Autumn
The dreary days of Autumn illuminate the beautiful15 total reviews
Comment from Bobbi22
Autumn can be brightened so much by the colored leaves, lighting up our souls. This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Autumn can be brightened so much by the colored leaves, lighting up our souls. This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thank you for reading and enjoying.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made great use of evey syllable in this lovely haiku. Your use of imagery and alliteration is effective.
Very good
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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You have made great use of evey syllable in this lovely haiku. Your use of imagery and alliteration is effective.
Very good
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thank you so much. That is very encouraging.
Comment from MizKat
This is a very nice haiku poem about autumn. I love the picture you found to go with your well thought of words. They complement each other. Kat
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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This is a very nice haiku poem about autumn. I love the picture you found to go with your well thought of words. They complement each other. Kat
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks Kat, it is a photo I took at Bright Vic. Australia on holidays. Glad you like it.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your well-thought-of poem is beautifully written. Your wordage paints rich imagery in the readers head. The art work is stunning you used of an atumnial day.
In your 5-7-5 poem you used great alliteration with the D words.
Your satori line is very good.
I enjoyed all seventeen syllables in your 5-7-5:
"Fiery autumn leaves
Brighten up dull, dreary days
Lighting up the soul"
Comments: I wish you good luck in the Haiku writing promot contest. I would recommend your pretty poem to other readers. Keep on writing a creative pen. Nice day to you.
Missy.
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Poet,
Your well-thought-of poem is beautifully written. Your wordage paints rich imagery in the readers head. The art work is stunning you used of an atumnial day.
In your 5-7-5 poem you used great alliteration with the D words.
Your satori line is very good.
I enjoyed all seventeen syllables in your 5-7-5:
"Fiery autumn leaves
Brighten up dull, dreary days
Lighting up the soul"
Comments: I wish you good luck in the Haiku writing promot contest. I would recommend your pretty poem to other readers. Keep on writing a creative pen. Nice day to you.
Missy.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks Missy, The poem was easy because of the memory of the beautiful place in the photo. I praise God for these lovely moments when we see such beauty. I took this photo at Bright in Victoria Australia.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Writer,
This is surely a cheerful poem. I liked the picture you chose to complement your uplifting words. Good work.
Best wishes for the contest. With warm regards, W ^-^
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Hi Writer,
This is surely a cheerful poem. I liked the picture you chose to complement your uplifting words. Good work.
Best wishes for the contest. With warm regards, W ^-^
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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I took this photo at Bright in Victoria Australia. Thanks whizpurr, for reading and enjoying.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this haiku poem about the colorful season that i love the best, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this haiku poem about the colorful season that i love the best, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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I took this photo at Bright in Victoria Australia. Thanks so much for reading and enjoying
Comment from gazzagodbod
yeahh love haiku contests always amaze me these little fellars and yours is the best ive read so far thank you and all the best gazza
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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yeahh love haiku contests always amaze me these little fellars and yours is the best ive read so far thank you and all the best gazza
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks for your encouragement Gazza.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your Haiku poem, Autumn, is lovely. I really like the alliteration: dull, dreary days. I also really love the picture you have chosen to go with your poem! It is perfect!!!
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Your Haiku poem, Autumn, is lovely. I really like the alliteration: dull, dreary days. I also really love the picture you have chosen to go with your poem! It is perfect!!!
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thank you for your encouragement.
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your nature poem. It is well written and it flows well. Good alliteration of d letter and artwork choice which enhances your message of autumn.
Angel123
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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I enjoyed reading your nature poem. It is well written and it flows well. Good alliteration of d letter and artwork choice which enhances your message of autumn.
Angel123
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thank you Angel for reading and enjoying. It was a beautiful place to visit.
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is a good three line poem with concrete imagery in the first line. However, it's not quite a haiku. Haiku should be objective; this is subjective (e.g. "dreary.") The capitalization and period are odd for haiku. Haiku do not use capitalization unless absolutely necessary--Japanese ideographs do not have the equivalent of capital letters. Also, haiku should have an incomplete nature, as they started out as parts of longer poems, so periods are never used. Were this not labeled a haiku, it would be rated much higher. Nice juxtaposition of picture and poem.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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This is a good three line poem with concrete imagery in the first line. However, it's not quite a haiku. Haiku should be objective; this is subjective (e.g. "dreary.") The capitalization and period are odd for haiku. Haiku do not use capitalization unless absolutely necessary--Japanese ideographs do not have the equivalent of capital letters. Also, haiku should have an incomplete nature, as they started out as parts of longer poems, so periods are never used. Were this not labeled a haiku, it would be rated much higher. Nice juxtaposition of picture and poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks Alvin for reading and enjoying and for the insights.
