Water Spirit
1779, Finger Lakes Region of New York31 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Thanks for your foot note, otherwise I would not have had a clue what you were writing about. This makes it more interesting. So it is near Indians land?
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thanks for your foot note, otherwise I would not have had a clue what you were writing about. This makes it more interesting. So it is near Indians land?
Comment Written 17-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Ine, and I apologize for writing so 'American'. This whole continent once belonged to the Indians, so for every year in our history, somebody lost land to the Europeans. Few stories are told about the Eastern tribes. Thank you for your interest. Peace, Lee
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Welcome Lee, always prepared to learn. Blessings and take care, Ine
Comment from Rob Caudle
Well you accomplisher your goal. I was there on the shore of the lake in the fog. I found myself wanting turtle to understand that bravery was not there issue but survival. I was told to pop over and give you a read IndianaIrish sent me this way. I owe her a hearty thank you. A really well told tale. I still feel a bit damp from the fog.
Rob
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Well you accomplisher your goal. I was there on the shore of the lake in the fog. I found myself wanting turtle to understand that bravery was not there issue but survival. I was told to pop over and give you a read IndianaIrish sent me this way. I owe her a hearty thank you. A really well told tale. I still feel a bit damp from the fog.
Rob
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Rob. I'm delighted you enjoyed my story, and could see through the fog to my point. I appreciate. And I will thank Indy for sending you my way. Peace, Lee
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I've said it before and I'll happily repeat myself. You should teach history. You have a way of presenting it that pulls in the human element, the reality of it. It's always a unique angle, putting us in the picture as bystanders, watching what's going on.
Great piece, Lee. I love the references to the Spirit's Handprint. Now I know where the Finger Lakes got their name.
I felt sorry for Hump and totally admired him at the same time. I had to smile at the name you chose for him! ;O)
It's always a pleasure, mon ami.
Av
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reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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I've said it before and I'll happily repeat myself. You should teach history. You have a way of presenting it that pulls in the human element, the reality of it. It's always a unique angle, putting us in the picture as bystanders, watching what's going on.
Great piece, Lee. I love the references to the Spirit's Handprint. Now I know where the Finger Lakes got their name.
I felt sorry for Hump and totally admired him at the same time. I had to smile at the name you chose for him! ;O)
It's always a pleasure, mon ami.
Av
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Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Av. Actually, I would like to teach history--but always from a personal point of view---history from a pointilist's perspective. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Big Head or Hump, I answer to either. Peace, Lee
Comment from Spitfire
A hump-backed protagonist expelled from his world, devoting his life to helping the Indians--outcasts too-- to protect their world. Wonderful build-up of characters, a rhythm that flows like the natural world. Direct dialogue--no words wasted. An awesome story, my friend. Here goes my last six.
xxShari
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A hump-backed protagonist expelled from his world, devoting his life to helping the Indians--outcasts too-- to protect their world. Wonderful build-up of characters, a rhythm that flows like the natural world. Direct dialogue--no words wasted. An awesome story, my friend. Here goes my last six.
xxShari
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Shari, for for your galaxy---and your last one, too. Ever since I read The Leatherstocking Tales this era has fascinated me. The challenge was to come up with a character totally unlike Natty Bumppo. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
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That's a clue to one of your past lives.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, humpwhistle, you did a great job writing this story about the fight of the iriquois, i enjoyed reading this and i loved your author notes as well. great imagery and emotion throughout.
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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this is very well written, humpwhistle, you did a great job writing this story about the fight of the iriquois, i enjoyed reading this and i loved your author notes as well. great imagery and emotion throughout.
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Sweetie. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from pattipac
To bad you don't write history books. Students wouldn't want to put the book down. Too many dates, too many facts and not enough realism in our books today. Your story of two Indians; one a deformed outcast and the other a leader of a tribe have bonded in an unusual way. Lives are saved because Hump tells the only friend he has of the approaching American army. Well written story. Ever thought about compiling your version of some of our nation's actual history in a book of your own for middle school and/or high school students?
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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To bad you don't write history books. Students wouldn't want to put the book down. Too many dates, too many facts and not enough realism in our books today. Your story of two Indians; one a deformed outcast and the other a leader of a tribe have bonded in an unusual way. Lives are saved because Hump tells the only friend he has of the approaching American army. Well written story. Ever thought about compiling your version of some of our nation's actual history in a book of your own for middle school and/or high school students?
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Patricia. I completely agree with you about the dreariness of our history texts. I like your suggestion of compiling a book. Or even augmenting existing texts by interspersing these 'personal history' stories. Thank you so much for your attention and generosity. Peace, Lee
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Where is a six when I need it?
Lee, you've made this tiny bit of history a human struggle rather than a military campaign. Defeat on a scale Turtle cannot even imagine is coming and only Big Head sees it. His paddle is as heavy as his heart, but all he can do isn't nearly enough.
You've done a wonderful job setting the scene and building the characters. If they didn't really live somewhere other than in your imagination, they should have.
:) Nancy
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Where is a six when I need it?
Lee, you've made this tiny bit of history a human struggle rather than a military campaign. Defeat on a scale Turtle cannot even imagine is coming and only Big Head sees it. His paddle is as heavy as his heart, but all he can do isn't nearly enough.
You've done a wonderful job setting the scene and building the characters. If they didn't really live somewhere other than in your imagination, they should have.
:) Nancy
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Nancy. Yes, I like this 'pointilist's' view of history---zoom in close and see the dots. I'm so glad you connected the dots. Peace, Lee
Comment from c_lucas
The same Indian Nation form of government formed our constitution. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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The same Indian Nation form of government formed our constitution. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Charlie! You know your history, man. Were you there?
Peace, Lee
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You're welcome, Lee. I was a cripple young man with a passion for the written word. Google Tecumseh - The Indian's George Washington -He almost succeeded in uniting the Indians against the whites.
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Yes, Charlie, we share an affinity for this history. I've read quite a bit about Tecumseh (and his treacherous half-brother). Even before Tecumseh, King Philip of the Wampanoag tried to unite the Eastern tribes, and almost succeeded. So many great stories!
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His half brother was jealous, not treacherous.
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Check out the Apaches' test for manhood.
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I have also read about the Apaches.
The ultimate warrior.
Off topic, but I've always been interested in writing a story about the disappearance of the Anasazi. Any insight?
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The Anasazi assimilated with other tribes, especially the Zuni and Hopi. They were driven out of existance by the more war-like Navjos and Apache.
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I'm not so sure, Charlie. If I'm correct, the Anasazi pre-date those other tribes. It seems more likely that the Zuni and Hopi are distant remnants of the Anasazi.
I need to brush up on my research. Still, I like the mystery of the disappearance. I'm a romantic at heart.
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The Anasazi were first. This may help you.
http://www.ehow.com/about_5373418_anasazi-indian.html
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Thanks, Charlie. I like a good discussion in the morning. Lee
Comment from MumEsGirl
Brillaint Lee, I have always loved this period of history. It saddens me that so much wrong was done to people being hounded and banished regularly.
Suppose it reminds me of the plight of the Irish too
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Brillaint Lee, I have always loved this period of history. It saddens me that so much wrong was done to people being hounded and banished regularly.
Suppose it reminds me of the plight of the Irish too
hugs
kate
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Kate. This period has fascinated me sine I read The Leatherstocking Tales. These sad stories play themselves out in every land. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very interesting characters you have created for this bit of fiction tied to an actual event. I was not familiar with the story of this tribe so I thank you for posting this story. Good writing throughout.
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Very interesting characters you have created for this bit of fiction tied to an actual event. I was not familiar with the story of this tribe so I thank you for posting this story. Good writing throughout.
Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you, Phyllis. The Iroquois Conferderacy was one of the strongest alliances in Eastern America. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
