Farm For Sale
37 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is so sad. I am sure it is a reality in many situations. How do the cows catch this horrid disease? Once again you have written a wonderful short story.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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This is so sad. I am sure it is a reality in many situations. How do the cows catch this horrid disease? Once again you have written a wonderful short story.
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Hi you guys! PLEASE Forgive me this copy paste?? I must try to catch up. I so appreciate you all. Each and every word you send me is cherished and I wish I could save them all to hard copy. I mean that. Thank you with all my heart. xoxo. Susa
Comment from Joy Graham
Good writing here. You drew me in to this story and I could feel the farmers emotions and anguish. That would be a horrible thing to have to go through.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Good writing here. You drew me in to this story and I could feel the farmers emotions and anguish. That would be a horrible thing to have to go through.
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Hi and I send best wishes to you for a great week! I sure appreciate this review and also that you took a minute for me. I am sorry too, for another late thanks. NOT good. I'm trying! Love and smiles! Susan
Comment from robina1978
Roberts brother-in-law suffers from Brucellosis from a young age. Probably a blood infection as he was a vet. And you did not get it from milk anymore then. He used to feel asleep during conversations. But now his brain is seriously affected and this can't be cured. I think/feel your first paragraph might not be completely Flash: I would look if it does not need cutting a bit.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Roberts brother-in-law suffers from Brucellosis from a young age. Probably a blood infection as he was a vet. And you did not get it from milk anymore then. He used to feel asleep during conversations. But now his brain is seriously affected and this can't be cured. I think/feel your first paragraph might not be completely Flash: I would look if it does not need cutting a bit.
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Hi and I send best wishes to you for a great week! I sure appreciate this review and also that you took a minute for me. I am sorry too, for another late thanks. NOT good. I'm trying! Love and smiles! Susan
Comment from c_lucas
In todays world, we have eletrical and mechanical labor handle most of the work, but nothing takes a way the bitter taste of defeat.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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In todays world, we have eletrical and mechanical labor handle most of the work, but nothing takes a way the bitter taste of defeat.
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Hi and I send best wishes to you for a great week! I sure appreciate this review and also that you took a minute for me. I am sorry too, for another late thanks. NOT good. I'm trying! Love and smiles! Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
Oh how sad this was to read. but there weas nothing else to do. Your write touch my heart deeply with sadness and pain.
Yet the farmer knowsthings happen for a reason and tomorrow will be a better day.
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Oh how sad this was to read. but there weas nothing else to do. Your write touch my heart deeply with sadness and pain.
Yet the farmer knowsthings happen for a reason and tomorrow will be a better day.
Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Hi Cookie! I did try to make it have a good ending. I'm tired again and have errors to fix...but I'm just delighted you enjoyed this. Thank you for this review my dear friend..xoxo Susan
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Life as you know doesn't alwauys end up happy.Take care.
Comment from Taurean Monkey
Hi, great read. I like your subtle play on the 'don't shoot the messenger' idiom. It makes the reader (or me, at least) think 'oh, I recognise what the writer's done here; aren't I clever for spotting it! (I'm going to claim "Are not ...?" & "Am I not...?" as dialect because they're not grammatically correct.)
Plumb stupid - I think this is a cultural difference (I substituted it for plain stupid in my head)
I like how you've reflected the physiological change in the scene, 'the fight or flight' stance - I think it shifts the mood really well. This is a man clearly feeling under personal threat that his livelihood and that facet of his identity is in grave danger of being culled. Then, for me, Short's regret at not being younger evoked feelings of pathos. What I took from reading that short piece was: young pitted against old, educated versus hands on (good, honest) manual worker, it kind of hints at textbook knowledge versus 'life experience' gained wisdom (I might be wrong as I don't know the characters and the vet's right if his cattle are diseased). Finally, the statement that exchange made to me is that we can't escape the fact that no matter how far we've evolved or how many letters we have after our names, when push comes to shove, physiology kicks in - adrenalin, our body language changes to prepare us to fight or take flight. I guess that means that if you strip away our cars, social media and other 21st century trappings, apart from living longer and being taller, there's not mug difference between us and Neanderthal man! Your write has been very thought provoking and you probably didn't intend to convey all that, but that's what I took home! Thanks :-)
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reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Hi, great read. I like your subtle play on the 'don't shoot the messenger' idiom. It makes the reader (or me, at least) think 'oh, I recognise what the writer's done here; aren't I clever for spotting it! (I'm going to claim "Are not ...?" & "Am I not...?" as dialect because they're not grammatically correct.)
Plumb stupid - I think this is a cultural difference (I substituted it for plain stupid in my head)
I like how you've reflected the physiological change in the scene, 'the fight or flight' stance - I think it shifts the mood really well. This is a man clearly feeling under personal threat that his livelihood and that facet of his identity is in grave danger of being culled. Then, for me, Short's regret at not being younger evoked feelings of pathos. What I took from reading that short piece was: young pitted against old, educated versus hands on (good, honest) manual worker, it kind of hints at textbook knowledge versus 'life experience' gained wisdom (I might be wrong as I don't know the characters and the vet's right if his cattle are diseased). Finally, the statement that exchange made to me is that we can't escape the fact that no matter how far we've evolved or how many letters we have after our names, when push comes to shove, physiology kicks in - adrenalin, our body language changes to prepare us to fight or take flight. I guess that means that if you strip away our cars, social media and other 21st century trappings, apart from living longer and being taller, there's not mug difference between us and Neanderthal man! Your write has been very thought provoking and you probably didn't intend to convey all that, but that's what I took home! Thanks :-)
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Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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Hi there! Some of this is what I meant...and your interpretation is great! I love it...this is a perfect review...and I will work on the grammar too...just need a nap first...whew. IF only I could review like this! Wow! Thank you again! VERY good! Hug! Susan
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Hi Susan, I don't know if you need to work on the grammar, what I meant is I'm from the UK and when reading work on here, I realise some of the phrases may look odd or not read well to me, but it works perfectly well in the context the author is writing in. That means I have to do some cultural mediation and if I'm unsure whether something is spelt incorrectly (take 'mug' at the bottom of my review of your work - I'm in the countryside, on a ridge, reading and punching words out on an iPhone. I've done this walk so many times that I'm not missing out on the scenery, but it's the perfect place for me to read or contemplate because of the peaceful solitude the cutting wind when you're up high brings :-) I digress, but my point was I'm aware that spellings may be American English and not British English and that while some work may be universally accessible, others, take my poem on chocolate as an example, don't translate well out of a British context (and clumsy phrase alert: it's of a generational context i.e. if you're "my age" you should recall that Snickers use to be called Marathon, which helps the reader to seethe play on words and takes them back to their youth, I hope). What i was Plumb stupid may br
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Fat thumbs, hit save in error. I was waffling (it won't let me edit on the mobile). Plumb stupid might be fine, I have no idea. That's what I meant. There's so many layers to peel and it's for the reader to determine hoe close they may want to get to the core :-) I want to say it's a bit like a literal meaning literary analysis continuum and everyone will sit somewhere between the two points on that scale (but that sounds a bit pompous ha ha). Glad you enjoyed my review. I enjoyed reading your work and now I shall put my phone away because the biting wind is making my fingers numb and I think you said you need to sleep! Regards TMonkey
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Sounds COLD there? It's finally warming up in Indiana...I do not enjoy this state...but, I need to read some of your work as well! By your screen name I thought you would be someone young! :o) Not that it matters, but it's always interesting to see the difference in style between us like me, middle age/old, and the younger folk. Geez. KEEP WARM! I have a chill just imagining... I have really enjoyed your thoughts!! :) Susan
Comment from thmedina
excellent execution I found your passage not only engaging(especially since I grew up urban) but the visual picture was impressive. POOOR DAISY NOOOO! I really enjoyed your piece only found minor grammatical errors. Thank you very much...
1) First Paragraph last sentence: Remove the word "And" capitalize and begin "He could feel the eyes of Doc...
2)" Brucellosis was untreatable. And he knew he'd lost." either make this one sentence or two complete sentences
3)"Into the night the infected herd was shot one by one, and the dozer lifted and piled each cow on top of the one before it." either the comma or the "and" has to go. personally I believe it sounds better leaving the comma and removing the word "and".
only way I could help... the content and delivery was perfect. Thank you
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reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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excellent execution I found your passage not only engaging(especially since I grew up urban) but the visual picture was impressive. POOOR DAISY NOOOO! I really enjoyed your piece only found minor grammatical errors. Thank you very much...
1) First Paragraph last sentence: Remove the word "And" capitalize and begin "He could feel the eyes of Doc...
2)" Brucellosis was untreatable. And he knew he'd lost." either make this one sentence or two complete sentences
3)"Into the night the infected herd was shot one by one, and the dozer lifted and piled each cow on top of the one before it." either the comma or the "and" has to go. personally I believe it sounds better leaving the comma and removing the word "and".
only way I could help... the content and delivery was perfect. Thank you
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Comment Written 19-May-2012
reply by the author on 19-May-2012
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hi there!! WONDERFUL review! I promise to fix these later today! I will. TOO tired just now. I'm so glad you found this worthy...This is how we all should review! HUG! Susan
