter in regards to the guilt or innocense of chet lapinski is so far unknown.i'd like to find out in the chapters forthcoming.excellent job thus far.
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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excellent detective story!it kept my complete interest.the characters were believable while the mysterious plot thickens!the flow of your book chapter in regards to the guilt or innocense of chet lapinski is so far unknown.i'd like to find out in the chapters forthcoming.excellent job thus far.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thank you much, whispering fox. I really appreciate your generous review! Especially nice to know what elements you felt worked well. That's always helpful. Hope to hear from you again sometime. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Chris Davis
A very nice job on this write. Good details and character development and dialogue. It is clear that you have a good feel for the direction of your story and the skills to take the reader with you. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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A very nice job on this write. Good details and character development and dialogue. It is clear that you have a good feel for the direction of your story and the skills to take the reader with you. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thank you so much, Chris, for this awesome review. I really appreciate the time you took to read the chapter, and your insights are very helpful. Warmest regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev... great writing. :)
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Muchos Gracias!
Comment from rwilliam
Bright overhead lights bathed his scalp in heat,--Love the visual this sparked for me! Good job!
He maintained a neutral set to his features as he handed the report to his boss.--Loved this one too! :-)
WOW, what a great chapter. I was glued to it the whole way through. Now, I see why you won these awards! Excellent writing!
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Bright overhead lights bathed his scalp in heat,--Love the visual this sparked for me! Good job!
He maintained a neutral set to his features as he handed the report to his boss.--Loved this one too! :-)
WOW, what a great chapter. I was glued to it the whole way through. Now, I see why you won these awards! Excellent writing!
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thank you so much, rwilliam, for your superb review. I really appreciate it when folks take time to let me know what they liked in a chapter. That's very kind of you! Warmest regards, Bev
